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anonymous asked:

I'm writing a story and I'm having trouble with dialogue. I was wondering if you could give me some direction? I'm writing a conversation but the flow keeps getting interrupted by 'she said' and stuff like that, but if I don't put that there I find it doesn't flow well either? Like you can't see who's saying what and all that idk....

hmmm ok it’s a little hard to help with flow without seeing the actual conversation but i’ll do the best i can!!! (also i talked about dialogue before so if you’re struggling with that at all something in this post might help!!)

i’m assuming the conversation’s between more than two people, because that’s when not using ‘x said’ gets the most confusing, and those conversations are definitely more difficult. while those ‘said is dead’ posts kinda suck, i do personally try to limit my use of ‘x said’ whenever possible. instead i talk about body movement and tone of voice if i’m able

example because it’s probably easier to see/read it than to have me just ramble on: 

“So what we need to do,” Adrien says, moving the paper clip three centimeters to the left, “is shift the entire second row about fifteen centimeters. That should shift the center of gravity enough for it to balance.”

Alya nods slowly. “Riiiiiggghhhhtttt.”

Nino holds out the tape dispenser. “You do you, man. I mean, you do know what you’re doing, right?”

Adrien shrugs. “I’ve never done this before.”

if you use body movements, you’re specifying the character without having to use ‘x said’. body movement (now that i look at my writing) is usually my go to. it also adds movement to the characters and conversation. 

and like i mentioned before, you can also do it with tone and stuff. this is where you get into different words for said. you have to be a bit more careful with these because alternatives to said often change the meaning of the dialogue and can sometimes stick out more than said. generally, i stick to the same words. i think my most common are ‘murmur’, ‘mutter’, ‘whisper’, ‘add’, and ‘grumble’. using too many can make or writing clunky, but using some can help switch up tones and help the conversation not be as choppy as it would be if you were only using ‘x said’:

“And desperately needed brain cells,” Kim whispers to Alix.

Alix snickers as Chloé gives Kim the middle finger.

“We don’t even meet every week,” Mylène points out.

“We don’t even meet every other week,” Juleka mutters. “Just whenever Alya has an idea.”

“And only during lunch,” Nino adds motioning to his bag of chips.

“An idea!” Rose rests her chin in her hands. “Oooooo, Alya do tell!”

Nathanael joins Sabrina and sits on top of a desk. “But what are the chances of it actually working?”

Everyone looks back to Max.

He adjusts his glasses. “Probably higher than when we were leaving them to their own devices.”

“So…” Nino drawls.

you probably noticed i mix the two a lot. that’s something i’d definitely suggest doing too

and finally: read the conversation aloud! if an ‘x said’ sounds weird, try something else. i find that reading dialogue and conversations aloud is super helpful when trying to get them to flow

i’m not sure if this answer was helpful at all, but i hope it was a little bit!! if you have any more questions/something more specific, don’t be afraid to ask!!

WildeHopps Headcanon

Once Nick and Judy start dating in earnest, he finds she’s startlingly easy to wrongfoot with compliments. It takes him a while to work out that between literally hundreds of siblings, and parents who didn’t really understand her dreams, Judy has never had the opportunity to get used to compliments fitted to her personally. Meanwhile he, accustomed to rapidly sussing people out from years of hustling, finds it easy to do just that. This actually starts to become a problem when he keeps making her deliriously happy with off-hand remarks during work.

They eventually work out a shortlist of some far more banal and superficial compliments he can use so as not to distract her when she’s concentrating on a case. This helps less than you might think, because now when Judy hears the kind of shallow compliments that most women get all the time, she unconsciously knows that Nick could be reflexively spinning off the kind of thing that would reduce her to a stammering blush, but he checks himself out of care for her.

Judy occasionally turns the tables with incredibly hopeful, sincere, determined and utopian mini-speeches that she doesn’t give a second thought to, but leaves him starting to feel like maybe deep down the world actually is a wonderful place, and that is the most disturbingly happy sensation he’s ever had because damnit, isn’t he supposed to be a cynic? This kind of mushy stuff is supposed to only happen in the really cruel scams, it’s not supposed to be true, it’s not supposed to tip your world upside down and shake everything out. It’s like being whacked over the head with a half-brick made of hope.

(Although sometimes he wishes she wouldn’t do it to criminals while on-duty. Then again, sometimes he loves her for doing just that.)

(Credit to @aenramsden for most of the last third)

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- The Rosewood High School Council proposes making school attendance mandatory for students.

- Spencer is happy that after accusing every real person in Rosewood of being A, she can now start on the non-existent ones.

- Aria admits she also used to have an imaginary friend, a little brother called Mike.

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- Doctor Sullivan tells the girls she’s heard of a great new technique that might help them recover. It’s called Doll Therapy.

- Alison coaches the Rosewood girl’s soccer team. They become very successful, though their intensive use of psychological tactics against opposing teams is somewhat controversial.

- Ezra tells Aria that writing things down really would help, the more detail the better. She asks how it would help her. He says it’s not to help her, it’s for his book.

- Pam has a talk to Sara about water bills.

- Sara enjoys Emily’s french toast, but escapes before Emily makes her empanadas.

- Andrew forms a Rosewood Men’s Rights group. Shares stories of injustice, such as when you do a bunch of shady stuff but don’t get sex in reward.

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