especially the fight scenes

All About Writing Fight Scenes

@galaxies-are-my-ink asked,

“Do you have any advice on writing fight scenes? The type of scene I’m writing is mostly hand to hand combat between two experts. I’m definitely not an expert so when I try to write it, the scene ends up sounding repetitive and dull.”

Fore note: This post is coauthored by myself and one of my amazing critique partners, Barik S. Smith, who both writes fantastic fight scenes and teaches mixed martial arts, various artistic martial arts, and weapons classes.

I (Bryn) will tell you a secret: I trained MMA for seven years, and when I write authentic hand to hand fight scenes, they sound dull too. 

The problem with fight scenes in books is that trying to describe each punch and kick and movement (especially if it’s the only thing you’re describing) creates a fight that feels like it’s in slow motion. 

I write…

Lowering her center of gravity, she held her right hand tight to her face and threw a jab towards his chin. He shifted his weight, ducking under her punch. His hair brushed against her fist, and he stepped forward, launching a shovel hook into her exposed side.

But your brain can only read for fast. In real life that series of events would take an instant, but I needed a full eight seconds to read and comprehend it, which gave it an inherent lethargic feel. 

So, we have two primary problems:

  1. How do we describe this fight in a way the reader can understand and keep track of? 
  2. How do we maintain a fast paced, interesting fight once we’ve broken down the fight far enough for readers to understand it? 

(We will get back to these, I promise.) But for now, let’s look at…

Different types of “fight scenes:”

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Em Dashes

A lot of people use semi-colons wrong because they know there’s supposed to be a pause in their sentence that they know isn’t quite a comma, so they think it must be that mysterious semi-colon. Usually, it’s actually supposed to be an em dash (—), which in some ways is more mysterious!

The em dash is the longest of the three dashes and most often used for interruptions. Interruptions in speech, in action, in thought. It’s also a great syntax addition for fight scenes, since it makes the narrative seem quick and unexpected and jolting from side to side like a fight scene should be. Read your em dash sentences out loud until you get a feel for how its pause compares to the pause of a comma. It’s a heartbeat longer. If a comma is one beat of pause, then I see an em dash as two beats of pause.

In this first example, the em dash is used to give an aside to the reader. It’s like a btw sort of moment, which can sometimes be replaced with commas or parenthesis. I think the em dashes are most suitable when your aside is decently long.

Her neighbor, Frank, is always blasting music.

Her neighbor—the one who always blasts the music—is named Frank.

My mischievous neighbor, Vince, seemed to have a knack for graveyard cavorting.

Vince—more often called (in a raised and angry voice) Vincent Price Ramsey—seemed to have a knack for graveyard cavorting.

Next up, here’s the em dash as a replacement for the semi-colon. Kinda like a slang or shortened sentence. Semi-colons have to connect two independent clauses—meaning each side of the semi-colon could stand alone as its own complete sentence. If you don’t want to do that, try an em dash:

I thought hanging out would be great—a chance to finally see the city, just like Aunt Lillian wanted.

I thought hanging out would be great; it would be a chance to finally see the city, just like Aunt Lillian wanted.

There was a headstone hardly a foot from where I’d emerged—dark grey stone a few inches thick and maybe as high as my knee.

There was a headstone hardly a foot from where I’d emerged; it was made of dark grey stone a few inches thick and maybe as high as my knee.

Sometimes, you can use an em dash to have a speaker correct themselves, or interrupt themselves to amend their sentence.

I could see the blur of the graveyard behind him—through him—

Similar to the last example, it can be used to interrupt a sentence in order to add additional information about the sentence. Often you can use a comma in this situation, too, so try to think of syntax and how that additional beat of pause changes things. In this case, Alice has just seen a ghost for the first time, so her mind is a bit too shocked for the normal pause of a comma. Read both. Doesn’t the one with the em dash sound more shocked or surprised, while the comma makes it sound like a simple observation?

He was glowing pale—almost tinged in cold blue.

He was glowing pale, almost tinged in cold blue.

Of course, it could be an interruption. It could be someone interrupting another in speech, one action interrupting another, or a character’s thoughts interrupting themselves. Here I’ll include the sentence with the em dash and the sentence following, so you can see the thing interrupted and the interruption.

You can have an action interrupt a character’s thoughts. For the first one, Alice is in a creepy situation and completely focused on something else, so when something touches her elbow, she’s shocked out of her thoughts. For the second one, Tristan is listening for an enemy when the enemy makes a move and startles him into action.

