Eye Color Discrimination as Racism: Story Concept
im writing a story set in 21st Cen. where theres racism but everybody is black And the racism in my story isnt based on skin color but a hierarchy based on eye color. The hierarchy would go: purple eyes, brown eyes, blue eyes, and green eyes with purple-eyed people being the least privileged at the bottom and green-eyed people being at the top with the most privileges. I was wondering if this was a good system to explore the effects, injustices, and horrors of racism? I didn’t want to use our form racism based on skin color cause I wanted to only have black characters in my story. Thanks!
This really comes off to me as if you want to make a point about how Black people can be “just as racist” and shift any blame away from anti-Blackness enacted by non-Black people.
Stories about colorism among Black People are okay to write. They need to be written in fact, but that’s for Black people to write about.
I’m personally turned off by stories that make comparative situations for racism (ex: alien discrimination replaces the concept of racism) as opposed to just, ya know, confronting actual racism! Those stories only seem to work for me when there’s intersectionality that notes how x is another branch of discrimination alongside with others.
Why do you feel the need to use a Trojan horse to approach the topic of racism? Don’t be afraid to address it head on - whether in an alternative or present day setting.
Although these racist-symbolism stories have been done well, and perhaps you should read and watch a lot of them, the point of the author’s message can still easily be missed by the target audience, and can feel like erasure for people who actually experience discrimination for their race, orientation etc.
I didn’t want to use our form racism based on skin color cause I wanted to only have black characters in my story.
Colorism is a thing, which is discrimination or favor based on the darkness or lightness of one’s skin. It occurs within and outside Black communities and other non-black groups and is quite insidious.
But Alice made a good point; why are Black people being portrayed as racist/discriminatory?
I know the Jane Elliot Blue vs. Brown eyes experiment illustrated racism to people who hadn’t faced it, aka white people. I’m not seeing how well it translates here with the use of Black people.
I think this concept or anything like it is best left to Black people and/or the very, very well-researched. Not just on Black experiences but on racism, colorism, ethnocentrism, discrimination, etc. As it stands, this story needs restructuring and a clearer concept.