I'm having trouble moving too fast in my story. I really don't mean to. I also tend to write my things strangely and they end up sounding like instructions, or like a play. Any advice?
Focus more on the detail around your characters. Don’t just make it sound like,
He said. She said. He sat down, then got up.
Focus on emotions and thoughts, as well. What’s going through your character’s head? What’s going through the heads of the people around them? And then focus on the actual time span of conversations. Something as a simple greeting or hello should be short. A conversation about the plot should be relatively important and be written as such.
Just expand on detail, that’s my best advice.