If I could give a tip to writers out there that I had to learn myself (that took really long for me to learn) - it’s that not every line of dialogue needs a two/three sentence explanation as to why this character said it or what they were doing as they said it.
It’s exhausting on the reader and the writer. It can be stressful, thinking you need to have every motion and emotion spelled out on the page - but sometimes it’s simpler to just…be simple. More so, it gives the reader a chance to paint the picture in their head as opposed to having it slow painted for them.
Anyway, just a suggestion from something I know I’ve done before and have worked to improve and something I see a lot in the fics I read.
Thanks for indulging me lol