Critique please? This is a page for my Mom’s children’s book she wrote. It is entitled “The Muzzler” and is a monster vs kid type story about overcoming fear. 

It is without embedded text, but the wordssss areeeeee…..
“Tuesday I saw the Muzzler behind the counter at the bakery. "Look, mommy, a muzzler!” I said. “No, Ruby, thats a muffin.” said Mom. But it wasn’t.“

Anyway, this is the first final draft (an interesting way to work I know) and I am requesting critique. I’d appreciate anything! Thank you!