As far as I could tell it was some kind of berry—

An icy contact on my elbow broke my resolve, and I screamed until an equally cold hand clamped over my mouth.

The night was still, and yet—

Something whistled through the air. Tristan jerked backwards, narrowly avoiding an incoming dagger.

Here we have one character interrupting another in dialogue. Pretty self-explanatory.

“I’m not going to—”

Mom’s voice in the receiver cut me off. “At least consider it.”

“After all, you’re only a—”

“If you even say girl,” I interrupted, “I’ll stab you, I swear.”

The next one is part of a fight scene, so Alice’s thoughts are interrupting themselves as soon as she thinks them. She throws up an idea, “iron,” but interrupts herself from further exploring that idea, and instead casts it out. In a fight, you don’t have time to think out long, eloquent ideas. Your thoughts should come in fragments. Stab. Punch. Dodge. Swing. Would this work? No. How about this? Maybe. The em dash can help get across this uneven jolting of thoughts.

Iron—no use. I’d dropped the knife when her damn vines ensnared me, and the nails were in my pockets and out of reach. Blood—there were possibilities there.

Continuing in fight scenes, em dashes can have action interrupt action. Don’t just throw them in willy nilly, but if you have a chance for an em dash, jump on it. Instead of a word like “suddenly,” it makes it feel suddenly. Ups the tension. Em dashes are about interruption, and what is a fight scene but two people interrupting each other’s attempts to kill the other? This is especially useful for the last line in a paragraph during a fighting scene, because it’s a nice place to have one action interrupt another.

I snatched it—slit across my hand—

And stabbed her through the heart.

His swords whistled through the air—

A clean “X” appeared on the imp’s back, severing its body into four neat chunks.

So yeah, I’m basically obsessed with em dashes and I use more of them than the majority of writers. (At 72k words, my current project has 22 semi-colons and 344 em dashes. So. Yeah. Not to mention the length of this post…) Em dashes are way cool and can add a lot to your writing even though they’re just another form of punctuation. Syntax helps your reader into the mindset you’re going for, and em dashes can be a great, powerful part of that syntax!

–E

The Quick Decisions of Characters

In many actions scenes - like fight scenes, especially - our characters have to rely on their wit and intuition alone to make sure they survive until the next scene. In the heat of the moment, they have to decide where to hit, how to dodge, if it’s safe to look around to see what might help them. As writers, we can use all these things to our advantage in crafting our stories.

So, the first thing you’ll want to do is drop your character into a situation they would consider stressful. It doesn’t necessarily have to be stressful, but that element can give them some issue in making the actual decision. If your end goal is to have them make the “wrong” decision, that stress will be something that makes it easier to achieve.

Most people, whether they know it or not, tend to walk into certain situations with a pre-made plan in mind. That normally doesn’t too do well in the field of creating a need for quick decisions, so what we do then it make it impossible for your character to carry out their initial plan. At this point, they should be too far gone to be able to turn back, which literally forces them to make these quick decisions that determine their future.

Remember that everything happening will have its later consequences. But, this is quick time - they don’t have the time to consider which is best in the long run. Your character should be making the choices that will benefit them in the here and now. They’ll get out of their sticky situation and deal with the consequences later - which could lead to another issue.

Now, every decision your character makes should push the plot forward in some way, shape, or form. Maybe they have to choose someone to save or a path to take them to safety; it’s decisions like these that normally have the largest impact. After the decision is made, make sure the choice’s full consequences are carried out. Cause and affect should be a major factor here; if it isn’t, your readers are likely to full a little short-changed if nothing else.

So, that’s all I’ve got for you today! I really hope this helped whoever needed it; if you want to see another topic covered, don’t forget to leave a message in my ask box! Until then, much love! <333

literally just taking out the love triangle plot and putting in more yousana development and girl squad scenes would have fixed like a significant amount of the problems this season

a while back, I asked @arishynya to make a tutorial on how to draw snakes and I immediately fell in love with her snake leo design, he is just so cool looking. Also, this drawing is loosely inspired by an animated french movie called Sahara that I saw on Netflix because it had some dancing snakes and the animation in it is awesome especially in this one scene where there was a snake dance fight.

