Fallen Angels, ch. 2

Title: Fallen Angels
Chapter 2: Before – “I struck the board and cry’d, No more.” This chapter is all flashback.
Rating: M for language and cartoon violence (as they say at the movies); there may or may not be salaciousness later, depending on how the story develops.
Characters: Loki and Sigyn
Description: a post-apocalyptic, MCU-Norse mythos mash-up; science fiction/fantasy
External validation and constructive criticism actively and shamelessly encouraged. I have tried to tag everyone that asked, but not all of them are working :( I will keep trying.
Thank you again and again (and again), @icybluepenguin​, for your help and encouragement and editing. This story is vastly better for your help.

Ch. 1 – Walking with unblest feet

The young woman eyed Loki suspiciously as he stood in the doorway. “What are you doing here?”

“I need to see Eir,” came the curt reply.

She rolled her eyes before she bothered to answer, “She’s at the tourney. You’ll have to make due with me.” She waved into the room and directed him to a comfortable exam chair.

He scowled and crossed his arms. “No. I need to see Eir.”

“Too bad. She won’t be back for hours. They need her to tend to all of your friends when they crack open each others’ skulls.”

Loki scanned his obstacle from head to toe — tall, sturdy, pragmatically dressed with an utterly nonplussed, confident stance. Arrogant.

“No. I’m not here to deal with an apprentice.”

She scowled darkly. “Journeyman,” she corrected, turning her back to return to a desk at the far side of the room. “Suit yourself. You can wait here or come back later, but Eir is stuck out on the field for at least another two hours until your brother gets tired of beating everyone up.”

Loki scowled back at her. “Fine. I’ll wait.” And make you as miserable as I can while I do it.

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anonymous asked:

What if Ontari used to have "nightblood" classes with Lexa. And she has soft spot for her, they are almost childhood friends or something.

I mean that’s always a possibility. But, to me, there wasn’t a whole lot of ‘mixing’ and mingling between the Clans before Lexa formed the Coalition. The nightbloods might be different case though. If it is Lexa that Ontari has a ‘soft spot’ for it might be due to Lexa and her having the ‘nighblood’ in common. Ontari’s character description says that she is a master of deception. So, maybe she fakes being a ‘prisoner’ to Queen Nia and asks for Lexa to allow her to stay in Polis, to be protected….maybe Nightbloods are viewed as ‘objects’ in the Ice Nation. Maybe this is known to Lexa and she believes Ontari – no matter if her claims are true or false. I think that Ontari’s blood may be the ‘warpaint’/’blood’ in the corner of Queen Nia’s eyes. AND some of Ontari’s blood is on Roan’s face during the duel. 

Ontari might be a ‘royal prisoner’ or she might be royalty that has the mutation. Maybe she deceives Lexa and then turns on her and might then kill the nightbloods? Idk. Hopefully after tonight’s episode things will make more sense. 

Describing Skin Tone

Anonymous asked: Aaaaugh I’m really sorry to ask this and I know you answer questions like this all the time but I haven’t been able to find a straight answer anywhere else. Is there any possibility that you might know whether it’s considered offensive to describe people as having wood-colored skin? I know it’s considered offensive to compare skin color to food, but if it was said that someone had mahogany or pinewood skin or something, do you think that would be okay? Again, I’m really sorry.

This question is one not only of style but also of knowing and relating to your intended audience. There are no hard and fast rules on which descriptive words for skin color will be offensive to everyone every time. Though many descriptors for skin color have been identified as offensive or acceptable by large groups of people in the past, the reality is that every reader has their own preferences.

Similarly, there is no word choice that will fit perfectly in every stylistic circumstance. Tone, pacing, genre, character development, theme, and desired voice must all be taken into account.

So, you can understand that is difficult to advise you in any specific way. We cannot tell you yes or no. The best answer is that it depends.

