hi guys, sorry to bother, but could you tell me if this sentence makes sense and if it is grammatically correct? "Just a few seconds to the end of a much-delayed hug, some quiet guitar strings bubbled through the surface as a way to seal old wounds." thanks in advance!
When I want to check if something is grammatically correct I usually go to
I found that site when I was using wordcounter.net and it’s helped me quite a bit since starting this challenge. I ran it through the site and was told there were no errors. I would say as a personal preference that I’d probably tweak a thing or two.
If I was editing this sentence I would make the following suggestions:
(I would add “For” to the beginning) Just a few seconds, (insert a comma for parenthetical punctuation)
to at the end of a much-delayed hug, some quiet guitar strings bubbled through to (the word through kind of takes me out of the moment in the sentence because I’m thinking “wait… wouldn’t it be bubbled to the surface”) the surface. (I think this would be a good place to end the sentence) The notes helped mend the old wounds. (Personal style choice on the wording here).
“For just a few seconds, at the end of a much-delayed hug, some quiet guitar strings bubbled to the surface. The notes helped mend the old wounds.”
You have a great sentence and these are my suggestions as to how you could improve it. You can take whatever you’d like from these suggestions. The beauty of a beta reader is they’re a second opinion that you can take a little, a lot, or none of the advice from.
If anyone else has something to say please feel free to chime in! Sometimes I think the more eyes on a piece the better. It’s always good to get a few opinions.