Sketchvember #2 with the king 👑❤

I don’t remember the exact outfit but I can recall with great clarity the way Rex impaled a guy from across the room & I would pay lots of money for clones fighting old school *3*

anonymous asked:

hai! i'm new here! and i gotta say, i fucking love your comic bruh! especially those fight scenes and plottwists! is it still on going? or hatius?

its still on goin anon-chan dont worry xD
im just very slow at drawing comics this month because busy with college lol

This is for A Collision Of Stars by @dustoftheancients :) 
I just have a boner for bloody and violent Kylo. Especially when he’s injured on top of it. Sorry. (Don’t worry, it’s his own blood. Wonder why? Go read the fanfic!!!)

This fanfiction is the best reylo fic out there, hands down. Rey and Kylo’s characterization is perfect and their interactions are such a joy to read, but I especially love the fight scenes! I have sent passages of this fic to friends who aren’t even into reylo, that’s how much I love it. This is a scene from chapter 13, I’ve probably read this one at least 5 times. Here’s an extract:

He fell onto his hands and knees, trying to push past the remainder of the drugs and the blood loss. A wave of dizziness hit him, but he didn’t let that stop him. Nothing would kill his momentum.

The other man started to react immediately, but Kylo was faster. Lifting his hand as well as he was able, he used the Force to twist the man’s neck almost all of the way around, snapping it.

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wonder woman is legit one of the best movies i’ve ever seen

seriously, it was worth every single cent and more. i literally can’t critique it. i couldn’t if i tried. literally everything about it was everything i never knew i needed out of superhero films and four hours later i still can’t stop talking about it and i think my sister’s gonna kill me.

some very high points/reasons why everybody and their mother should go see it:

  • the first twenty minutes or so with the amazons. okay, so i legit teared up in a lot of their scenes (especially the training scenes and the fight on the beach) just because it was so amazing to see women doing this, for them to be powerful like this. also it was amazing for them not to be sexualised, for not all of them to be young or to have flawless skin, and for the glimpses of diversity in colour and body type.
  • also bby!Diana was adorable <33333
  • there were quite a few traditional gender specific tropes that were flipped quite nicely as well. like i didn’t feel like Diana was ever the subject of the male gaze but the scene with Steve in the bath was literally your stereotypical accidental naked scene that most female characters get put into with the gender flipped. it was nice to see (Chris Pine’s abs were also nice to see)
  • also Steve Trevor? like he’s such a good, well-rounded character? and his relationship with Diana is so cute? there was such a potential for him to have been another rendition of the kinda misogynistic jerkass but he never is? he believes in Diana the entire time. even though he might not always think she’s doing what’s best he never actually doubts her. anD THAT LINE AT THE END “i can save today, you can save the world” NO THANKS I DIDN’T NEED MY HEART
  • i fully expected int that scene at No Man’s Land when they said that no man has ever crossed it for Diana to just go “I am no man.” 
  • also representation? main people include a moroccan and a native american and they actually bother to acknowledge racism and the fact that the British (the “good guys” no less) have done shitty things
  • oh yeah and Diana is totally bi. please. 
  • on that topic, really appreciate how they did the scene with Diana and Steve talking about sex. that could have gone very wrong so easily with Diana being all naive but instead they went nah and please Steve, she’s experienced. 
  • since i just noticed i haven’t actually talked about it, let me talk about our lord and saviour Diana Prince. not only is she a badass female superhero but she also doesn’t shirk from femininity. her being a warrior doesn’t take away from her being a woman. she never rejects wearing dresses (outside of practicality reasons), she still coos at babies, she dances. all too often being a character as powerful as Wonder Woman comes at the cost of being a woman. this never happens here. i also love that unlike so many of DC’s other superheroes (*coughcoughBatmancoughcough*), she sees so much hope in the world. her whole thing throughout the movie is that it must be a god that are causing men to be corrupted and when she discovers that things aren’t so black and white she doesn’t throw in her shield and give up on mankind. she sees that there can be good there too and she chooses to continue to protect mankind. also let it be said that there was nothing in this movie that diana did that she didn’t specifically want to do. seriously. everything was her choice. she literally said that Steve, for all his good intentions, could not tell her what to do. honestly, i’m so happy for all the little girls who went to see this movie and now want to grow up to be wonder woman.
  • everything else being said, seeing Remus Lupin in that role made me really uncomfortable
  • also wHO’S FUCKING IDEA WAS IT TO CAST CHRISES AS STEVES IN A WORLD WAR AND HAVE THEM BE SELF-SACRIFICING WHILE FLYING PLANES?

