What she's thinking:
Why hasn't Ouran High School Host Club gotten more seasons? The manga went on for a few more volumes and it was probably one of the best anime in the mid 2000s and had themes that were ahead of its time. It is more than deserving of a sequel and it should get one immediately!
HEY IT’S A (really late) VALENTINE’S DAY SEQUEL TO THIS! You should really look at that to understand what’s going on, but as a quick backstory to this, Adrien found out the scarf he thought his dad gave him was from Marinette, it upset him too much so he gave it back to her.
And then I hated that it was just angst so I made this to make up for it? What started as a one page thing turned into a too-many-pages thing. Hence being like… 2 weeks later for V-day. Oh well! Enjoy!
lvtvr’s writing tutorials, pt 1: battling my nemesis (or, how to punctuate dialogue)
kids. I’m Charlie. I write.
translated and proofread four full-length novels, so I now suffer from the work-related
condition of never being able to turn my editing glasses off. This can make
reading fanfic a bitch for me. Because, let’s be real: unbeta’d amateur work easily lets a lot of mistakes slip through.
It is, however, possible to minimize those mistakes.
world going to end if there are errors in your fanfic? Of course not. If you
want to focus on the content of your writing more than adhering to rules of language, by
all means, do that. There’s time to learn this stuff later.
know what? Formatting matters. If you truly want to get better at writing, then
eventually you are going to have to
deal with this aspect of it. And yes, it’s hard work – but I hope to help you along the way.
THE POINT OF THIS ESSAY: PUNCTUATING
to be the #1 formatting problem that amateur writers struggle with. However, there are boatloads of experienced fanfic writers who still seem
to struggle with it, or are just so used to making mistakes that they’ve made
it “their style.” And at the risk of sounding like a total bitch, it doesn’t matter how amazing or
well-loved their work is otherwise: wrong
is still wrong. Just because someone is consistent about always writing “your”
instead of “you’re” doesn’t make it correct, and dialogue is no different.
If these kinds of persistent mistakes don’t bother you, then good for you. Your life is
probably a lot more fun than mine.
But if you want to learn to do it right – if you
want the great look and perfect flow that immaculate punctuation will bring
your writing – then you have to rise above this.
COMMA VS. PERIOD – THE ULTIMATE SHOWDOWN
with something simple.
This is a
good sentence. This sentence is an upstanding member of our society. You can’t
go wrong with this sentence. Got me? Okay.
have a look at another one.
sentence is a delinquent. In fact, it’s not even a sentence
it’s two sentences. And it is always, always, always wrong. Rule of thumb: never do this.
just some elitist, snooty gatekeeping crap, either. There’s a purely functional reason why it’s incorrect.
a period after your dialogue, you are cutting it off from whatever comes next. Whatever follows dialogue that ends with a
period has to be an independent sentence. This distinction is used to
regulate the rhythm and flow of the writing.
is a transitive verb, meaning it needs to
take an object. While you can sigh, yawn, or laugh independently of anything else, “saying”
isn’t possible unless you are saying SOMETHING. (I.e., “She laughed” is a
complete sentence on its own; “He said” isn’t.) Same goes for synonyms of “say,”
such as whisper, repeat, and exclaim. They almost always get lonely without some dialogue attached to
them with a comma.
at some examples.
“I’m fine,” he said.
example IS NEVER CORRECT. NOT EVER. It
should ALWAYS be the latter. ALWAYS.
“I’m fine.” He laughed.
examples are BOTH CORRECT, but convey different nuances. In the first example,
he laughs the words. In the second, he says the words first, and laughs
afterward. These are separate things, not
two different ways to express the same idea. No matter how much fic you’ve read
where they’re treated as synonymous, they are not. They are not. They are not.
FUNKY WITH “?” AND “!”
sentence in dialogue ends with a question mark or exclamation point, you always keep that punctuation – you never
replace it with a comma. This is where we use the above rule to make sure
things don’t get ambiguous.
