Fic: Kane/Toews versus Seguin/Benn bromance competition
Here are over 4000 words from a fic I’m trying to write. It’s the Kazer versus Bennguin bromance competition idea I’ve mentioned in the past. Spoilers for the ending are included below, so don’t read past Day 16 if you want it to be a surprise. I’d love feedback about including more Tom Wilson/Mike Latta, and also let me know if you have other Kane/Toews or Benn/Seguin ideas you’d like to see included.
I know that I want to add more with their teammates (including reactions to the competition); I also want to add stuff from the All-Star weekend (most of this was written before that happened). Finally, I want to include more interactions between the couples beyond the competition aspect.
A couple of other things I’d like feedback about:
Would it be better to remove any mention of their girlfriends? I tend to write things based on real life, but do some readers prefer an AU where the girlfriends don’t exist? (I currently have three mentions of them.)
Is switching points of view too confusing? There probably isn’t a way to do it otherwise, though…
Patrick is getting ready for bed when he receives an unexpected text from Segs.
Tyler: remember the brownie bromance tweet I told u about?
Patrick: …i think?
T: how some fans put together all the pics of us and basically said we should be together?
P: oh yeah
T: something similar happened again
T: but youre involved
P: wtf r u saying someone wants us to bang? eww
T: haha no… so some fan on twitter sent me this link comparing nhl bromances, saying im copying u n tazer with my benn bromance
T: but i was thinking we totally should lol
P: what do u mean?
T: it would blow their fucking minds if we did try to one up each other
T: cmon kaner whats the harm? it’ll be fun
P: id have to check with Jonny
T: you scared youd lose to us?? the big established bromance falling to the new guys?
P: fuck you, no,we’ll totally kick your asses. though what kinds of things did you have inmind? Jonny’s gf already thinks we’re banging. if we go too far she might breakup with him
T: and thats a
P: hahahahahaha good
T: great part of
jamie being single
P: okay, ill
convince Jonny. you start, we’ll do something to top it
T: kay dude
Segs post-game interview:
“Being traded to
Dallas was the best thing that could have happened to me, both professionally
“Personally? Could you
Tyler fakes getting
distracted, purposefully looking over and smiling at Jamie.
“Oh, uh, sorry,
thought Jamie was trying to get my attention for something. Isn’t he great? I’m
so glad I got the chance to work with him. Meeting at that All-Star Draft, who
would have thought three years later we’d be so close?” Tyler smirks,
licking his lips.
According to @88PKane he
knew even at 13 that Jonny would play an important role in his life.
Mark Lazerus @MarkLazerus
.@88PKane says: “I
knew, back in the Junior Flyers when we were 13, that Jonny would be
important to my life.” #TheyAreAdorable
Chris Kuc @ChrisKuc
Toews overhears as walks
past, says they talked about dreams of playing together in NHL during Junior
Flyers summer tournament #Blackhawks
Mark Lazerus @MarkLazerus
Toews: “We actually
talked about wanting to play on the same NHL team. We knew our chemistry at 13
would only grow.” #TheyAreAdorable
HOLY FUCK HOLY FUCK they
ship themselves more than anyone!!!!!!
#kazer #Patrick Kane
#Jonathan Toews #everyone ships them #but not more than #they ship themselves