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A Love Poem For My Followers

With all this talk of love and marriage, I thought I’d share with you guys a love poem I wrote in college. This poem made it on the front page of our school newspaper–the Valentine’s Day edition. Because I’m a darn romantic.

Never mind that he did not even notice

the meal she cooked for him or the

new way she had done her hair (Up high, like

her hopes, spiral curls tumbling down)

Valentine’s Day is special, she had told

him.  Subtlety did not work with the

oversized excuse for a husband, yet

now she realized neither did the obvious.

A scarf, she had thought, would be perfect;

Colored like cream, and warm, each stitch had felt

the roughness of her overworked hands as

she toiled to make it perfect.  This white treasure

of time and care would hide his huge neck from

the stumbling wind which brought him home to her

every night.  Not even she knew why she

put so much thought into the gift, perhaps

she was hoping some of the warmth might stick

to him.  Yet it was at dinner, when he

chastised her for giving him such a feminine

gift, that she knew.  This man sitting across

from her could Never give her anything

other than his cold exterior.

Grabbing the knitting needles from the bedroom,

and without hesitation, she plunged them,

hard, into his heart and his head; the two

places he never let her in.  Calmly,

she slid back into her chair and finished

her dinner as the scarf slowly unfurled

red stains.

thoughts while revising
  • /opens document /sees a wall of red edits /closes document
  • where did that figure go WHERE DID. THAT. FIGURE GO. 
  • what.. what does that say. i can’t read this person’s darn handwriting
  • i highlighted this word for a reason and now i can’t remember why
  • does this look better here… or there. one? or two
  • thesaurus.com
  • thank god for citation managers
  • i’m sorry mommy has to do this to you child but what must be done must be done… /deletes entire paragraph
  • well that was a stupid typo how did i not catch it the first second and seventh time
  • i will not take these edits and comments personally i will not take these ed
  • /rewrites a single sentence at least 10 million times and is still unsatisfied
  • how do i shorten this paragraph so i don’t have this tiny-tail-of-a-single-word hanging off the edge and pushing my page limit
  • it’s been 3 minutes and 40 seconds since i last checked social media better go see if anything new has happened
  • is anyone ever satisfied with the required word count
  • this is garbage i’m garbage everything i write is garbage garbage garbage
  • i’m gonna highlight this phrase i want to change and deal with it later of course i’m going to remember what i had meant