transformative writing

Imagine a convo like this during the Orion Pax arc...
  • Orion: You... used Dark Energon? How?
  • Megatron: I... inserted it directly into my own spark, then I--
  • Orion: Hold on. Wait.
  • Orion (to Soundwave): Did he really...?
  • Soundwave: *nods*
  • Orion: Oh Primus, Creator of all, what THE FRAG were you thinking?!?
  • Megatron: *scoff* You don't think I could have handled the power?
  • Orion: YOU COULD HAVE DIED! I don't give a scrap heap about whether you could control it or not. Megatron, you placed the very essence of death and destruction into your spark chamber!
  • Orion: And what would have happened then? If you had ceased to function?
  • Orion: You constantly belittle Starscream's command-- publicly. It's clear to everyone who follows you-- and possibly our enemy-- that you don't want Starscream to lead! You waste his time and talents with the promise of leadership opportunities...
  • Megatron: *growls* I promise NOTHING.
  • Orion: ...Even when he performs his duties amicably and efficiently, you give him no reward. What message does that send to your troops?
  • Megatron: His reward is his life! The fact that I allow that traitorous mech to even function on my ship... he should be grateful.
  • Orion: ...So you don't actually trust him, or LIKE HIM enough to be a true heir to the Decepticons.
  • Megatron: No. I do not trust him.
  • Orion: Alright, then what about Soundwave?
  • Soundwave: *stops his work and quietly excuses himself. Nope, not doing this today.*
  • -- DOORS CLOSE --
  • Megatron: What about Soundwave? You know him too, he has been here since the beginning.
  • Orion: He may have been here the longest but he is not meant for as large a role as leader... and he knows it too.
  • Megatron: Soundwave is my most loyal. I trust him completely. The only reason I don't have him as my second is so that we can BOTH keep an optic on Starscream. Get to your POINT, Orion!
  • Orion: You disappeared for 3 years, leaving Starscream to care for and coordinate your armies.
  • Orion: He does a fine job continuing your expansion whether you like it or not, and even takes out a member of the primary Autobot squadron.
  • Orion: Energon production is not up significantly, but it's not down either-- likely the best anyone could have done in times like these.
  • Orion: But then you return, beating and tossing him this way and that, barely even acknowledging his work!
  • Orion: Your troops see this, and any respect Starscream has garnered during his time commanding has gone out the window.
  • Orion: And you MUST know this, somewhere in your processor. And I know you are also aware that Soundwave could not have filled your pedes in your absence, otherwise you would have specified as such.
  • Orion: If you had died, Starscream could not resume his command after you laid waste to everyone's opinion of him. Soundwave could not have taken over because he simply could not handle it.
  • Orion: There would be a power vacuum. Any and all strong Decepticons within a few stellar cycles journey from here would compete for dominance, dividing your forces. The message would be lost... your armies, scattered.
  • Orion: The Autobots... would WIN.
  • Megatron: ....
  • Megatron: *gets up to loom over Orion/Optimus*
  • Megatron: You seem to have a lot to say for someone who has essentially been in stasis for millions of vorns.
  • Orion: *huff* All I'm saying is that you aren't using your intellect and prospective reasoning! You keep acting on your first instinct instead of thinking things through. What happened to the strategist? The gladiator with a plan?
  • Megatron: ...
  • Orion: ... talk to me. What is it about the Autobots that make you lose your focus?
  • Megatron: ...
  • Megatron: *knocks hand away* We will discuss this later, Orion.
  • Orion: ... do you even know what it's doing to your spark now? I doubt you can fully purge Dark Energon, as energy can neither be created nor destroyed.
  • Orion: *reaches out* Please... as your friend, I am asking you to seek medical attention... if only so we can better understand what must happen now.
  • Megatron: ...
  • Megatron: ... I have things I must attend to.
  • -- DOORS CLOSE --

he’s totally not blushing

i’m all too invested in this au tbh

Everyone stop what you’re doing and imagine being a human on the lost light and having a little go-kart to help you get around quicker

• Bots thinking it’s so cute to see your little car speeding down the hallway

• You get it installed with a cute little horn or something to let everyone know you’re coming through!

• You running into literally everything when you first start using the kart

• Your running into things becomes such a problem that someone eventually builds you a little test track to practice on

• You let Brainstorm upgrade your kart and it starts with small things like speed boosters and navigational devices, but Ultra Magnus puts a stop to it when he tries to add a rocket launcher

• Getting together with your favorite bot to paint the kart

• Alternatively, painting your kart in your favorite bots color scheme

• You make it a game to drive between bots’ legs and see if you can trip anyone. Magnus puts a stop to this as soon as he finds out though. Don’t want you accidentally get squished!

• Eventually some bot who isn’t all that fond of you gets tired of having to watch out for you in the halls so one day they give you a map of the ship, stick you in the vents, and wish you good luck

• You were lost and stuck up there for 2 days

• No more vents for you

Of the many things I disliked about Transformers Prime, the worst thing was the wasted potential of Unicron’s presence on Earth.

Because look, Cybertron is Primus and the show itself says that Earth formed around Unicron, which means for all intents and purposes Earth is Unicron.