so yeah, please go see. honestly, after i left the movie theatre i kind of realised that i’d never seen a female led superhero movie (never watched Catwoman or Elektra) and I had literally only seen one other female led movie that even compared to Wonder Woman (the glory that is Mad Max: Fury Road). and that was weird. it was a weird feeling to watch a movie like Wonder Woman and to be so empowered by it, to cry because it meant so much to see women being so unequivocally, so independently the heroes. i wish this was a movie that i got to see about 12 years ago to be honest.

finally, how the fuck do i even watch a superhero movie after that?

anonymous asked:

Should I start watching RWBY? it seems okay, but I don't anything about the story. The characters look okay though

Well to be honest it starts off pretty rough. Sure the trailers are nice (watch these first and in order) but overall the first volume was okay. A lot of ppl dropped it because of the animation and stuff. But I ended up liking it as I kept watching

Originally posted by subwaywithinmymind

Volume 2 was when I actually fell in love with the show. They improved on a lot of things and introduced my 2nd favorite character (Emerald Sustrai). Cooler battles and more story.

Originally posted by haywood-dairy-farm

RWBY was one of those shows where I initially watched it for the fight scenes but ended up liking everything else. Especially the characters. 

Originally posted by scarfheroes

Idk man it’s not for everybody but I will vouch that this show is actually pretty fucking good. 

Originally posted by daftprodigy

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For those of you that loved “The Raid” and “The Raid 2″, especially the final fights, you simply have to watch this fight scene from “Headshot”.
As a warning, it does contain spoilers since it’s the final fight, but if you don’t mind things being spoiled you’re in store for an epic fight scene.

“Headshot” has, thus far, been extremely overlooked by action fans. The US DVD (no Blu Ray) is released next month with a Blu Ray being released in the UK (which I’ve pre-ordered).
Granted, it’s not frenetically paced as the first “The Raid” and doesn’t have the sprawling plot of the second film, but, when the action comes, it’s thick, fast and super violent. Well worth seeking out.

ayayforgay  asked:

Do you know of any fics where Wade and Peter are in a relationship and are both assassins but neither knows about the other's secret life?(basically a 'Mr. And Mrs. Smith AU, especially with the big final fight/sex scene)

There was a great one which was sadly taken off AO3… But here are other fics i hope you’ll like

Trust, Love, and Other Misconceptions About What Peter Wants   by ImagineYourself       

it looks like you might be one of us by  scarlett_starlett                           

Mr. and Mrs. Smith  by Sintero, Staubengel                

When Cast and Crew Mix

april 30!!! @snowbaz-feda

i think it’ll appear as may 1, but trust me, here, it’s still april

Theatre au (bc this hasn’t been done a ton) i’ve always headcanoned penny as a gr8 stage manager so here

word count: 565

Simon leans against the wall of the green room, waiting for orders. He should look comfortable, but Baz is in the room, sneaking glances from a group of actors, so Simon looks a bit like he wants to take a shit.

“Alright, guys. Two weeks to show and we need to do a full run-through. Props are still on hold so we have some stand-ins, especially for the fight scenes. I need run crew to their stations, and get your headsets on! This is our first real run-through and I want it to be as realistic as possible. Actors, costumes are in the works so no worries there, but don’t forget to move how you were directed. Carpenters and extra crew members, you’re welcome to watch if you have nothing better to do, but most of you have something better to do. Run starting in ten, so let’s get going!”

Simon hauls himself off the wall, shooting what looks like a glare towards Baz. Baz misses this by seconds before shooting Simon a much pine-ier look.

We’re putting on a modern take on Shakespeare’s Much Ado About Nothing, and frankly, it’ll be great if they could just stop flirting. Simon’s our lighting designer and works run crew for lights, so I really can’t have him distracted. And Baz…well, the magnanimous Baz is an excellent actor, but apparently he can’t even pretend to not be distracted by Simon when he’s on the lot.

“Oh Stage Manager Bunce, Lord and Saviour, can I have some gaff tape?”

I roll my eyes before tossing the gaff tape his way. Simon disappears onstage, and I take the opportunity to pull Baz aside.

“Pitch, I need to talk to you.”

“Yes, Taskmaster Bunce?” He’s joking, of course, but I don’t acknowledge the dig.

