I didn’t really want to write anything for this chapter because everything was so clear to me but friends asked for my opinion and i saw some posts that annoyed me again so here we go.
I’m going to write this from a personal point of view because I have reacted very similar to this before when I was given specific news/information. His reaction starts with this:
He’s quiet while distracting himself by playing with a piece of cake. He is upset and annoyed by this new information (not sad or sympathetic!). It’s taking him time to digest it because he didn’t predict this and even thought Bum was a virgin so he was wrong! Sangwoo being wrong is a big deal. He is annoyed and he unintentionally/subconsciously changes the subject. This is all giving him time to digest this new information. The next reaction,
is him digging his fingers into the cake and starting to eat it. He’s taking out his irritation out on the cake and he’s not even thinking about it. He’s thinking about Bum and his story. He gets even more irritated when Bum refuses to eat the cake, and then finally, he’s done thinking, “I don’t get it…
…what the hell was I thinking!” suggests that Sangwoo is disappointed in Bum and Bum knows that because he knows Sangwoo to some point. So he starts calling his name because he’s both scared and trying to manipulate him. He knows Sangwoo likes it when Bum calls his name (remember when he was hanging Bum and stopped when Bum called his name) so he calls his name over and over again but Sangwoo is not an idiot, he knows he’s being manipulated,
After this he listens to Bum with an unamused expression. Bum is being clingy and annoying and loud so he wants to leave until either Bum calms down or whatever because he doesn’t care. He stands up and starts to leave but stops when Bum says ‘If hitting me will cheer you up, hit me.’. He listens. It’s not that he actually wants to hit Bum but it’s a nice offer and reminds him of who Yoonbum is. Probably someone irreplaceable and hard to find. Someone who allows him to be abusive and sadistic and still loves him. But then Bum starts talking nonsense, so he looks back and,
Yes, this is shock! He doesn’t understand why Bum is cutting his wrist. Really trying to kill himself? Or trying to draw attention? Or… He just simply doesn’t understand it. And he literally just freezes there. Even after Yoonbum collapses, he’s still standing there, wondering ‘what just happened and why’.
That’s it. This was my personal view but it could also simply be that Sangwoo doesn’t care at all from the start so him talking about the cake just shows how shallow he is and maybe he found Bum’s story boring.
[All images belong to Lezhin and the artist, Koogi]
Sully is a good representation of how I want people to react when enthralled by a story I’ve written:
But more often than not, I get a reaction more like this:
Or at least, I did. I couldn’t understand why my writing produced these less-than-stellar responses. I had meticulously worded every sentence. I’d made sure there were exciting parts. I had parceled out backstory, setting, and exposition so the reader could understand what the heck was going on. So why did eyes glaze over while reading my book? Why did MY eyes glaze over while reading my own work?
The problem, I finally found out, was that my scenes didn’t turn.
I was cramming all that exposition in right out of the gate, so the reader knew absolutely everything … which meant there wasn’t anything to find out. The scenes were just tiny chronicles where the main character set out to do something and accomplished it with flying colors. Nothing ever happened that surprised him. And consequently, nothing ever happened to surprise the reader.
I wasn’t withholding information, and revealing it methodically.
I wasn’t letting the story spin in new directions. It was always chugging along the straightforward track where I’d dropped my reader.
I wasn’t letting my scenes TURN.
To illustrate what I mean, here’s an example of a great scene with a great turn from a wonderful movie: Beauty and the Beast
*Opening music that makes me want to cry from how beautiful it is*
“Once upon a time, in a faraway land a young prince lived in a shining castle…” (Action: Apparently the world takes action to make sure this prince lives a cushy existence.)
“Although he had everything his heart desired, the prince was spoiled, selfish, and unkind.” (Reaction: And he acts like a brat anyway.)
