rn i’m comparing the hungarian translation of The Last Guardian w/ the original book, and there’s this line:
And in the hungarian translation, Medivh uses the word “társ”, instead of “apprentice”, which translates to “ my partner / companion/ significant other”
Also, in the troll attack vision-sequence, the original text describes Medivh having a “young, mirthful face”, whereas his face here is “young, peachy and beautiful”. this translation managed to make TLG gayer than it already was
Now the one thing is that I don’t post everything to either account so if anyone would like to see literally all of my art posts (including game work that I don’t show on here) you’ll have to ask me privately for my personal tumblr account (but also be prepared to deal w/ that kettle of fish on its own)
how do you write an opening chapter for a fic?? im so lost ): I want it to be captivating but it always seems so forced /:
What I like to do in the opening chapter is to introduce the reader to the world, the main characters and the basic conflict, without the latter happening. You basically set the scene for the rest of the fic.
So, with WFR/TLG I started with introducing Paul. He’s an English teacher, 42 years of age and unmarried, about to move in with his girlfriend, Julia. You meet Julia, and learns about her two children, one of whom is a trouble maker, John. It purely sets the scene for the rest of the fic and introduces the reader to the main characters and the conflict. The “moving in” part is what starts of the conflict. You need to have something that changes (either in the characters or their surroundings) that introduces the main conflict.
In Alice in Wonderland, Alice meets a talking rabbit and falls through the rabbit hole. The change is the strange “abnormal” characters and that she enters a new land. The conflict can be seen as her being in this strange new land and needing to make her way there and find out about this world and it’s strange characters (like the rabbit). The falling through the rabbit hole starts the main conflict.
In Harry Potter, the opening chapter is Mr Dursley seeing as these strange men and women in robes around the city, celebrating something. It’s a change that introduces this conflict of the new world of the wizards, but also the war with Voldemort, as we learn later on, and Harry’s defeat of the dark lord. We don’t know this yet, but it still sets it up.
You want to introduce the world of your story, some major characters (directly as with WFR/TLG and Alice in Wonderland or indirectly as with Harry Potter), and set up the conflict, without starting it completely. You want to make your readers curious about this conflict and the change that happened in the world (is John really such a brat? How will this meeting go between John and Paul? What is this strange land with its strange people? Who are these people in cloaks and what are they celebrating?).
Quick thing: with introducing your characters, don’t make them look in the mirror (unless you have a good reason) or whatever, that’s a cheap cliche that will have your reader mostly yawning. It also isn’t realistic: do you ever look in the mirror and start describing yourself as if you’re an outsider? Make them think about themselves or compare themselves to others, or have them do something that tells your reader about them. (people with large hands having difficulty doing delicate movements for example, or long hair getting in your eye as you walk outside). Don’t introduce your character completely, leave things for the reader to find out later or by themselves. Like with a stranger, you learn about them bit by bit.
The opening chapter/scene is always difficult. Don’t worry too much about it being captivating. If your characters are interesting, you give away just a glimpse of the conflict and leave your reader with questions, you’ll be fine. Also, don’t give away all the answers. For example, I read a book in which a man was going to a funeral. He describes his suit and briefly what he did during the funeral, and then he just starts driving for no reason, as you sometimes do when you’re somewhere you don’t want to be. Never, does he mention in the chapter who’s funeral it is. Even that is enough for your reader to be curious about your character and why he doesn’t like the funeral or the people and where he’s going in his car. It’s a simple start, but just leaving out that little bit of information makes your reader wonder about something, even if it’s not interesting for the plot. Don’t give away everything and have them think about what’s happening.
Another good trick, look at other openings of books of the same genre and see what they start with. That’s what I did for my up-coming Jane Austen fic. Don’t directly copy it, but if it starts with character description, you can do that too in a different context for example. If you’re writing a crime novel, you might want to start with a description of another crime to get your reader interested and get a feel for it. If it’s a horror story, start with a description of the weather or the scene itself. See what other people do and what you like. It helps.
You can also start in the middle of the action and later do flashbacks to what happened before. Or, start at the end and have someone tell the story, without giving away the ending completely.
Don’t get too hung up about the first line. You can always come back and change it once you’ve written the chapter, or even later on if you haven’t posted it or anything. You can also start with a universal truth in your world. For example “It had been so long since we had last had a white Christmas - nineteen years if you could believe grandma - and yet I felt a sense of nostalgia when I woke up to see the world covered in it.” Or “Every month for as long as anyone could remember, John’s father would take the boys to see the full moon.” Or “Mama always cooked dinner for us, even when she was ill.” A change, however, or making it implicitly clear that what’s happening at the time is different from what would normally happen, works the best to captivate your reader, I think.
Anyway, I hope this helped. If you have any other questions, you can always just ask them. I’m more than happy to help and I love giving advice. Good luck writing! <3
Could really go for a make out session right about now.
You know the kind where it starts in the kitchen. I come up behind you and rub your shoulders. Kiss you on the back of the head. My left hand moves down your back and finds its place on your hip as my right hand brushes your hair away from your neck. My right hand trails down your back finding its way to your hip as I kiss your neck. I wrap my arms around you as you moan in my ear. I turn you around and lift you up onto the counter. You look down at me smiling and run your hands through my hair. Then cup them around my face. I smile back at you and you pull me in for a kiss. Your lips are soft as they press against mine.Our tongues sliding over each other. Then you tease me biting my bottom of my lip. It drives me wild. I pull you in closer as your fingers wrap around the collar of my shirt. We couldn’t get closer if we tried. I pull you off the counter. You wrap your legs around my waist as my hands move to your butt holding you up against me. I head towards the bedroom as you pull back and then nibble on my ear. God you make me so hot I can’t wait to get you out of those clothes. We get to the bedroom and you put your feet back on the floor. I push you up against the wall. I take your hands and pin them up above your head as I start kissing your neck. As I let your hands go, your fingers find themselves wrapped up in my hair. You’re starting to moan again and then…
…then I realize I’m in the beginning stages of writing terrible erotica again.