writing-injuries

I should never be allowed to write for a cartoon series, because if I did I’d include all sorts of stuff just to mess with the sort of folks who like to speculate about the backstories of children’s media.

Like:

There’d be a character with a large, conspicuous facial scar. It’s not there in childhood flashbacks, so clearly they must have suffered it at some point between then and now, but it’s just plain never addressed.

Two major supporting characters have identical designs apart from their hairstyle and clothing, and are played by the same voice actor. No situation ever arises that would require them both to be present in the same scene, so the question of whether they’re related or one character with a dual identity or what never comes up.

A couple of supporting characters have a focus episode where they go off on their own little adventure for a couple of weeks. When they return home at the end of the episode, the protagonist now has, like, a prosthetic hand or something. When they express concern, the protagonist indicates that they’ll tell them the whole story later that evening - and then the episode ends. The change to the protagonist’s character design proves to be permanent, but the audience never does find out what happened.

ALL I CAN THINK ABOUT is Shiro doing a cool move then Keith asking him to teach him so Shiro agrees but needs Lance to help demonstrate

Lance is like sure bc who doesn’t wanna be tossed around by a muscley space daddy.

So Shiro does the move on him but he either underestimates his own strength or has some kind of flashback thing and ends up dislocating/or even breaking Lance’s arm in the process BYE

anonymous asked:

So it's obvious that trying to knock people out is mostly unrealistic and often times lethal. But what about when someone is tired from their injuries? Is there a difference between passing out and being knocked out? Where's the line? Can trauma from head hits not knock someone out, but result in passing out? Can being knocked out for more than a few seconds be bad news, but passing out for hours just be regenerative, and if so what would cause that distinction to physically manifest?

The distinction between passing out and knocking out is very simple:

1) Passing Out: Your body is so tired that it can’t go on.

2) Knocking Out: Someone else is traumatically forcing your brain to rapidly shut itself off by convincing it that its dying.

When you’re talking about hitting someone in the head as opposed to strangulation, this generally means a concussion. They have hit your head so hard your brain has bruised itself against the inside of your skull and you have now gone unconscious. When you punch someone in the head, you have zero control over what actually happens to them. You can hope, but you can’t control it. In comparison to a choke hold, where you have almost total control over their body and can feel for the moment they go limp (and a mistake is still going to potentially end their life), it isn’t worth it as a tactical choice.

Humans are persistence predators, they can go and go and go for a very long time. You have to work pretty hard to physically exhaust them to the point where they’ll collapse on the battlefield. Their brain/body will usually stop them long before that point arrives. When you’re talking about combat, they’re far more likely to die before they ever reach a point of total exhaustion. We’re talking days without rest, the kind you’re only ever likely to encounter in mass battles or with a character who is being hunted.

The truth is that if you see a character who has been consistently knocked out multiple times on screen, they’d either be suffering from serious damage to their brains or dead. Most of them would be dead. If you ever feel like testing the theory out, go check out the late life prospects for boxers and football players who’ve sustained several concussions over the course of their careers.

The whole “knock someone out to get rid of them” is a Hollywood trope built for narrative convenience. The actual process of physically subduing someone is long, drawn out, and takes a great deal more energy and effort than a one, two punch or a knife to the gut.

The “Knocking Out” Contrivance in media acts like character death but without the audience having to evaluate the protagonist’s morals or the narrative’s values. They maintain their “good guy” street cred, and the audience doesn’t have to ask the questions. We switch easily from one scene to the next without any of the hoopla. The audience gets their action sequence and no one needs to feel bad. It’s a bloodless death. Or it’s a scene transition, or someone’s been taken prisoner without the author having to figure out how they move tie them up, move them, and get them from Point A to Point B. (Nevermind that it’s actually much harder to move dead weight than it is someone who is conscious.)

It’s lazy.

No, yeah, it is.

It’s there for shock value when the protagonist is taken prisoner.

