wowwww those fluffy prompts are so good for patater like... “No, like…. It’s just, I can’t believe you’re actually wearing my clothes" but with Tater trying to wear Kent's clothes or “I look forward to holding you close in bed soon" and it is Tater saying it to Kent aawwwww Also who doesnt love their relationship for this dynamic: "You’re the perfect height for me to rest my chin on your head.”
AU where Kent is Professor Parson the hot accounting professor with a chili pepper on fire rating on RateMyProfessor. His students adore him and are intimidated by him at the same time, and half the class is practically in love with him (there may or may not have been several incidents where a student undid one button on her blouse before going up and talking to him). The students know that Professor Parson is helpful during office hours (even though he’ll definitely chirp you a little if it’s obvious you didn’t listen in lecture), quick-witted, interesting, handsome, always dresses nicely for lectures (literally no one misses the sight of his ass in those dark-wash jeans), has a cat named after himself, used to play hockey before pursuing his accounting degree and probably still does as a hobby now (he’s even played with hockey legend Jack Zimmermann before!!), and loves the Las Vegas Aces and begrudgingly tolerates the Providence Falconers. They also know that he is most likely very, very married.
Hi! I have an issue with sentence length and passive vs. active writing. For sentence length, most of my sentences are short. It's almost as if I'm too afraid to use long sentences, because I've been told all my life that run on sentences are extremely distasteful. How can I overcome this hesitance I have? And for passive versus active voice, I understand the concept, I just don't quite understand when it's appropriate to use either. I've also been told "was" and "be" are words to avoid. Help?
The simplest way to start working with longer sentences is to see how you can combine the short sentences you already have into compound or complex sentences. I find compound sentences easier:
June looked up slowly. The behemoth towered over her. It seemed not to have noticed her yet.
In this example, I would choose to combine the second and third sentences, because they’re both talking about the same subject. So it would look like this:
June looked up slowly. The behemoth towered over her, but it seemed not to have noticed her yet.
Varying your sentence structure may take practice, but it’s almost always better than having all long sentences or all short sentences, like Gary Provost says.
Active and passive voice are not exactly the same as whether or not you should use ‘was’ or ‘be.’ In a sentence that uses active voice, the subject completes the action:
The behemoth attacked June!
A sentence written in passive voice is ‘backwards,’ meaning that the subject is not the one actually DOING the action:
June was attacked by the behemoth!
An sentence in active voice feels more immediate; it gives the subject agency as well as focus. That doesn’t always make it the best choice. Sometimes you want to emphasize the lack of action from your subject, emphasizing what’s being done TO her. Just be careful with that, because it can easily paint that subject as a victim.
You can also use forms of ‘to be’ as linking verbs in descriptive sentences. While these sentences aren’t active, they’re not exactly passive either, because they don’t have someone else performing an action on the subject:
The behemoth’s breath was hot and rancid.
In each case, it’s about choices. There’s nothing inherently wrong with short sentences or long sentences or active voice or passive voice or even run-ons! But it’s helpful to know how to use different techniques, so that you can choose what works best for each situation as you write.
Everyone’s been reblogging various lists of rules for writing and I just wanted to say… yes. Okay, they are all correct. Avoid weak verbs. Show-don’t-tell. All of that.
Don’t adhere so strictly to the rules that it hampers your style. Learn them. Read up on dangling modifiers and sentence fragments and passive versus active voice. But know that it’s okay to violate those rules if you have a reason to.
For instance, if it’s Felicity’s perspective, I might do the following: “Exhaustion creeps into her bones, leaving her limbs heavy and her will to prop her eyelids open nearly nonexistent. Her bed is currently more attractive than a shirtless Oliver on the salmon ladder. And, if you’re Felicity Smoak, that’s saying a thing. She’s exhausted. Obviously.”
By “the rules,” that first line works, but the rest of it doesn’t. It does, however, add character. It lends a tone to the narrative voice that wouldn’t be there if I stuck entirely with rule-abiding sentence structure.
So… yes. Learn grammar rules and read up on recommendations for strong writing. That’s important. But so is knowing that it’s okay to break those rules.