Murven text post AU where Raven and Roan are dating and Murphy schemes to break them up because HE SAW HER FIRST AND THAT ICE NATION BASTARD HAD NO RIGHT TO ASK HER ON A DATE BEFORE HE DID! 😉
The Island of Misfit Delinquents
Caw Caw Little Birdy: WHO’S GOT TWO THUMBS, A SEXY RED DRESS, AND A HOT DATE WITH ROAN AZGEDA TONIGHT?!?!?!?!?!
Murph-Man: Your mom?
Caw Caw Little Birdy: THIS GIRL
Caw Caw Little Birdy: Dammit Murphy
Caw Caw Little Birdy: You fun-sucking, last-piece-of-pizza snatcher, lotioned foot slipping around in a sock, uncouth garbage human, son of a bitch
Blake 1: You’ve gotten real creative with your insults lately
Blake 2: Rey just shit on your entire life son
Commander Clarke: #loveofmylife
Blake 1: #rude
Caw Caw Little Birdy: ANYWAY
Caw Caw Little Birdy: Roan’s got it all planned out He’s picking me up at seven and we’re going to a fancy dinner and a show. There’s also talk about getting coffee as we leisurely stroll back to my apartment under the light of a thousand brilliant stars, conversing about interesting topics
Murph-Man: Roan Azgeda: A modern day Jane Austen
Blake 2: Calm yo tits, Mr. Darcy
Commander Clarke: Murphy is SUCH a Darcy
Blake 1: Clarke is Jane Bennet and I’m Mr. Bingley
Blake 2: I’ve always wanted to be a snotty society lady
Blake 2: Count me in as Caroline Bingley
Murph-Man: I actually hate you all????
Caw Caw Little Birdy: I’M LIZZIE BENNET
Caw Caw Little Birdy: Watch me read all the books and slay men’s hearts with a slightly haughty attitude
Caw Caw Little Birdy: I deserve more than to be married off to a rich man I don’t love to save my father’s estate
Commander Clakre: ^^^ Same
Blake 2: ^^^ My new Instagram bio
Blake 1 + Murph-Man
Blake 1: So……
Blake 1: How you doing with all this?
Blake 1: And by this, I mean Raven and Roan
Blake 1: And by Raven and Roan I, of course, mean them dating
Blake 1: Murphy?
Murph-Man: Sorry I can’t guzzle vodka and text at the same time
Blake 1: It’s not even noon dude
Murph-Man: Then I’ll put the vodka in some orange juice
Murph-Man: Make some toast
Murph-Man: Call it brunch
Murph-Man: Like a middle-aged rich white woman
Blake 1: Buddy…… no
The Island of Misfit Delinquents
Caw Caw Little Birdy: When you actually care about how this date will go so you shave your legs
Blake 1: Wow, when should we expect to receive the invitations to your wedding?
Murph-Man: Too much work. Just wear sweatpants and call it done
Commander Clarke: Darcy strikes again
Blake 2 added King Azgeda to the group chat
Blake 2: Plan is working perfectly
Blake 2: Or WAS
Commander Clarke: Don’t be passive aggressive to my boyfriend
Caw Caw Little Birdy: Yeah just be flat out aggressive towards him
Blake 1: Well maybe next time we try and secretly try and set up our friends, yOU GUYS WON’T BASE THE PLAN AROUND ME TRYING TO COMFORT PEOPLE
King Azgeda: Our first mistake
Blake 1: Roan you absolute winter coat made out of Wookie fur
10:00 AM CrossFit, check! In true Memorial Day form, today’s workout was the Hero WOD, Murph.
1 mile run
100 pull ups (50 with green and red bands)
200 push-ups (100 on my knees)
300 squats (150)
1 mile run
Time: 43:47. I split the exercises up between the 1-mile runs with my sister. All the whiteboards were taken so we had to improvise.
Running is NOT my strong suit, so my goal was to not walk any of it, even if it was the slowest jog ever, and I did it!
Love letter from Murp mo chailín, my girl Ye never far from me thoughts even in his damned cell with me stupid brother Con. I miss ye lass, so much it hurts me heart. I know I will get to ye somehow, I love you so much lass. Con says he loves ye too, not like me though aye? Con says all we need is a plan n some rope, him and his stupid fuckin' rope, but if it meant I could get to ye I would. Mo ghrá thú (I Love You) Always thinking of ye lass, All me love, Murph 💚
I was having a really shit day and this just made me smile.
Hi! Congrats for your blog. I think your posts are very interesting :) How do yo write realistic and complex dialogues? Thank you!
Hi and thank you! ^_^
Great question. I used to be pretty clueless about what made good dialogue. I even bought two books on dialogue, and they were helpful, but didn’t give me the answers or depth I was looking for. They were more about the basics. I’ve tried to study dialogue over the years and I’ll share what I know. This is assuming you already know the basics. If not, or you need a refresher, here are some great articles:
To be honest, I don’t agree with everything in those articles, but I agree with 99% of it and all of those points are what you will hear taught in the writing world. But here are more tips beyond that:
“Advice about dialogue generally starts with discussing what your characters say. It might be better to start off with what your characters don’t say and the way they don’t….the more intense the feelings, the more likely people are to say the opposite of what they really mean. If you want to keep a high level of tension, keep the dialogue evasive, filled with suppressed information and unstated emotion.”