Still, if you want to use this narrative contrivance in your story you can. No one will stop you. The vast majority of general audiences won’t question it. Judging by the number of questions we’ve received about this topic alone, people do commonly think the knockout genuinely works as a tactic for subduing the enemy. However…

The “Knockout” is prevalent in media because it is a convenient narrative tool.

If you’ve got a burning need to use it then use it, just don’t sit there and try to say it’s “realistic” or safe after the fact. It isn’t. Accept the narrative knockout for the bit of smoke and mirrors it is, and move forward.

It’s part of a collection of tropes that I like to call “Feel Good Violence”. They have no relationship to reality or responsibility, but they’ll make the audience feel good and the character seem powerful. It is “Feel Good”.

So, that’s it. I have nothing more to say that we haven’t covered in previous posts about head injuries. Unless @scriptmedic has anything they’d like to add, we’re done with the topic for now.

-Michi

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riddikulus-obsessions  asked:

Hey hi! Sorry to bother you, but I'm stuck [again. *sigh*] and need literal professional help, and so here I am. I have a character who's lame on one leg at the moment -- person A -- and I'm having issues trying to figure out how to write Person B helping her walk and get used to her leg and what not, and I'm having trouble trying to...write, basically, her trying to walk and struggling with the leg, like what it feels like [sorry that this is really confusing!!] cuz it's written in first---

person and I know quite have much experience with being one-legged so I guess what I’m trying to ask is have you any idea how to write something like that? Again, sorry for bothering you, I wouldn’t be asking if i wasn’t at a brick wall. Love your account and love you, by the way. You’re so freaking helpful <3

I think that this post likely has a decent amount of reference material on the subject!

anonymous asked:

Hey, ive looked everywhere for help with this but found nothing, so i thought id ask here. Sorry in advance if im in the wrong place. Im basicly writing a scene where a character falls off quite a low bridge over a road and lands on a passing car, but im not sure how serious his injuries would be? Im expecting bruising and broken bones but im not sure where and what else? Thanks in advance!

You’ve come to the right place! And thank you for the question. As far as I can tell, it’s blunt force trauma that you will need to be researching. Someone who falls from any distance onto any hard surface–a car being a hard surface–will likely bruise, fracture, and break bones upon impact. First, you’ll need to decide if the character lands on their back or their chest. This will determine what they break and bruise and how the angle of their body collides. For example, if they land on their front, they may bruise or break their ribs, but they also might have a better chance of breaking their fall with their hands–perhaps leading to broken or bruised bones in their hands and arms, but this could save a lot of impact on the rest of their body. Depending on if they land on the windshield (and if they break it) they then might have cuts from the glass. 

Basically, it will be up to you: you choose how they land and on what body parts, at what speed, from what distance, and how hard. From there, you can do your research on broken bones, bruising, etc. As long as your character is injured in some way and you keep it in the realm of possibility–for example, don’t have them fall several stories and only have bruises, or fall from such a height that it would instantly kill them but you only give them broken bones–you can interpret their injuries as you see fit. 

Kanan’s Injury Arc

A good injury/recovery arc shows us what a character is made of. How do they deal with the pain? Do they overcome it or succumb to it? Can they adapt to their new disability enough to survive the challenges of the plot? What sort of hero are they?

Maim Your Characters by @scriptmedic lays out the step to an injury/recovery storyline. 

  1. Inciting Injury - The moment and manner in which the injury occurs
  2. Immediate Treatment - What the character does in the immediate aftermath to feel better and avoid further injury
  3. Definitive Treatment - Care the character receives to begin the healing process
  4. Rocky Road to Recovery - Challenges the character faces during the healing and how they respond 
  5. Big Test - Challenge related to the main plot which the hero must overcome while still injured
  6. New Normal - Moment when the full extent of the character’s disability becomes apparent and the character internalizes it

Using this rubric, let’s examine the arc of Kanan’s injury and why it falls flat.