“But then, one winter’s night, and old beggar woman came to the castle and offered a single rose in return for shelter from the bitter cold.” (Action)
“Repulsed by her haggard appearance, the prince sneered at the gift, and turned the old woman away.” (Reaction)
“But she warned him, not to be deceived by appearances, for beauty is found within.” (Action)
“And when he dismissed her again …” (Reaction)
“The old woman’s ugliness melted away to reveal a beautiful enchantress.” (Action)
“The prince tried to apologize …” (Reaction)
“But it was too late, for she had seen that there was no love in his heart. And as punishment, she transformed him into a hideous beast and placed a powerful spell on the castle, and all who lived there.” (Action)
“Ashamed of his monstrous form, the beast concealed himself inside his castle, with a magic mirror as his only window to the outside world.” (Reaction)
“The rose she had offered was truly an enchanted rose, that would bloom until his 21st year. If he could learn to love another, and earn their love in return, by the time the last petal fell, then the spell would be broken. If not, he would be doomed to remain a beast for all time.” (Action)
“As the years passed, he fell into despair, and lost all hope.” (Reaction)
“For who could ever learn to love a beast?”
Turn: The 6th beat is the turn. The story has spun in a new direction, the direction the WHOLE STORY will motor towards.
Revelation: There’s the big one of the scene turn, but I love how every action and reaction in this prologue feels like a revelation. Each one feels like it could be a scene on it’s own, but it’s told in a just few words, with beautiful imagery. There’s no fluff in this, nothing unnecessary, everything is perfectly needed. (Sorry, I just really love this opening. I can remember sitting in my little wicker rocking chair when I was four watching this in awe. This movie is one of the reasons I’m story obsessed.)
NOW let’s remove all curiosity and surprise from this scene.
We’ll take away the atmosphere of “all is not as it seems”, the “seeking and learning significant information” feeling, the sense that we’re climbing to something significant. Instead of withholding and revealing snippets of information, after gradual beat-by-beat escalation of curiosity, we’ll dump all information right away. We’ll take this beautiful scene, and make it distinctly not a scene by removing all traces of a turn.
So! The purpose of this “section” of story is to communicate necessary information. What info? The guy used to be a terrible prince. Someone cursed him to be a beast. His castle and the people who live there are also cursed. He’s got a rose that will bloom until he’s 21. He’s supposed to fall in love with someone and get that person to love him back. Or he’s going to be a beast forevermore. So, let’s give it a whirl.
Let’s say it opens up on Lumiere and the Beast. They’re just hanging out in the West Wing, the Beast watching the rose sparkle, Lumiere extinguishing and reigniting his left candle/hand for something to do.
LUMIERE: “So Master, it’s been years since you were turned into a beast and the castle staff was turned into objects.”
L: “I wish you hadn’t have upset that enchantress, and been a bit kinder.”
B: “Me too. Don’t know how.”
L: “Now our only hope to return to our human forms, is if you fall in love and get that person to fall in love with you.”
B: *Noncommittal grunt*
L: “Better happen soon, before that last petal on the magical rose falls. When you turn 21, it’s going to fall. And if you haven’t learned to love by then, well, we’re stuck.”
B: “I’m aware."
Well, that was extraordinarily awful.
So what about these scenes is different? (Besides one being a work of art and the other being agony in text form.)
– One withholds information and reveals it slowly, turning the story at the end.
– One is just an info dump.
So how can a turn be accomplished? There are four types of turns:
– Amplified Curiosity
– New Insight
– Spin in New Direction
A SURPRISE turn is the difference between what the character expects and what actually happens, surprising them, surprising the reader/audience that is enthralled by your story. A CURIOSITY turn is when a new mystery is presented to the reader, increasing their drive to find out what happens next. An INSIGHT one is when a scene ends by solving a mystery, answering a question that the audience has been wondering about. And a SPIN is just that, a turn that jolts the story into a new unexpected direction.
And how do they work in a scene?
The turn happens at the end. It’s the point of the scene. Everything’s leading to it. Think of it as the period punctuation mark on the end of the sentence that is your scene. But really your reader is anticipating that turn throughout the scene. It’s this anticipation and “gradual illumination” that’s crucial to a story turn. This is the wonderful curious feeling that keeps us turning pages. That sense that “all is not as it seems, and if I keep reading I’ll find out the truth.” which is so intoxicating. And this is accomplished with beats, the exchanges of action and reaction, each acting like a escalation on a roller coaster, each increasing anticipation for the drop.
