this have been on my drafts for way too long

AU where instead of going to Samwell, Jack starts a widely successful Publicly Broadcast show for children.

Jack learns that he is great with kids after coaching them for a little over two years. Moreover, kids are good with Jack. There is no pressure to be anything other than who he is.


It all starts with a local news program doing a fluff piece on Jack Zimmermann’s coaching ability. But then it turned into something completely different when Jack skated onto camera and started to introduce every single one of his kids and what was special about them. He was…really enchanting actually. He didn’t ever really talk down to them. Jack just treated them as a tiny friend. 

They ARE his tiny friends, but that’s not the point. 

The footage they got of “snack time” was really the best. Imagine a good 16 kids piled around this massive man teaching them the best way to make a peanut butter and jelly sandwich. 

 It should have been obvious that a local channel would contact him. It still surprises Jack. They want him to host a show? Why? Everyone always teased him about how impersonable he was during interviews. Is it because he’s Jack Zimmermann’s son? Or Alicia’s? 

Jack asks all of these questions to his mother and she just laughs. “You made a PB&J interesting to 16 kids just by being you”

Jack figures it wouldn’t hurt to give it a shot. 

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rnanlvnch  asked:

I have a problem with writing dialogue and that is I write too much of it, in other words my dialogues are too long. How do i make them seem long and good and important without it lasting through 20,pages? Also, how do i say, rather than show, some of the dialogues,but in a way my readers dont feel like they missed out?

cleverly asked:

hi! been following for a year or so and i’m so grateful for this blog. you’ve helped me and others out a ton. i find that when i write, my first draft is very dialogue-heavy. when i go back and edit it’s mostly to fill in the spaces between spoken word, but i always feel like i don’t have enough detail for others to see what i see. what are some ways i can improve on adding more detail? i’ve been practicing by journaling/freewriting, but this style doesn’t really find its way into my WIP. thx!

secretkeeper007 asked:

Hello! I’m writing a novel and I feel like I have a lot of dialogue. Is that okay? (It’s in 1st person POV).

Wow, a lot of synchronicity here! 

Nothing makes me close a page of fanfic faster than Wall O’Dialogue. And it’s not just fanfic: I have actually photocopied pages from a professionally edited and published book so that I could go through and write down (it was a library book) who was talking. 

Thank you all for realizing it’s an issue and looking to deal with it. 

Relentless dialogue is just as frustrating to your readers as an unparagraphed wall of text or reams of irrelevant infodump. 

tl;dr: You don’t have to kill your darlings. You do, however, have to stuff a sock in them sometimes. 

Dialogue should be like any other part of your story – essential to plot and characterization. 

If you’re writing a story in novel format, you don’t want it dominated by dialogue. That’s called a screenplay. But you’re writing a narrative; you’re struggling with things like plot and point of view. Too much dialogue can mean too little action.

Then again, your characters reveal themselves to the reader through conversation. And you might just need to slow the action down for a minute, so you have them talk. How do you sort it all out? 

Ask yourself: Is it necessary? 

Your first task: Make sure your dialogue is advancing the story or revealing character. If it’s not necessary, cut it out. Save the file … it might be useful later, but remove it from your working draft. 

Next: Break up the dialogue you still need if you haven’t already. Your four main tools for breaking up (necessary) dialogue are:

1. dialogue tags: he said, she asked, they replied. Be specific, use the character’s name if you have to, try to avoid fancy words like “he articulated.” 


2. action beats: “I’m not going,” he said, dropping the book on the floor; or 


                        Xander tossed the book on the bed. “I’m not going.”


3. inner monologue: “I don’t care what you think,” Tamsyn said. 


                             Juno was tired of her bullshit. She knew T cared. Juno was tired of her own anger. This was no way to have a relationship. But T wasn’t in a place to listen, and Juno had no other way to explain it.


                            “OK, if that’s how you feel, I’ve got nothing else,” Juno said as she turned to leave. 


Inner monologue is an excellent device for replacing dialogue that you cut out. Instead of having your characters go back and forth, put the reactions into the inner, real-time thoughts and reactions of your POV character. Sometimes, what your character does NOT say out loud is far more revealing and interesting.

