I really loved the panning scene at the beginning of Off Colors.
It took forever but I edited it together in this one really, really, really long image. There camera was zooming as well as panning so it’s not perfect and that really bothers me but it’s all breathtaking nonetheless!
lvtvr’s writing tutorials, pt 1: battling my nemesis (or, how to punctuate dialogue)
kids. I’m Charlie. I write.
translated and proofread four full-length novels, so I now suffer from the work-related
condition of never being able to turn my editing glasses off. This can make
reading fanfic a bitch for me. Because, let’s be real: unbeta’d amateur work easily lets a lot of mistakes slip through.
It is, however, possible to minimize those mistakes.
world going to end if there are errors in your fanfic? Of course not. If you
want to focus on the content of your writing more than adhering to rules of language, by
all means, do that. There’s time to learn this stuff later.
know what? Formatting matters. If you truly want to get better at writing, then
eventually you are going to have to
deal with this aspect of it. And yes, it’s hard work – but I hope to help you along the way.
THE POINT OF THIS ESSAY: PUNCTUATING
to be the #1 formatting problem that amateur writers struggle with. However, there are boatloads of experienced fanfic writers who still seem
to struggle with it, or are just so used to making mistakes that they’ve made
it “their style.” And at the risk of sounding like a total bitch, it doesn’t matter how amazing or
well-loved their work is otherwise: wrong
is still wrong. Just because someone is consistent about always writing “your”
instead of “you’re” doesn’t make it correct, and dialogue is no different.
If these kinds of persistent mistakes don’t bother you, then good for you. Your life is
probably a lot more fun than mine.
But if you want to learn to do it right – if you
want the great look and perfect flow that immaculate punctuation will bring
your writing – then you have to rise above this.
COMMA VS. PERIOD – THE ULTIMATE SHOWDOWN
with something simple.
This is a
good sentence. This sentence is an upstanding member of our society. You can’t
go wrong with this sentence. Got me? Okay.
have a look at another one.
sentence is a delinquent. In fact, it’s not even a sentence
it’s two sentences. And it is always, always, always wrong. Rule of thumb: never do this.
just some elitist, snooty gatekeeping crap, either. There’s a purely functional reason why it’s incorrect.
a period after your dialogue, you are cutting it off from whatever comes next. Whatever follows dialogue that ends with a
period has to be an independent sentence. This distinction is used to
regulate the rhythm and flow of the writing.
is a transitive verb, meaning it needs to
take an object. While you can sigh, yawn, or laugh independently of anything else, “saying”
isn’t possible unless you are saying SOMETHING. (I.e., “She laughed” is a
complete sentence on its own; “He said” isn’t.) Same goes for synonyms of “say,”
such as whisper, repeat, and exclaim. They almost always get lonely without some dialogue attached to
them with a comma.
at some examples.
“I’m fine,” he said.
example IS NEVER CORRECT. NOT EVER. It
should ALWAYS be the latter. ALWAYS.
“I’m fine.” He laughed.
examples are BOTH CORRECT, but convey different nuances. In the first example,
he laughs the words. In the second, he says the words first, and laughs
afterward. These are separate things, not
two different ways to express the same idea. No matter how much fic you’ve read
where they’re treated as synonymous, they are not. They are not. They are not.
FUNKY WITH “?” AND “!”
sentence in dialogue ends with a question mark or exclamation point, you always keep that punctuation – you never
replace it with a comma. This is where we use the above rule to make sure
things don’t get ambiguous.
“What’s up?” They yawned.
examples are BOTH CORRECT. In the first, they are yawning the words. In the
second, they yawn after speaking. By capitalizing “they,” you are indicating
that the question mark is behaving like a period. You are thereby orphaning the
sentence that follows the dialogue. In this case, since the sentence can stand
alone, that’s perfectly fine.
the boy repeated.
“I’m okay!” The boy repeated.
first example is CORRECT. The second is ALWAYS WRONG. Remember, capitalizing “the”
means you are drawing a line between the dialogue and the following sentence. “Repeated”
needs an object, but now, because the exclamation point is behaving like a
period, “The boy repeated” stands alone. That’s an ungrammatical sentence, and without the implied attachment to the preceding dialogue, it drifts alone in the void.
And, well, that’s not good.
section to address this other weird shit I’ve seen:
He murmured, pouring himself another cup of coffee, “I promise.”
This is a
big WTF that has basically just reversed the correct order of things. It should
he murmured, pouring himself another cup of coffee. “I promise.”
pretty cool.” The doctor laughed, turning to her girlfriend, “You should try it.”
We have two
options to fix this, depending on if we want her to laugh the words or not.
pretty cool,” the doctor laughed, turning to her girlfriend. “You should try it.”
(laughing as she speaks)
pretty cool.” The doctor laughed, turning to her girlfriend. “You should try it.”
(laughing after speaking)
especially when you start working with more complex sentences, things can get
confusing, and your options can increase. Feel free to shoot me a message if you’re not sure. However, the
rules above are the basic ones to keep in mind.
made it to the end! If it feels like a lot, that’s because it is. Yes, it’s
plenty to remember, because writing is hard. Try to think about these rules when you’re reading published books (not fanfic, you can’t trust fanfic), and
eventually you’ll get the hang of it.