Turns and revelation anticipation are rather magical when you think about it. They really are (as Robert McKee says) the substance of story. (Or they’re magical to me. I said I was obsessed. Blame this movie!)
Now I’m going to go watch Beauty and the Beast again.
100% set-up because I have 0% grip on life right now and I can 50% pretend that I know what I’m doing by organizing! Although if you squint, you can see my very messy room because I haven’t cleaned in a month. Featured in this photo: new macbook case because I’m notorious at scratching everything I own, (frozen) strawberries that I nearly broke my tooth on, and an organic chemistry reaction map to prep for my upcoming midterm.
School is an absolute mess aka why I haven’t posted since JANUARY, I’ve been sick for THREE WEEKS and research has (ironically) been my anchor. I finally submitted my tentative research proposal, now I need to finish my big grant due in a month. But in the wise words of my biochem prof, “sometimes you have to laugh or you’ll cry.” Thanks Dr. Brown, you and your ponytail are cool.
poor baby didn’t so much fall as he just kinda,,,,,, got lost?
like he doesn’t even remember why he came down here in the first place he gets so caught up in the world around him.
he’s so enamoured he completely forgets how to find his way back, and in the end he doesn’t really want to.
anyway you find him in the trash.
that’s right, he’s just chilling naked in a dumpster minding his own business when you come along to scream at him.
but it becomes clear pretty soon that he doesn’t understand a word you’re saying, he just looks kinda confused at your tone.
that’s when you realise he must be less fortunate than you in some way or another, and since he doesn’t seem aggressive or dangerous and you should probably help him out.
so you take him home with you and offer him a bath and some clothes, none of which he understands.
like he literally doesn’t understand the concept of clothes.
he’s very curious of his surroundings, but doesn’t know his own strength and keeps breaking everything that he picks up to examine.
he’s easily startled and doesn’t like loud noises.
you decide to let him stay the night, and then you’ll take him to the local police station tomorrow and they can find out where he belongs.
but by morning it’s becoming clear that he isn’t what you thought.
yixing (that’s what he calls himself) has emptied your entire bookshelf during the night and otherwise also turned your apartment upside down.
that morning he knows about a dozen words including “okay”, “here”, “good”, “nice” and “umbrella”.
by the end of the day he speaks in full sentences and by the end of the week he speaks almost fluently.
it takes him a little longer to understand clothing tho.
eventually you have to give him the bath yourself and it’s a,,,,, bonding experience.
i mean you’re getting used to seeing him naked, he mostly wears a blanket around the house, but imagine yixing discovering bubbles for the first time.
and being so disappointed when they don’t taste as good as they look.
yixing is incredibly intelligent, eager to explore, and he learns very quickly, but he has no real way of explaining to you where he comes from only that he cannot return even if he wanted to and there is no use in trying.
and you keep finding feathers everywhere ?????
they all seem to come from the same source and at the end of the week there’s enough for like two birds and you’re getting very confused.
like where are they even coming from ????
you genuinely thought yixing was an alien until you noticed how he would stroke the wings on pictures of birds he found in your books.
he tried to explain that he has a pair just like that and eventually you confront him about the feathers and he’s like “yeah, those are mine.”
but you can’t actually see the wings.
also rip if you have an instrument in the house and come home to find yixing playing it perfectly, and then he won’t stop for at least three days.
and he loves your bed, says it feels “close to home”.
eventually you buy him a dictionary and communication gets a lot easier from there on out.
in the end yixing would rather stay with you than anything else in the world, and if heaven wants him back they’re gonna have to drag him kicking and screaming over your dead body.
meanwhile you just try to keep him out of trouble.
he takes good care of you too, considers himself your guardian.
he has kinda claimed you as his own, calls you “my human”.
everything is new and every discovery is precious to him.
and you find new appreciation for life and the world around you while viewing it through his eyes.