  1. Inciting Injury - Maul slashes Kanan in the face with a lightsaber, blinding and burning him.
  2. Immediate Treatment - Kanan puts on a Temple guard mask, kicks Maul’s ass, get’s Ezra, and gets the hell out. 
  3. Definitive Treatment - Does the bandage count? We never see it’s application. We never have an explicit discussion of the extend of his injuries. By and large, his healing process is left unsaid, un-shown, and left to the viewer’s imagination.
  4. Rocky Road to Recovery - By the time we pick back up with Kanan at the start of season three, he has already adapted to his blindness and is able to navigate the world around him with out much difficulty. He is still suffering from the psychological effects of his blinding (anger, grief, fear), and his conversation with Bendu in “Steps into Shadow” is the extend of his psychological recovery narrative. After talking with Bendu, Kanan becomes aware that he has feelings which are negatively effecting his behavior and relationships and this helps him to set aside said feelings so he can help his loved ones.
  5. Big Test - Kanan rescues Ezra from the falling reclaim station.
  6. New Normal - Kanan is blind, but seems to have no problems functioning. He is able to navigate normally, fight with a lightsaber, and accurately fire a gun. His inability to read or see holoimages is never brought up and he largely behaves as though he had no disability at all. After “Steps into Shadow,” his psychological issues are gone.

As an injury recovery story, Kanan’s feels sort of hollow. We never see him struggle with the practical effects of his blindness. The Force is basically a massive cheat which allows the writers to ignore the real-world implications of his injuries. Even his psychological damage is oddly blunted. The other characters tell us that he has pulled back from the mission, but we don’t actually see it. We see him talking with the characters he normally interacts with but, if anything, those characters pull back from him. Either way, Kanan is able to get over his issues in the space of one episode.

So why is Kanan’s recovery arc so oddly truncated? Because it was never about Kanan; it was about Ezra. When the characters discuss Kanan’s injury, it’s always discussed in relation to Ezra. Hera urges Kanan to reassure Ezra Kanan doesn’t blame him for what happened. Kanan tells Bendu he’s concerned how his blinding effects Ezra’s behavior. Kanan and Ezra discuss how Kanan’s blinding makes Ezra feel. Ezra, Ezra, Ezra.

Kanan’s injury is about showing us what Ezra is made of. Can he function without his mentor? Will he make the right choices without Kanan keeping him in line? What will he do to avoid feeling the pain and guilt of being the cause of anyone else’s injury? Will he take revenge? What will he learn from what happened and how will he grow? 

The problem is, even Ezra’s recovery arc is truncated. By the end of the first episode, Kanan is back to offer Ezra his guidance. It’s almost like the writers just wanted an injury to get Kanan out of the way at the end of season two so Ahsoka could face Vader alone without actually thinking through the larger implications of what they had done for any of the characters. Oops.

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i wrote a fanfic for the first time in months oh my god.
dedicated to @taylor-tut​ because it’s a whumpfic and she’s the one who inspired me to write again
ofc this is gonna be actual garbage because i havent written in forever but like,please enjoy?? i guess LMAO
1.5k words, whump. nongraphic description of injury. written at 3 in the morning. lance is very sarcastic in this but that’s probably because im sarcastic 25/8 and it’s bleeding into my writing. fuck.
fic is under the cut :)

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anonymous asked:

(Same old deseace anon) It's okay you can take your time to answer this. Your health is much more important than this, after all! I'm having trouble picking a decease, actually... I've thought about it and I still can't find anything, and I thank you so much for taking your time to help me!! I really appreciate it!!

