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Title: The Unlovers - The Heart
Author: M. Salomon
Pages: 317
Genre: Young Adult – Dystopian
Rating:  ★★

Synopsis:

In a world where love is for sale, everything else lacks value.”
In London, 2040, love is known as OX2 and it has a price, a price that not everyone can pay. Sophie Quinn is lucky, recently she has moved with her family to Upper Thames, the most favored part of the city. They can consume OX2 whenever they want, which enables them to preserve their emotional ties and carry on a relatively normal life; she goes to college and her relationship with James is at its best.
However, something is threatening her apparent happiness. The sale of OX2 has generated new social classes and sociopolitical interests that will put her perfect world in danger. Sophie will have to choose whether to fight against love or for love; the days go by, the hours count and her own love has a price. Will she be willing to pay that price in spite of the consequences?

My Thoughts:

I was given this book in exchange for an honest review. 

A few years ago I read DELIRIUM by Lauren Oliver and fell head over heels in love with it. I loved everything about it, but mostly I loved the idea of living in a futuristic world were love was a sickness. The concept was so unique! Since then I’ve been looking for a new book that can fill the hole the Delirium trilogy left me with. When I was approached to read THE UNLOVERS, a story about a futuristic world where they need a drug called OX2 to find and preserve love and emotional ties; I was like sign me up! 

The world Sophia lives in is different than the world we live in now. The Fever started a few years back and left everyone with a new chemistry, we no longer make oxytocin. Without oxytocin humans all around the world walk around numb. Lovers no longer acknowledge each other; mothers are inattentive towards their children. The only way to prevent this from happening is to take an expensive, but temporary, drug called OX2. Sounds interesting right? 

M. Salomon is a talented writer but this book should have been reviewed by an editor before going to print. Normally I don’t mind a few errors, but this is a book that people are paying for and it was loaded with run-on sentences, misusage of commas, misspelled words, and inaccurately used homophone. However one of my biggest issues was with the dialogue and the unneeded sentences, not the grammatical errors.  I’m not sure if this book was translated from another language to English, but it really felt like it. It was like someone put the book in Google translator and out came the most robotic sentences. There was just no flow, the dialogue didn’t feel natural. I tried to read the sentences out loud in a British accent thinking that maybe my American accent was making the dialogue sound too rigid, but no, the dialogue just didn’t come out natural no matter how I said it.  Then there were the unneeded tidbits. I don’t need to know if the character walked exactly 32 steps on the beach. I don’t need to know that she turned on MTV, walked to a cabinet, got out a bowl, then got out the cereal, and poured it into the bowl. I don’t need to know every move she makes. I think the author was trying to be descriptive but it was more like reading directions. There were some great writing moments, as I mentioned the author has talent, but it was overshadowed by the awkwardness of dialogue and unnecessary information. 

Another thing to discuss is the world building and character development. As for the world, it’s set in 2040 England but even though there are futuristic gadgets, it’s still very 2016. The kids are still taking selfies, listening to Coldplay (Chris Martin would be in his 60s, bless him) and still watching MTV. Oh and they wear Chucks, I’m glad those never go out of style. As for the character development we really don’t know much about Sophia. We know that she paints, lived in a poverty stricken area, eats Fruit Loops starting with the green ones, but we don’t know much about her. There was a lack of emotion with her and I wasn’t sure if it was because of The Fever or because of the writing. 

Overall, I think that if this book had been edited more thoroughly (and by more than one person) it would have read much easier. Not to say that I didn’t enjoy the story, but the points I discussed really hindered my reading experience and my rating.