I try to update this as often as I can cause I know how hard it can get to find your way around LOL :) As always I really appreciate every one who has subscribed to me! Thanks for taking the time to read my writings ^_^
Freshly updated on 5-7-17
* = new stories since last update/reblog of the Master List
Summary: Every person usually has their own set of secrets, but when your interest lands you in the biggest secret in Jellyfish, you’re in for a whirlwind as you find yourself in different predicaments trying to keep it.
Brains & Beauty (Hyuk x Reader fic; school au) Summary:
I never really sought out K-pop or was too fond of it. Until K-pop found me in the form of Han Sanghyuk.
BTS/ BANGTAN BOYS STORIES:
Vampire! Tae: The Unlucky Ones (Tae x OC) [Fluff, Angst]: Vampires have soulmates too. But there were unlucky ones whose soulmates turned out to be human. Part 1 | Part 2
Don’t Judge Sweet & Sour(Yoongi x OC Lee Maia x Jungkook with BTS members) [Fluff, Angst]: Chapter Links: 1 | 2 | 3 | 4 | 5 | 6 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 10 | 11 | 12 | 13 | 14 Summary: Through a series of events, Lee Maia becomes BTS’s manager, specifically genius producer Min Yoongi’s, in order to become a Big Hit trainee. However, Min Yoongi is infamous among staff for being rude and particular and no other staff members were able to handle him for more than a few days. Will she survive the year and achieve her dream of debuting as an idol?
When Music Meets Lyrics(Yoongi x OC) [Fluff, Angst]: Summary: Min Yoongi had been having trouble creating music lately, especially coming up with meaningful lyrics. But that all changes when he hears the words of a new mysterious lyricist.
* Masquerade III (Jungkook x Reader x BTS member - read to find out >:] ) [Fluff & Smut]: [RECENTLY COMPLETED] Summary: With Club Masquerade’s original hosts “graduating” one at a time, it’s up to the newcomers to pick up the slack and keep the customers happy. And who better to take the reins than the notorious Red Mask’s prodigy, Jeon Jungkook. But things become a bit difficult when you come into the picture, with your desire to do research on the rules of love and dating through your experience with your host. Will Jungkook be able to satisfy your curiosities… or will someone else?
* FORGIVE ME. Sequel to “Hug Me” (see below). (Jung Hoseok/ J-Hope & his daughter; Hoseok x Reader) [Angst]
How can one gain forgiveness from someone who is no longer in a position to give it? How can one be forgiven if they refuse to forgive themselves? How can one move forward to the future… if the past was so much better?
SILVER SPOON [COMPLETED] (Yoongi x Reader ft Jimin & VIXX’s Leo as side characters) [Office Au; Rom-com, Fluff]:
Summary: Having been born and raised in the country side, you have worked hard your entire life to make it to the big city. You eventually achieved your dream and now you have a wonderful paying job for a large company and you continue putting your 110% into everything you do. However, your perfect plan to climb to success through consistent effort and hard work becomes disarrayed with the arrival of your branch’s new rebellious and easy-going CEO, who never desired the position in the first place and has never truly worked hard a day in his life. Your job is on the line if he can’t be turned into a quality CEO within a year, but he has no intention of changing himself for anyone or letting you boss him around so easily. How will you work your way through this obstacle? Will you succeed in changing him or will he be the one that changes you?
Out of the Egg
[COMPLETED] (Jungkook x Reader; War Au/ Rebellion Au) [Fluff, Angst; mentions of violence, death, sexual harassment (briefly), and warfare]
Summary: The world you had once known is now bare and rotting with evil. Families were torn, houses were burned, and businesses were shattered by the Oppressors. In your world, there were only two possibilities – if you weren’t working with them, you were owned by them. However, a new faction arises that sings of hope and taking back the world that was once for the people, calling themselves “The Changers”. Although you tried to go unnoticed by either of them, out of fear of being killed or captured, you soon find yourself deep in the middle of the rebellion after an unexpected encounter.