Hi again, love!  I’m very sorry for the wait, but I think I’ve found something that will help you…

Coming Up with Illnesses for Your Characters

WebMD has a feature called the Symptom Checker, which is actually pretty awesome!  You start by entering your character’s gender & age range (to increase accuracy) – then it gives you a full body model (I winked out a sensitive area), with body parts to click on and expand.  Here’s an example:

Each symptom you click will add to the list in Section 2, which screens the WebMD database for compliant illnesses, diseases, disorders, etc.  Some symptoms will prompt questions to get more information:

This gives you more of an idea of how the symptoms affect your character’s daily life.  Once you’re finished, Section 3 will give you a list of possible conditions, listed by accuracy of the match.  For example: I started the test with bruising and color change (they were at the top of the list) and added headaches, and I wound up with these results:

So.  Give this a shot – start with the symptoms you want (I believe you mentioned headaches & general chronic pain?) and maybe add a few more, then see what you come up with.  You’re probably going to need to be more specific for the engine – because a lot of diseases cause chronic pain and headaches, which made this question nigh impossible to answer.  But hopefully, this is a better answer than I could’ve brainstormed!

Again, sorry for the wait!  I wish you great luck with your story, love :)


If you need advice on general writing or fanfiction, you should maybe ask me!

My goal in fandom life is to take characters who probably have permanent brain injuries and write them so.

Concussions are serious and often result in lasting if not permanent damage, folks! Multiple concussions make permanent damage that much more likely! If you are knocked unconscious you have a serious concussion and will not be okay when you wake up, even if you’re only out for a few seconds! You can even get a serious concussion and stay conscious (my personal go to move)!

Brains are tricky things and when they get hit things happen!

anonymous asked:

Hey could you maybe write another physical injury/hurt/comfort fic? I'd really need some comfort and the only way my mind accepts it is if it comes because of physical pain.It's like non-physical pain isn't 'worthy' of comfort for my mind.Logically I know that's stupid but my feelings still beg to differ, if that makes sense.And not even that works in real life lol. I ended up in a hospital a couple months back and I refused to let anyone visit and insisted to help out everyone. My mind sucks :(

She’s not wearing her vest when she gets shot.

She’s not wearing her vest and  the bullet just misses collapsing her lung and she’s in surgery for eight hours.

Eight hours during which it takes the combined strength of the Martian Manhunter and Supergirl to keep Alex from torturing and killing the man who shot her.

Despite their unearthly strength, Alex still gets a few solid hits in.

She tries to wash off most of his blood before they finally tell her that her girlfriend is in recovery, that she can go see her (J'onn and Kara had delivered a few carefully worded threats about the hospital’s “family only” policy ahead of Alex’s arrival, mainly to prevent Alex from straight up murdering a nurse or physician’s assistant).

“Danvers.”

Maggie’s voice is groggy and unfocused, but it’s her voice, it’s her voice, it’s her voice.

“Hey.” Alex’s voice is hoarse from eight hours of screaming and raspy with unshed tears and quaking with she’s alive, she’s okay, she’s okay.

“You look like you’ve been through hell,” Maggie whispers like she’s not the one with oxygen tubes in her nose and IVs in her veins and stitches holding her torso together.

“You were touch and go for a while,” is Alex’s only explanation, and tears flood Maggie’s eyes.

“I’m sorry.”

“What? No. No, Maggie, you have nothing to – why would you – Maggie, please don’t apologize, I should be, I wasn’t there to protect you – ”

“It was a routine patrol, Danvers. It’s fine. I’m fine. I’m not going anywhere, okay? I’m fine.”

And she is, she is – Alex has to repeat it like an unending mantra in her head – but her recovery is going to be long, and if Alex thought Maggie was stubborn before, she reaches a whole new level with this.

Because she’s not supposed to walk unassisted.

But Alex catches her getting up to go to the bathroom alone in the middle of the night because “you looked so peaceful sleeping, Danvers.”

And she’s not supposed to change her own bandages, but Alex catches her trying anyway, because “Why should you have all the fun, Danvers?”

And she’s supposed to take her pain meds regularly, but Alex finds the bottle just as full as she left it when she headed out to the DEO, because “They get me loopy and it’s whatever, it’s just a flesh wound at this point.”