 
4. actual action: Nothing wrong with interrupting your blathering lovelies with plot- or character-revealing action. Someone bursts into the room with news … something is happening on the TV news that’s relevant … one of your characters gets a phone call or text that is disturbing, etc… 

Underwriting/Under-describing

Another reason we resort to too much dialogue is that we are covering for a lack of description, also known as underwriting. We don’t want to insult our readers by being obvious, because part of the fun of reading is connecting the dots. It’s up to you, the writer, to make sure there are just enough dots. 

Don’t jump to conclusions without presenting the evidence first. Nobody changes their life simply because of one conversation – although one conversation can spark a series of interim changes that will have life-altering and story-altering effects.  

Maybe you need to do more research on the setting. Maybe you need to interview your characters to find out more about them – do a questionnaire or other character building exercises. 

Ask your beta readers what they think is lacking. Remember, your first draft is going to need work, so don’t get too bogged down trying to make everything perfect on the first pass. 

You can find more help here. An author shares her struggles with description here

More resources

There are additional tips in these articles here and here

If you want to learn good dialogue, read good dialogue, as recommended here and here.

– Aliya, currently feeling your pain with a dialogue-heavy section of her fanfic

Not a Princess 2: A Descendants Imagine

Part 1: https://weasleygirl7.tumblr.com/post/147314517358/not-a-princess-a-descendants-imagine-slight-jay (Still don’t know how to put a link in without it looking like that :/ )

Warnings: none :)

Anonymous said: Can you make another imagine of disney’s descendants with reader being tinkerbell’s daughter like your last imagine? Idk continue it or something like that i really loved it💕💚

So sorry it took so long! With back to school stuff, and wanting to get it just right, it’s taken way too long! I have like 20 rough drafts on my phone of ways it could have been and so I finally pieced it together to make this. So I hope you like it!

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“Hey Ben,” you called and walked up next to him.

“Hey, (Y/N),” he smiled and swung an arm over your shoulder.

“Excited for the game?” You nudged him and he shrugged.

“Do you have a date for coronation yet?” He sent you a lopsided smile and you groaned.

“Not you too!”

“Oh come on. I think Andy might-”

“Hey Ben, hey (Y/N)!” Mal smiled and you returned it.

“I’ll- let you two talk,” you winked at Ben and walked over to the railing.

“Hey (Y/N)!” Andy waved and you and you smiled back at him.

Chad elbowed Andy and sent you a glare.

“She’s not even a princess, Andy,” Chad spat and you began to glow red.

“You want me to deal with them?” A deep voice said from behind you and you turned, finding yourself looking up at Jay.

He frowned at Chad and his friends and you shrugged.

“No it’s fine. I handle myself. So I heard you got on the tourney team?” You asked, trying to change the subject.

“Yeah, Coach said I had raw talent.” He puffed out his chest and you sent him a small smile. “Oh. We and Mal made these: chocolate chip cookies. I thought I would offer you one.” Jay looked at the ground and you thought you saw worry In his eyes.

“I’m good. I prefer Peanut butter cookies, but I know Ben loves chocolate. What’s wrong Jay?” You frowned up at him as his face fell.

“Oh it’s um, it’s nothing.”

“Come on, you can tell me,” you looked at him in worry.

“It’s nothing. Hey, maybe we can hang out later?” Jay looked down at you with a smile.

“How about a deal? You win the game, and we hang out.” You grinned at him and he smirked.

“You’re on!”

“Hey lost girl, you going to cheer for us at the game?” Ben laughed from behind you.

“Us? As in You, Jay, Carlos, and Andy yes.” You rolled your eyes at Ben and he grinned.

“Wait you’re a cheerleader?” Jay snickered incredulously.

“Oh, please. I’d rather give myself up to Hook! Ben just keeps insisting I try out.” I grumbled and crossed my arms, huffing a piece of my hair out of my face.

“Well, I know who you should cheer for! Ma-” Ben began but Jay clapped a hand over Bens mouth.

“Um, Mal wants you to sit by her at the big game, yeah, Mal wants (Y/N) to sit by her and Evie,” he shouted that part extremely loud and you placed your hands on your hips. “Ben, why don’t you go get the other guys ready to practice?” Jay rambled and shoved Ben in the other direction.

“What was that?” You quirked an eyebrow at the son of Jafar.

“That? Oh well, I wanted to be the one to tell you?” He stated, but it sounded more like a question.