The trick, I believe, is to think critically about the denotation and connotation of the word in question and use your best judgement. That judgement is born of experience and research, which means writing people with skin tones other than yours and learning about representing people who do not look like you from people who do not look like you. You may not have the experience or have done the research, and that’s okay, but the only person who can answer your question is you. You know your style and level of experience. You know the circumstances. You are the one who knows your intended audience and interacts with your readers. 

This is a situation where the answer cannot just be given to you. You need to do the research and gain the experience, then you can decide these things for yourself.

Here are a few resources to speed you on your way:

Thank you for your question! If you have any comments on this article or other questions about writing, you can message us here

-C and Q


Stop Calling Me Pastries 2/3

27 skin tones, five descriptions each, no cannibalism required.

 #F2DCC7: Coral Cloud, Desert Bone, Florence Marble, Sand Trap, Sunwashed Beach

#E1C3A7: Dust Bunny, Homespun Linen, Snail Shell, Tumbleweed Tan, Washed Khaki

#E8B290: Approaching Autumn, Copper Dust, Coral Coast, Rambling Rose, Wickerwork

#DC9B85: Beach Treasure, Desert Dawn, Opal Fire, Rosy Coral, Warm Autumn

#D1937C: Autumn Fern, Earthen Trail, Rosedust, Rustic Pottery, Sienna Brown

#D87F85: Bird of Paradise, Coming Up Roses, Love Potion, Pacific Sunset, Pink Flamingo

#C98560: Copper Wire, Ember Glow, Fall Foliage, Georgian Leather, Wash of Rust

#B3754E: Cinnabar, Clay Vessel, Fallen Leaf, Leather Jacket, Pale Russet

#924517: Brick Dust, Copper Starfire, Grecian Bronze, Ochre Brown, Tinder Box

credits: photos from humanae, hex codes fromimagecolorpicker, paint color names from encycolorpedia
The Writer's Bane: Describing a Character's Physical Appearance - WRITERS HELPING WRITERS™

by Angela Ackerman

I’m going to be totally honest here. There is little I detest more than trying to describe how my character looks. The reasons are numerous. I think it sounds boring. It slows the story. It reads like a list or sounds cliched, etc, blargh de blargh.

I write in first person, to boot, making it even more difficult to create natural-sounding character description without using the dreaded MIRROR technique. After all, every time a writer uses a mirror to describe their character’s physique, somewhere in the world a zombie dies. Think about that. Right now, Zombies are dying. I can’t add to this terrible crime. Can you?

But then I read Word Painting and realized I was looking at it all wrong. Physical description doesn’t need to be a dry, tasteless blob of facts to help the writer see our character. It can be seasoned and textured, and doled out bite by savory bite.

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anonymous asked:

I'm writing a fantasy novel, and almost all the protags are POC. I prefer to describe their race by saying they are what they are - Korean, black, Middle-Eastern, etc. However, I'm transcribing those cultures into my fantasy world, and they won't have the same names. Is there a way to make their race obvious with explicitly stating it or resorting to offensive language, like "chocolate skin" or "angled eyes"?

I’m going to refer you to these four guides:

Catalogue of Human Features - This has visual representation of body types, breast shapes, face shapes, nose shapes, eye shapes, eyebrow shapes, lip shapes, hair shades, hair types, hairlines, eye shapes, eye colors, and skin tones.

Guide to Human Types Part I - These show Asian body types by region (including native North Americans) and their common or typical features.

Guide to Human Types Part II - This includes European, North African, Middle Eastern, and some South Asian.

Guide to Human Types Part III - This includes African and Pacific (Melanesia, Polynesia, Australia, and New Guinea)

The above won’t give you the varieties that actually exist, so go outside the features shown in the guides. Once you’ve described a few people of a certain race, you can just start referring to others as what race they are in that world so you can describe other things about their appearance instead (the way they walk, their clothing, their hairstyle, scars, a more detailed description of their lips, etc.).


anonymous asked:

do you have any tips on describing facial features (such as piercings, hairstyle, tattoos, birthmarks, or expressions? mainly the hair one, i have a lot of trouble with making it seem interesting)





i hope this helps!