“Maggie. I need you to listen to me, and I need you to try and hear me. Okay?”

Maggie gulps because she thinks she knows what’s coming, and her lip trembles and she clenches her jaw because who wants to be with someone who’s gonna take so long to recover from a stupid injury, who wants to be stuck in the house when she could be playing pool, making out, with someone else?

Someone who’s not scared of getting addicted to the pain meds, someone who doesn’t need the damn things to begin with?

“I know you don’t like talking about yourself. And I know you don’t know how to be taken care of. Because I don’t think anyone’s ever really taken care of you. But I want to, Maggie. I want to take care of you. That’s what I’m here for. But I need you to not sabotage that, okay? You have to let your body heal, okay? You have to try and trust me, just a little bit, just enough to take care of you while you’re still healing up. And then you can go back to pretending you can kick my ass at sparring.”

“I can, I can do it right now, Danvers – ”

Alex laughs and Maggie cracks the first real grin she’s had in days.

“You’re not mad at me?”

“Maggie, how could I possibly be mad at you?”

Maggie’s lip wobbles and her jaw clenches and she looks away.

“I’m all needy, and… and boring.”

Alex sighs and lays down next to her, tossing the covers over both of them and propping herself up on a stack of pillows. She grabs at the remote and puts her arm around Maggie’s shoulders and snuggles her close, flipping on Netflix as she kisses Maggie’s temple.

“Mandatory bed rest, Netflix, comfy pillows, and an even comfier girlfriend? How could I ever be bored, Maggie?”

The next time she has to go to the bathroom in the middle of the night, she pokes Alex awake timidly and lets her help her hobble inside.

The next time she has to change her bandages, she watches how gentle, how loving, how attentive, how skilled, Alex’s hands are, and she makes Alex blush with a series of comments about her hot doctor girlfriend.

The next time she needs pain meds, she lets Alex regulate her amount and makes sure she eats and has plenty of water.

And the next time she feels like she doesn’t deserve to be taken care of, like it’s just a flesh wound and she should be able to take care of it all herself, she lets Alex kiss her and whisper sweet everythings in her ear, and she lets Alex help her heal.

anonymous asked:

When I was 11 and training in martial arts (internationally​ competitive and consistently​ placed in every competition) I had to spar against an adult in clads for practice and did break their ribs with a well placed kick and because they'd forgotten their chest padding. So, just speaking from personal experience that a child could break an adults ribs, but I was a very highly trained kid who'd been in karate for several years at that point.

Well, that was the point of my response. The character in question had no training. You know as well as I do what someone with no martial arts training throwing a kick looks like. What chances would you give them in a managing to successfully perform the technique in a fight for their life? The odds are not in their favor.

Just from my experience teaching martial arts, the number of kids who could what you did at age eleven in a sparring match is tiny. Possibly by dumb luck. If you competed internationally then you were obviously in the top tier, and that puts you in a league far beyond what most kids are capable of. Most adults too, for that matter.

Consider though, the amount of time per day you spent training for your competitions in comparison to your classmates including those in whatever school you went to. In all the karate students in all the world, you were probably in the top percentile of a select group that ever makes it that far. I can list on one hand the number of martial artists I’ve known who went to international competitions. That’ll really skew your perspective.

And, of course, the chances of sparring injuries increase substantially when we forget our pads.

While we’re on the subject of injuries:

My brother almost lost his leg, for example, when he decided to throw a roundhouse kick at Starke when they first met. My brother was eighteen (and a fourth degree black belt, who should know better) and Starke had police self-defense training from a cop in Wyoming when he was a kid. The cop was a little on the crazier side and taught small children the standard joint breaks they were teaching at the time to regular officers. One of them was the defense against the roundhouse kick, which includes a knee break. My brother came very close to walking with a limp for the rest of his life. Instead, he went on to become a boxing national champion in the welterweight division.