Everything that grew and evolved there has been influenced by Unicron’s presence. The energy and aura of a literal chaos god pulsing through the Earth, and you can’t tell me that wouldn’t have an effect on the lifeforms. This would explain the chaotic nature of Earth to Cybertronians - everything is constantly in flux, happening seemingly at random. Humans are clever, quick things who are just as likely to adapt to a situation as they are to behave in ways that make absolutely no sense. Humans are an inherently chaotic species - and Unicron’s presence at Earth’s formation should have explained that.

The stagnation of Cybertron’s culture and the constantly evolving and changing cultures of Earth would have been a great theme in TFP. It would have explained why every single franchise has to be on Earth at some point, it would have explained why Cybertronians and humans seem to gravitate towards each other - it would have explained SO MUCH

But no, punch Unicron in the face and move on, nothing interesting to see here, let’s never speak of this again.

TFP had such shitty writing I swear

Imagine Optimus Prime Hearing Your Heartbeat For The First Time.

Originally posted by opens-at-nightfall


Thump… Thump… Thump…

That’s the noise that rung through the Primes audio sensors. It was soft, quiet, almost to the point where he wouldn’t have been able to hear it if he hadn’t been holding you so close.

Your heartbeat.

It was a rather strange request, especially coming from Optimus. As awkward and as he could be, of himself and anything really, it probably took a lot for him to ask to hear it. But who’s to say you weren’t just as awkward. And with an equally wavering tone, you affirmed his request to hear the thing that kept you alive, leading to your both current situation. You pressed firmly, but gently against his helm, large cervos holding and keeping you up.

Optimus was mesmerized by your heartbeat. He could sit here forever, just listening to the rhythmic sound coming from your chest. The Prime wasn’t sure why, but he loved it. It comforted him in a way of letting him know that you were breathing and very much alive.

Looking down and seeing the dirtied bandages along parts of your body, Optimus cringed slightly, remembering what had occurred a week prior. If things hadn’t worked out, you wouldn’t be here, in hands and letting him be moved by your heart. The thought alone made him momentarily tighten his grip on you, feeling as though he were about to lose you right at this moment. The Prime was still young, still learning and figuring things out. The world around him and most definitely himself. But… if there was one thing he figured out and was sure of…


He wasn’t going to let that sound die.


(A/N: plz don judge, tfa needs love too, specially this noodle prime (´;ω;`) )

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justpercyjacksonthings  asked:

Hi! So I'm writing a book and two of my protagonists are shapeshifters (one can turn into a tiger and the other a wolf). In the heat of battle, how can I (rather, how /should/ I) write the lines when they're changing so that it doesn't take up a whole lot of time and space on a page, but still seems graceful and fluid?

By remembering that your audience has a memory. Depending on your preferences, you probably want to focus on the transformation in detail, one to three times. After that, your audience is going to have a fairly solid grasp on how it works, and the only time you’d need to revisit the process is if something new was happening.

Revisiting it, with a full sequence, every single time is fetishistic. Now, if that is the point of your story, then, sure, go for it every time. However, as you’ve noticed, that will slow you down a lot. If your character’s transformed into a nine foot tall snarling deathbeast fifteen times, there’s really not much value to writing up the sixteenth, (or the fourth, for that matter).

The basic theory, when I said one to three, is that the first time you’re telling the audience, “hey, this is happening, this is how it works.” The second and third time you’re reminding them, “hey, remember this thing that happens?” After that, it’s enough to say, “yeah, it happens,” and skip the irrelevant details. By the time you’re getting into this stuff happening in fight scenes, it’s something that you should be able to roll over in a sentence or two. Also, depending on your preferences, this can apply to any similar transformations. One protagonist transforming will (probably) count for the other. Though, you may want to make sure each character gets at least one detailed transformation before you completely gloss over what’s happening. It’s a new character, that is something new happening, after that, your audience should be able to keep up. “Ah, that one’s a werewalrus, got it.”

This can get significantly more complicated, if you have characters that can transform into multiple distinct forms. At that point, you’re probably going to be stuck writing it out, or at least spending more time explaining what’s going on, each time.

When you’re walking the audience through the process, the early transformations can chew up a lot of space. That’s okay. You’re laying out the ground rules for how your characters’ powers work. In this sense it’s a lot like establishing exposition. You’re explaining the world so that, later, the audience is up to speed when you need to stick these transformations in tense moments when the pacing doesn’t allow you to stop.

Once you’ve got the transformations nailed down, then you only really want to go into detail when accounting for something that hasn’t happened before. Dealing with wounds that carry over would be one example. Especially if the characters are usually fully healed by their transformation.

As to the graceful bit, that’s a lot more complicated. It ultimately comes down to how you define “graceful” for your own purposes. It’s something you’d bake into the transformations the first couple times you’re using it, or (if the story starts with their first), it might be something that manifests as they’re learning to control their powers. There isn’t a simple solution on that point. It might also be worth the time and introspection to decide exactly why you’re thinking you want the transformations to be graceful; that might help you find a way to better operationalize it.

Once you’re having your characters transform mid-combat, you want to be at a point where you can simply say your character wolfs out, and your audience is already knows what that means and is on board. As you’ve realized, if you have to detail the transformation in the heat of the moment, it will murder your pacing.


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