This was originally going to be a drawing of a trans!peter headcannon for @transpeter ‘s birthday, but it turned into Ned and Peter chilling on a roof top, so?? I’ll do something else for the occasion and post this one now ;)
Frankly, I’m beyond annoyed with the evak stans who are complaining about this season of skam. I’ve seen people continuing to express disappointment that even isn’t the main and some have been whining about this season being “boring”.
I’d first like to point out that, so far, this season has been objectively good with drama already brewing within the girl gang and Sana and Yousef exchanging meaningful glances (god knows I’m already hooked!). The fact that some of you are complaining about how uninteresting the story is despite this is really telling. It’s clear that some of you came to skam for your fix of cute white boys kissing and now you’re unreasonably bitter that they are not the central story.
I’m not denying that isak’s story was important because it was! However, it’s really frustrating that some skam fans are disregarding how important and groundbreaking this new season is! How often do you see a Muslim girl as the face of a globally successful show, having her depicted as a regular teenager going through relatable teenage experiences?
Sana deserves this season and the millions of young Muslim women around the world like Sana deserve this season.
When I woke up, I knew something wasn’t right. First of all, instead of thin coarse sheets, I was covered in a thick soft quilt. Secondly, there was a weight pressing against my waist and light breathing in my ears.
Then it hit me. I had sleepwalked. I had sleepwalked right into the Captain’s chambers. When I realised my situation and how dreadful it was, I began to sweat profusely, thinking about my soon-to-come demise. If the Captain awoke for whatever reason, I would be a dead man.
Slowly and steadily, I manoeuvred out of the bed, when his muscular arm pulled me by the sleeve right back into it. The same arm made it’s way around my waist once more, his ripped biceps holding me in place firmly.
He was still fast asleep. I took the chance to study him. His face was a lot more childlike in this state, I observed. The creases between his eyebrows were less profound and his mouth was parted ever so slightly. He looked… adorable. In contrast, he was also muscular and handsome.
This man was just so perfect and it bothered me to the core. I wanted to run my hands through his hair and kiss him all over his face. Whatever was to come, I figured, I would deal with in the morning. For now, all I wanted to do was to cherish this moment, and fell asleep in his arms.
“Eren,” I heard a voice say. I rubbed my eyes and looked up at the other man. His was still shirtless and his hair was a mess. God, did he look hot. Unfortunately for me, he didn’t look as happy to see me as I was to see him. Well, what did I expect?
“C-Captain,” I stuttered, my pathetically sad communication skills showing. Levi raised a brow and rested his weight on his elbow.
“Well?” He asked, “Care to explain what the fuck you were doing in my bed?”
“I-I sleepwalked, sir,” I tried to explain, “It’s a habit of mine.”
“I see,” He said with a hint of a smile on his face, “Any particular reason why you chose to walk into this room?”
I avoided his gaze, probably blushing like mad. “I don’t know, sir,” I gulp.
“Is that so?” He mumbled, his beautiful steely eyes flicking towards my lips for just a moment before looking back into mine. He closed in on me, pinning me towards the headboard. He leaned in with his eyes closing and I followed his actions.
Right before our lips touched, his head whisked to the side of my face and he pecked my cheek lightly. Unable to apprehend what just happened, I simply watched him get out of bed and pick up his shirt, which had been laying on the nightstand.
I touched the skin where his lips still lingered. He put on the shirt and smirked at me. “Tea, Eren?” He asked.
There’s something I noticed after playing Joseph’s route. So, Robert warns you about Joseph, and Joseph informs you that he and Robert were a thing once. If you go on the second date with Joseph, Mary is cantankerous and rude to you because she knows that you and Joseph are getting closer, probably because she knows that he’s cheated before.
Yet, she still hangs out with Robert.
Does she know Robert slept with her husband? Did Robert ever tell her? If he did, what exactly did he tell her? He couldn’t have just come out and told her the very complicated truth, because she seems so vitriolic towards the player character when she even thinks he and Joseph might be getting close. It would have ruined their friendship. So did he try to paint the whole thing as Joseph’s fault?
If he didn’t tell her, does he plan on just keeping the secret forever? Just letting Mary think that her husband slept with some rando and now only Joseph gets the blame for it, while he’s free to vilify Joseph all he wants to stay in Mary’s good graces and try to come out like the wounded party? Even though he knowingly slept with his best friend’s husband?
Furthermore, why does Mary stay with Joseph if she’s so damn unhappy? Like, she obviously cares very little for her children, and almost seems to resent them. Whatever love she had for Joseph is long since dead, and she views him as a pathetic, plastic man. The whole situation just seems to exacerbate her incredibly evident depression, and getting out would probably do her a world of good. So why would she want to reconcile with a cheating man she doesn’t love and keep the family she’s, at best, ambivalent to?
I guess what I’m trying to say is that Mary, Robert, and Joseph are all terrible people, and anyone who tries to outright demonize them and/or ignore all the glaring faults they have annoys me.