ooh do you have any more writing tips?
aw, man, are you sure you want to come to me, master of the Bad Words? if you’re sure, anon. i think…. the biggest tip i can give you is that you can do anything you want, as long as you can tell me why. you want to write a prologue? alright, tell me why. you want to tag dialogue with a different verb each time? tell me why. you want a paragraph consisted entirely of fragments - cool, as long as you can tell me why. you need it to add something. every sentence, every word, is communicating something, so what makes the way you choose to communicate it the most effective? and this doesn’t just apply to the broad strokes of a work, this applies even to the smallest bits, like:
“His neck was slit ear-to-ear, glinting in a gaping, gory grin.”
i’m describing something disturbing, right? so i’m focusing on hard, displeasing sounds. ‘guh’ is a gross sound. the hard ‘l’ in 'slit’ and 'glinting’ is also unpleasant, as is the 'kuh’ in neck - which is precisely why i chose to say 'neck’ over 'throat.’ then there’s the alliteration, which highlights that gross 'guh’, which gets a good cacophonous effect. i want you to feel bad reading that sentence, so i craft that sentence with that end in mind. do i write my terrible batman fanfiction like this? ah, not usually, because it is a hell of a lot of work, but something i want to be special? absolutely.
there are a few cheats i haven’t seen around that make your writing stronger: don’t start a sentence with 'and’, 'but’, or 'so’, remove 'that’ where possible, treat 'this’ like an adjective and follow it immediately with a noun, but even those have exceptions - granted that those exceptions have a point. even writing in passive can be useful - there’s an example in frankenstein that you guys might know of, where the monster states, “after the murder of clerval”, which is passive because [spoilers] the monster is the one who killed clerval. that line, though, says something about the monster - the monster isn’t at a point to where he can admit responsibility to that.
so, essentially: think about what you’re saying! everything you’re saying is building a picture.