“I’ll see you after the game, VK, remember to win, I’m looking forward to hanging out with you,” you smiled warmly and swung your bag over your shoulder, making your way over to Mal and Evie.

For some reason, you were really hoping Jay would win that game, and had a smile stuck on your face.

“Woah, someone’s crushing.” Mal snickered and you snapped out of your reverie.

“No! I’m not! I just want the Guys to win is all!” You defended, a little too quickly and The two girls shared a look.

“Yeah, sure…”

As you were talking to the girls, Jay was watching you with a smile on his face.

He was going to win this game, that was for certain.

Fatigue (M)

Character / Genre: Min Yoongi x reader (oc) | Smut, Fluff

Prompt: “Let me spoil you tonight, Princess.”

Summary: He has a special way to help you wipe away your fatigue after a long day. And tonight, it is all about you.

Warning: Fingering, soft Yoongi, bath tub scenes

a/n: I have so much writings piling up in my draft and this one was actually one of the oldest (lmaooo I am so lame), I wrote this in the middle of my packed deadlines but then I have been too busy and tired to re-read and edit this. Plus I ended up posting Heat which had almost the same topic *shrugs* Sorry if this is lame, it’s just a simple fantasy when I just wanted to be spoiled by my dear beloved Min Yoongi. Enjoy! 

Originally posted by vmiin


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I was thinking about fusions and clothes, and then this happened.

Human Sci and Fell have a bit of trouble with random, accidental fusing. Also, Silica didn’t just fix the issue by unfusing because, as I’ll probably explain more another time, they usually wait at least several hours before attempting to unfuse. (Also this is supposed to be happening early in the morning at Sci’s house. Papyrus just came over, possibly to pick up his brother. They were watching boring morning television of some kind, possibly those really little kid shows.)

This marks my first time successfully drawing a human Papyrus. It wasn’t nearly as hard as I made it the first time I tried.

These have been drafted for way too long for me to not have them done. Buuuut I kinda wanted to get a couple long/difficult prompts out of the way first. Here you go! It’s my first time writing Reinhardt and Roadhog oh god oh man oh god

Cw: Blood

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Back Home

Originally posted by ethan-support-group

Request: Can I request a sappy Ethan fic? Like he’s helplessly in love with the reader but she lives in Maine. So he makes a special trip to Maine to see her and finds out that she is in the hospital because of a hit and run crash. Over all it’s just really sappy with confessions and tears?

Summary: Ethan plans a special trip to visit Fem!Reader back in Maine, but things get a little scary when she gets hIT BY A CAR.

A/N: I’m the worst human being ever I went like a full week without posting am sorry but I did finally get wifi back up in my house. I’m out of town right now for my cousin’s wedding and it’s currently 2:15am but I finally finished a fic. Don’t hate me! Not my best, but hope you enjoy it anyway!

Wordcount: 1427, much longer than it needed to be oh well

Requests are closed my friends, v sorry but don’t send any requests in :( just makes me feel worse about my lack of posting rip

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Shine Forever Short Piano Cover
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Shine Forever Short Piano Cover

hey hey hey it’s your local thirsty kihyun stan bACK AT IT AGAIN with them piano covers ! 

this has been sitting in my drafts for way too long because i kept wondering whether or not to post it bc i low key came up with this in like 20 mINS and also i’m??? not sure if i like it LOL but anyway i hope y’all enjoy! i don’t have any music sheets bc i played by ear, so sorry if you were looking for any :/

But imagine Lance having PTSD and night terrors after nearly dying in the airlock

Imagine Keith finishing training late at night and passing the common room and then backtracking because is that Lance? And he’s surprised bc it doesn’t look like lance, not the lance he knows at least, bc this one is curled up on the sofa, looking lost and alone and not at all like the boisterous annoying man he knows who needs a full 12 hours of beauty sleep to function

So out of shock and worry - because how can that be Lance? - he finds himself walking in and calling out the others name, and for a split second when he looks up Lance looks so scared and miserable Keith is halfway to demanding what’s wrong when his face changes and its like the suffering plain on his face was never there

Lance blinks and smirks and teases Keith for being up training so late and the performance is so convincing that Keith finds himself walking away thinking he could have imagined it

Until the next night, when he walks passed and sees the exact same thing. I knew it, he thinks, and marches over to the other, not saying anything until he is well in the others personal space and Lance is blinking up in shock, dragged out of whatever hellish thoughts he was having, and Keith gruffly and half angrily demands ‘What’s wrong?’