He also says that how a character sits, stands, fidgets, pauses, or adverts eyes can be as important as his or her words.
Three examples of narratives that follow Stern’s advice are The Office,The Hunger Games, and The Lord of the Rings, and I have those examplehere.(It looks like the first video no longer works, but the other stuff is there).
Dialogue is influenced by character voice. They aren’t the same thing, but they definitely relate.
Voice is made up of two things–what the character talks about, and how she says it. In other words:
What the Character Talks about + How She Says it = Voice
Voice is its own thing, but you can learn how to master it better in these articles I wrote.
Without a doubt I have found that subtext is one of the biggest keys to writing killer dialogue, if not the biggest. It relates to what I touched on earlier–what’s not said and the way it’s not. And yet it’s so much more! Subtext makes dialogue both complex and realistic. It’s definitely a challenge to learn and gain control of, but it’s so worth it. Uugh, I am a huge fan of subtext now!
It would take too long to include everything about subtext here, but luckily I have an entire article about what it is, how it works, and how to do it:
Mastering this alone will take your dialogue to the next level.
Other than subtext, there are a few other techniques that can really make your dialogue awesome, and you can read and learn about them in depth here. But in short:
Mini Context Shifts
A context shift usually happens when new information enters the story that changes our understanding of what is going on. It can also happen when a character reacts to information a certain way. Their reaction gives us a new context to view things through. You can have characters use mini context shifts in their conversations. For example, from Interstellar:
Cooper: After your mom came along, she said something to me that I never quite understood. She said, “Now we’re just here to be memories for our kids.” I think I understand now what she meant. Once you’re a parent, you’re the ghost of your children’s future. Murph: You said ghosts didn’t exist.
Context shift: Cooper is talking about a metaphorical ghost, but Murph’s response shifts the context to a literal ghost (the one in her room), and by doing that, in her anger, she’s able to throw what Cooper said earlier about ghosts in his face.
Cooper: That’s right, Murph. Look at me. I can’t be your ghost right now. I need to exist.
Context shift: Instead of becoming a victim to Murph’s tactics, Cooper seizes the new context, and shifts it again to the metaphorical, building on his own previous words for his benefit. “That’s right … . I need to exist.”
In the last example, Cooper and Murph create circuitry in their conversation by taking, responding, and building off one another’s words. You can’t take their lines and rearrange them, because each exchange is building off the other. They have circuitry.
I know that some people might read that and go “Duh! Of course they respond to one another. It’s a conversation!”
Responding is one thing, but building off it for a stronger, more interesting, more entertaining effect is another. For example:
Just responding: Cooper: After your mom came along, she said something to me that I never quite understood. She said, “Now we’re just here to be memories for our kids.” I think I understand now what she meant. Once you’re a parent, you’re the ghost of your children’s future. Murph: Dad, don’t go. Cooper: I have to, Murph. Murph: The books say “stay,” Dad. Cooper: I’ve got to go.
Building: Cooper: After your mom came along, she said something to me that I never quite understood. She said, “Now we’re just here to be memories for our kids.” I think I understand now what she meant. Once you’re a parent, you’re the ghost of your children’s future. Murph: You said ghosts didn’t exist. Cooper: That’s right, Murph. Look at me. I can’t be your ghost right now. I need to exist. They chose me. Murph, They chose me. You saw it. You’re the one who led me to them. Murph: That’s exactly why you can’t go. I figured out the message. One word. Know what it is?
By having the characters building on what the other said, we get stronger circuitry.
100 Days of Happy :: Day 4
(Also daily check in for 05.25.17)
Today was a doozy. I hit cardio hard in the AM for close to an hour and a half. I spent a half hour rolling out and an hour of yoga to loosen me up for Murph. I went in terrified of the workout (first time doing it), but ended up suprising myself. I got really introspective leading up to Murph and decided to be more than my excuses. No whining. No bullshit. Taped my shoulder and hit the ground running. Just because I couldn’t RX does mean I couldn’t do it at all. Next year I’ve got a goal to do unassisted pullups and throw on the weight vest.
Got two additional friends to join me (beyond my husband and brother in law) and they reeeally felt it. It’s always nice when you get a big group of people together who are willing to really push it.
“Oh I will find one mo ghrà” I smirked at Maddie. I felt m'jeans get tight again. I needed t'is lass tied up in my rope so I could have m'way wit her. I tried t'control m'mind as I ate. Maddie and Violet sure could cook. Me and Murph practically inhaled t'food it was t'at good. It felt good having a home cooked meal. “Amazing, this is so good t'anks lasses” I smiled as I ate. I rubbed Maddie’s leg in appreciation and winked at her. I smiled at Violet, Murph was holding her hand and smiling so wide, he really was completely smitten. He loved affection and in Violet he had found everyt'ing he needed. I couldn’t believe how lucky we both were. I kissed Maddie’s cheek and t'anked her.