Those of you who’ve heard about my brother before might remember the time he almost lost an eye when our instructors were dumb enough to let two young black belts spar with UFC fiberglass gloves and perform head blows. To this day, he is (just a little) walleyed.

Then, of course, there’s the story I got off Starke from one of his karate friends in college. The two brown belts that the black belts let spar without restrictions and each of them ended up with a broken leg.

Not everyone highly trained is smart or responsible. Sometimes, they’re really, really dumb. Or not paying attention. Or criminally negligible.

Let this be a lesson to every writer out there who wants to write a “No Pads” sparring session with beginners or… just in general. There’s a really good chance that if no one’s paying attention someone will be leaving with broken bones even if the match started with the best of intentions.

This also isn’t counting what happens when the kids decide to spar and no one with sense is there to stop it. That happens too.

And then there’s the part that’ll horrify some of the readers out there, which is martial artists swap these kinds of stories around with each other and laugh about it after the fact. The explanation for this behavior is injuries get normalized when you’re in a culture where the chance for experiencing them is high. This happens with soldiers and cops too, in regards to their own. Then martial artists, soldiers, and cops will swap these stories with each other, because its one of the parts of all three cultures which cross over. It’s like the stories you tell about family vacations, and stupid things your friends did, except its about breaking ribs, dislocating joints and the time you watched someone’s leg turn into a screw. Panic in the moment, but funny later.

If you’re outside that culture, the casual disregard will sometimes sound absolutely bonkers. That casual attitude, however, is a nice tell for someone who’s been in the business awhile. The chance being injured or seeing an injury happen on a training mat or walking the beat is something you’ve adjusted too. Not that you want it to, but you’ve seen it. Plus, you’re getting little minor injuries all the time which helps when it comes to handling them.

Figuring out how to present various normalized mental states for characters of different backgrounds is hard because we’re so used to thinking about our state of normal. The problem is everyone’s version of “Normal” is different.

-Michi

‘One Man Town’ A vld Fanfiction

Prompt: Torture

Wordcount: 3179

Characters: Lance McClain, Pidge Gunderson

Ship: N/A

Title: One Man Town

Goddamn. This one took ages. It’s one of my faves tho. of the things I’ve written this week. Apologies to Lance in advance. 

Hope you enjoy!


Lance is woken by, what at first sounded like menial chatter, then he observes the hard edge to it. Slowly, he realises the voice belongs to none other than Pidge, and the second voice…he doesn’t recognise. With severe effort, he opens his eyes, at the same time attempting to focus on conversation.

“-hurt! He needs medical treatment!”&#157; Pidge yells to the other party, kneeling on the floor, protectively, over Lance.

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More Injury Prompts/Starters

“You made it really far for being in such bad shape, you’ve earned a rest.”

“I think I can stitch you up. I mean, I know how to knit hats…”

“All you have to do is bite down on this, I’ll take care of the rest.”

“Have you been bleeding this whole time!?”

“Bad news, no ice for your sprain. How about defrosting frozen peas?”

“What do you mean the first aid made it worse!?”

“You’re not slick, I know you’ve been limping.”

“I’m so sorry, I didn’t realize you’d get hurt!”

“I’m begging you to stop bleeding, I’m starting to get scared…”

“Can you see anything? Anything at all?”

“What the hell did you do, reach into a fire pit!?”

“The more you move, the more it’s going to hurt.”

“Your bruises kind of look like a map.”

“Exactly how hard did you hit your head?”

“I’ve got at least ten pounds worth of stuff in my bag, but none of it would make a good splint.”

“Please don’t try to stand again, that ended very badly the first time.”

“If you would’ve taken care of it earlier it wouldn’t be this serious now.”

“Sutures or cauterizing? Take your pick.”

“I know you don’t like me, but no one else is here and those injuries can’t wait.”

“Your wound keeps reopening, that’s not a good sign.”