Summary: With all the fame and fortune they have been receiving, the boys can’t help but grow increasingly grateful to the man who gave them the opportunity to achieve their dreams – “Hitman” Bang PD. In their struggle to come up with the perfect Christmas gift to express their love and admiration for the very man who continues to inspire and motivate them, they find that their boss actually and verysecretly only wants one thing for Christmas…their beautiful Head Coordi-noona. Put seven crazy boys on a secret match-making mission and one very shy CEO together and you have a recipe for a comedic disaster. Will they succeed in getting their Coordi-noona “Bang”-ed?
[COMPLETED] (Jimin x Reader x Hoseok) [Fluff & Smut; Office Au, Hosts Au]
“With a mask, you could be whoever you want to be. You could be someone completely different, or you could be unabashedly yourself.”
Summary: To secretly relieve your stress about your single life and your hard times at work, you cave and decide to give this mysteriously alluring club a chance. At Club Masquerade, you can indulge in your fantasies and indulge in who you really want to be without strings attached. So when you waltz in and realize you’re not exactly sure what you want, two of their best hosts swoop in and are more than willing to help you figure it out… But it seems you’re not the only one keeping secrets in your office.
Masquerade II: Welcome to Burlesque & Balls [COMPLETED] (Fluff & Smut; Club Au, Masquerade Ball Au, Burlesque Au) DISCLAIMER: Since this is the second saga of MASQUERADE, there will be SPOILERS! So if you haven’t already, it is HIGHLY RECOMMENDED that you read Masquerade first before this for context and for better understanding, plus you won’t spoil the ending of that story for yourself. ;) **
Summary: Being the receptionist of Club Masquerade and working as a barista wasn’t quite enough to make your ends meet comfortably, so when a new place opens up nearby that’s looking for attractive females to perform in a neo-Burlesque club, you jumped at the chance for a new job and a chance to do something more than sitting behind a desk or counter. But just like your financial status, your love life wasn’t all too great either. When it seemed like all hope was lost, fate had other plans for you. Unexpected suitors waltzed into your life in various ways, and unbeknownst to each of them, you play the field, hoping to overcome your fears and finally find Mr. Right among them…But it seems you’re not the only one keeping secrets.
WORLDS. (Yoongi x Reader x Hoseok; ft rest of BTS) [Fluff & Angst; Childhood Au, School Au, Best friends Au]
[COMPLETED] A collection of your life growing up with your two best friends Yoongi and Hoseok. From the small pains of childhood to experiencing the trials of school life, love, heart break, and finding your passions, you three were always inseparable…until one day, you were forced to grow without them and it was then that you truly discovered yourself and each other.
Hug Me (J-Hope/Hoseok x Reader; Angst, some fluff):
You and Hoseok were married, but the married life you thought you would be living is nonexistent now. You two were like strangers living in the same house. You knew his heart was no longer yours, but you still loved him. When the end of your marriage was near, you made him promise to stay with you for just one more month. One month was all you needed to finally let him go.
Past, Present, Future (Jin x Reader; fluff
w/ mentions of bullying and body shaming) :You weren’t the ideal body type, far from it, but Jin loved you all the same.
Feel the Rain (Namjoon x Reader; Fluff): In the midst of your mundane routine life, you meet a man who changes it all.
~Accidentally in Love~ Series (BTS x Reader; Fluff): We’ve all had our clumsy moments but what if those embarrassing moments, where we hoped no one was looking, actually led us to the right person? Jungkook | Namjoon: Part 1 / Part 2 |
Wings: An exposition of what I feel like all the BTS short films and titles were trying to exemplify about life and growing up on a general, relatable sense.
“First Meetings” Series (Fluffy one shots of the reader meeting BTS members; different story per member): Namjoon | Jin | Taehyung :“Sunflower Boy” | J-Hope : “Sun & Moon” | Jungkook : “Picture Perfect” | Yoongi : “Infires” | Jimin: “Flights & Fate”