But Lance is nothing if not proud and stutters out a “I don’t know what you’re talking about” and nothing Keith does can get through to him, in fact it seems to make him more adamant to keep his problems to himself

The nights go on like this, and eventually Keith starts to just walk in and collapse next to the other, the two bickering for an hour or two before heading to bed, and Lance still doesn’t give up his secrets

But then one day Alura is giving a prep talk on what to do if their lions ever get breached, how to combat the vacuum of space entering their ship, and nobody else seems to notice but Lance books it out of there immediately, looking pale and shaken
So Keith follows, about to rip into his annoying comrade and get to the bottom of this now, but stops in shock when he spots Lance on the floor, curled up against the wall, breathing raggedly and holding his head tightly

Keith drops down beside him and realises Lance is panicking - badly.So he grabs his hands from his head, holding them hard and tells him to look at him. Lance resists for a minute, but then gives in and Keith has to stop from gasping at the sheer terror in his eyes. “Breath with me” he commands, and its hard and there are a lot of false starts and Lance slips back into a full panic attack at one point but eventually, eventually he’s breathing normally again again he’s slumped against Keith and when he says ‘tell me why’ Lances defended curmble, because he’s so tired of keeping this to himself, tired of false smiles and lies, he tells him how has scared to go to sleep because his dreams have him floating through space, unable to breath, call for help, surrounded by inky blackness that make the stars seem dull, how every time he stares too long out a window his breathing picks up, how he’s been dreading their next mission for weeks, because he doesn’t know if hell be able to keep up

Keith holds him, and scolds him for not telling anyone, but not too harshly because he’s proud as well, and can sort of understand why, in a twisted sort of way

// Cri. Okay. Since I’ve been gone way too long my musing for all my threads have…died, except for one. So I cleared out my drafts.

HOWEVER. Here’s a STARTER CALL for my mutuals! Lengths will vary and all that. ^^

Like for a thing with Blackfire!

ooc; anyway i keep trying to come back around but i think i’m just going to have to purge my drafts and start fresh. i know there are a couple of drafts that have been sitting for way too long, but they’re just impossible to write at this point.

sorry! 

i’m gonna hunt down some nice starter memes and turn them into posts rather than answering them as asks so they can be picked up easily. 

thanks for your patience!

I’m Going to Talk About Keith For a Minute, Okay.

In episode four, Pidge is like “I found my family and I’m leaving” and we all remember what happens here. Keith argues against them leaving, but he has a specific argument that he sticks to:

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Verb Explanations: Haber

¡Hola! Today we’re going to talk about the Spanish verb Haber. Haber is one of the verbs that are ESSENTIAL to learn due to the usage in idiomatic expressions and compound tenses. In this post, we’ll explore the various forms of Haber and their usages.

Infinitivo: Haber

English Definition: To have (done); to be (state of being, idiomatic)

Participio Presente: habiendo

Habiendo olvidado, no respondió al mensaje.

Having forgotten, he didn't respond to the message.

Participio Pasado: Habido

Han habido incidentes.

There had been accidents.

Presente (Indicativo):

He hecho la comida.

I have made the food.

This tense is a very widely used due to its usage as an auxiliary verb. In perfect tenses (I have…), Haber serves as the auxiliary verb. The translation of this form to “have” is confusing for many, because it is not the same thing as tener. Tener is a transitive possessive verb meaning to have something; however, haber is used as the auxiliary verb saying this action has been completed and it is in the past.

Pretérito:

Hubo una tormenta.

There was a storm.

Imperfecto:

Había cocinado solamente la carne cuándo él comió todo.

I had only cooked the meat when he ate everything.

Futuro:

Habrá tráfico hoy.

There will be traffic today.

Condicional:

Yo habría hecho eso si regresara.

I would have done that if he had returned.

Presente del subjuntivo:

Ojalá que haya trabajos para mí cuando salgo escuela.

I hope that there are jobs for me when I leave school.

Imperfecto del subjuntivo:

Yo estaría feliz si él hubiera hecho esto.

I would be happy if he had done this.

Las frases idiomático:

Hay que —- It is necessary to

Había una vez —- Once Upon a Time


There you go! A short explanation of this very useful verb in Spanish!