“What’s up?” They yawned.
examples are BOTH CORRECT. In the first, they are yawning the words. In the
second, they yawn after speaking. By capitalizing “they,” you are indicating
that the question mark is behaving like a period. You are thereby orphaning the
sentence that follows the dialogue. In this case, since the sentence can stand
alone, that’s perfectly fine.
the boy repeated.
“I’m okay!” The boy repeated.
first example is CORRECT. The second is ALWAYS WRONG. Remember, capitalizing “the”
means you are drawing a line between the dialogue and the following sentence. “Repeated”
needs an object, but now, because the exclamation point is behaving like a
period, “The boy repeated” stands alone. That’s an ungrammatical sentence, and without the implied attachment to the preceding dialogue, it drifts alone in the void.
And, well, that’s not good.
section to address this other weird shit I’ve seen:
He murmured, pouring himself another cup of coffee, “I promise.”
This is a
big WTF that has basically just reversed the correct order of things. It should
he murmured, pouring himself another cup of coffee. “I promise.”
pretty cool.” The doctor laughed, turning to her girlfriend, “You should try it.”
We have two
options to fix this, depending on if we want her to laugh the words or not.
pretty cool,” the doctor laughed, turning to her girlfriend. “You should try it.”
(laughing as she speaks)
pretty cool.” The doctor laughed, turning to her girlfriend. “You should try it.”
(laughing after speaking)
especially when you start working with more complex sentences, things can get
confusing, and your options can increase. Feel free to shoot me a message if you’re not sure. However, the
rules above are the basic ones to keep in mind.
made it to the end! If it feels like a lot, that’s because it is. Yes, it’s
plenty to remember, because writing is hard. Try to think about these rules when you’re reading published books (not fanfic, you can’t trust fanfic), and
eventually you’ll get the hang of it.
Because I literally can’t think of anything better or worse than marrying your best friend. Here’s a post-6x17 drabble for my addled heart and mind. I’ve come up with so many analogies for my frazzled organs today I can’t even keep track, but here’s a new one: My heart has been tossed around in one of those bingo wheels for the last 24 hrs. and it’s starting to bruise. Please pick a number. This is dedicated to a lot of people, but honestly, my Julian (@shoedonym), because her words are the best words; and she let me freak out at her for way too long last night.
+ The worst thing about being in love with your best friend is that you will always feel compelled to tell them everything. Even when it’s not really for them to know; even when you’re actually kind of annoyed with them, and you want to tell them about how annoying they are being (and, obviously, you would tell your best friend about that irritating asshole you decided to fall in love with). Of course, the worst thing about being in love with your best friend is also, well, it’s the best, isn’t it? Because they will, without fail, want to hear about it.
honestly i think the root of all the sequel trilogy’s issues comes from the fact that, unlike the vast majority of star wars content, it seems to have been made primarily to make money rather than because someone had a cool idea. like, almost every piece of star wars fiction clearly started out as someone going “i have a good idea for a story to tell in star wars, i’ll try to get it made”, whereas it seems like the sequel trilogy was more “we should make a new trilogy, i guess we’ll come up with a story for it?”
like there’s no way TFA started out as somebody’s passionate creative vision. its creative team was tasked with making up a new setting and a story so they could do a movie, the setting and story wasn’t ever there coherently in someone’s mind before the movie was going to be made like it was for every other star wars film
i mean of course there were some people on the team who really did care about it, and that’s why it has some parts that are SO good, like the characters, but for the most part it just seems extremely phoned-in, like there was no real vision behind it
I think the core thing that caused The Last Airbender to be the horrible, piece of shit movie that it is was the fact that Shyamalan clearly looked down on the TV series as just some dumb children’s show and not for the good thing it is. It really shows through in the movie that he thought that the show’s just a mindless cartoon made to momentarily distract children too dumb to comprehend the world around them. That was his first of many mistakes, and that, combined with his incompetence, laid the foundation for the film.