I’m stuck. This is another page for my Mom’s book. Not sure if I’m done or stuck. Hate that feeling. The words are ““Yes, I do,” said Jimmy Barker and the muzzler.  They sounded alike.

 “This is my swing,” I said and I started to swing.

The muzzler looked scared.   I noticed Jimmy and the muzzler looked alike too. ”


Critique please? This is a page for my Mom’s children’s book she wrote. It is entitled “The Muzzler” and is a monster vs kid type story about overcoming fear. 

It is without embedded text, but the wordssss areeeeee…..
“Tuesday I saw the Muzzler behind the counter at the bakery. "Look, mommy, a muzzler!” I said. “No, Ruby, thats a muffin.” said Mom. But it wasn’t.“

Anyway, this is the first final draft (an interesting way to work I know) and I am requesting critique. I’d appreciate anything! Thank you!