“I need you focused today, okay?” Baz scoffs and I ignore it. “Not that I’m directing, but you’ve been distracted in our last few rehearsals, and you know that Snow isn’t going away any time soon. So you can either forget about the boy for now, or just do your job and act like he doesn’t make you want to dive off the stage into his path.”

He throws his hair out of his face, smirking. “Gotcha, Bunce. Any chance you’re giving Snow the same pep talk?”

“Would you stop using me as the go-between? Flirt with him one on one, but not during my rehearsal!”


The next time it becomes an issue is opening night, when I have more than enough to deal with anyway. Baz is in costume and should be in makeup, but I find him staking out in the lighting booth, doing his best to kiss Simon.

I slam the door open, announcing my presence.

“Penny!” Simon looks frazzled, and his lips are redder than normal.

“I don’t care that you were snogging. Baz, get out of my booth and into the makeup chair. And from now until we’ve closed, the only time I want you getting anywhere near anyone’s lips is onstage. Got it?”

Baz slinks out of the booth but not before he grabs Simon’s neck and plants a kiss on him. Simon at least has the decency to look sheepish.

“Sorry, Pen. He sort of…appeared.”

“I’m you got past glaring at him during runs, but please keep him out of here. Kiss him on your own time.”

“I will.”




When we do tech bows at closing night, Simon always defers to me, but this time he goes willingly. As soon as he’s up on stage, Baz grabs his arm and hauls him over. I would yell at them, but it’s closing to a full house, so there’s no need. We take our final bows, and when the lights go down, Baz pulls Simon backstage. I don’t want to know what they’re doing. I just hope Simon has the foresight to hang up Baz’s costume and save them both a tongue lashing.

The Return Of Our Kaneki

Here is what I have been waiting for so long…a view into Kaneki’s thoughts, feelings and motivations. It’s just a tidbit, but damn, it feels good.

The best thing about the original TG and about TG:re, the thing that sucked us all in and kept us riveted, was Kaneki’s tragic story, his emotional responses to them, and his character development. The emotional resonance truly set Ishida’s writing apart.

But the window into Kaneki’s/Sasaki’s inner world was slammed shut by Ishida the moment Kaneki reemerged as Black Reaper, and suddenly he became a complete cipher. We could only view his smooth outer shell and try to read his blunted affect for signs of his intentions, as he showed no evidence of emotion and gave few clues to his thoughts. It was disorienting, mysterious and rather exciting, but it also pushed the reader away from the center of the real action, away from Kaneki’s mind and heart.

Even though he loosened up a little after the fight with Arima and the return of Shironeki, our relationship with Kaneki, like his relationship with all the other characters, remains distant and awkward. We didn’t get to see any revealing conversations between Kaneki and his old friends, some he hadn’t seen for YEARS, even though those talks were needed for closure before the story could move on. (When Tsukiyama and Kaneki barely spoke about the whole Rose Operation before embarking on a new phase in their relationship, I remember thinking “WTF, Ishida!”) We’ve had occasional glimpses of Kaneki’s inner world (especially the brilliant scene with Hide in the middle of the fight with Arima), but we never fully returned to the close emotional relationship we had with Kaneki/Sasaki before Black Reaper.

At least for me, this emotional distance led to a waning of interest in Kaneki himself over time, and by extension, a growing disinterest in TG:re itself. We witnessed some great heart wrenching episodes with other characters (Takizawa’s redemption, Amon’s struggles, Akira broadening her sympathies), but without Kaneki’s true feeling and motivations being clear, it just wasn’t the same. Kaneki is the soul of this magnificent manga, and without a clear connection with him, the entire story felt flat.

But what a difference a few conversations can make, especially when accompanied by beautiful artwork! (I also think the artwork quality has been poor at times recently, but this chapter was stunning.) I’m hoping that Ishida’s just been too busy to devote as much time to fleshing out the story and characterization as he did previously, and that we’re seeing a return to form for my favorite manga ever.

Oh, and thanks, Ishida, for dialing back the changes in Amon’s facial features. He’s more like the lovely Amon we know and love again.

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The SaiIno fanservice we got from today’s episode is totally lit!!!!!! Ugggghhhh!!!! So many SaiIno moments!! I like!!

Plus can I just say that, for me, the Sai vs Ino fight scene was totally hot. Especially when we see the smile of ‘evil’ Sai. Hahahaha so yeah I now have a lot of headcanons of them having steamy sparring sessions.