…there’s something in the saga of Bucky Barnes that resonates. If you’ve ever felt like you couldn’t escape some horrible piece of your past, he’s a character for you. If you’ve ever been expected to measure up to an impossible standard, he’s a character for you. If you’ve ever had to sit and wrestle with your demons in silence because, for one reason or another, you just couldn’t speak up about them to anyone—here’s Bucky Barnes. 

He’ll match you ghost for ghost, burden for burden, demon for demon, and he’ll still get up again the next morning. He’ll make fun of himself sometimes, and he’ll play the hardened cynic, even though he’s really got a squishy romantic heart that’s far too close to his brittle surface.


post by Rebekah on The Mask Blog, March 24, 2014 (x)

anonymous asked:

I was wondering if you had any type of information on age progression with children as how would a four year old act what type of characteristics would he or she have

We are not a child psychology blog (or else we’re a stupendously bad child psychology blog). It is with heavy hearts, therefore, that we must admit that we do not have many (any) in-house resources for the developmental stages of tiny humans. We do, however, have links! 

I highly recommend the book The Writer’s Guide to Character Traits: Includes Profiles of Human Behaviors and Personality Types by Linda N. Edelstein for basic profiles of children in various social and psychological situations from the need-to-know perspective of a writer. 

Other than that, here are some resources for writing four(ish) year olds:

And here are some general resources on writing children:

Also, I bet there are some parents out there on Tumblr who may be willing resources for you, anon. If you’d like to be a resource for this anon on four year olds, please reply to this post. Please do not send us a message with your interest. (It’s much easier for us and for the anon and for everyone, really, if you just reply directly to the post.)

If anyone else has any resources they think would go nicely with this list, please send them along!

Thank you for… wondering…! 


anonymous asked:

I desperatly need a straight answer to this question and hopefully your followers will want to add their thought to this: I've read that one should not compare PoC's skin to fooditems, but also not wood or stuff from in nature. Ebony is a big no-no! I have a bunch of names for white skin (ivory, porcelein, milky etc) and I wan't to be able to compare darker skin like that. I've looked through tags, but have no answer, Would any followers like tohelp with this? I use brown, but i need more words!

There’s some stuff scattered in the character description and race tags, but I’ll put the basics here for describing the skin color for a race other than your own:

  • Don’t use food items to describe skin. While some people do not mind and describe themselves with these descriptors, a lot of people find it offensive and with good reason. One of the many reasons is that the food used to describe people with darker skin were some of the foods that drove the slave trade. Another is that some people find it creepy that they are always described as something that is edible. A third is that some of the descriptors of food that writers have used are actually slurs in certain parts of the US and other places.
  • “Brown” is vague. Describing a person as “Asian” or “Black” can give your readers a general idea of your character’s appearance, but it’s still vague. This doesn’t mean you can use these descriptors, but it does mean you should use more descriptors. Skin color can vary widely among races.
  • Talk about undertones too. Is their skin warm, cool, or neutral? Or a combination?
  • Don’t stop at color. Talk about freckles, markings, overall complexion, and more. Also, words like “pale” or “light” are not limited to white people.
  • If you want to use comparisons to show skin color, you can compare characters to each other.
  • Write World’s Describing Skin Tone
Writing Protips on Character Description
  • Describe body parts as body parts, not as objects. Example: Eyes are eyes, not orbs or optics. Legs are legs, not supports.
  • Eyes are windows into the soul is bullshit. You can tell a lot more about a person from their hands than from their eyes. Spend more time talking about what a person’s hands look like/what they’re doing with them. Do they bite their nails or cut them? Are their hands scarred? Strong? Delicate? Long? Covered in pen drawings?
  • Refrain from spending three paragraphs describing a person. If something is important (for example, a red hat that gets stolen, or a scar that defines the character). Your readers do not need a grocery list of what your character is wearing/looks like/identifies as. Just the basics.
  • Unless you’re going to describe every white person as “the caucasian” DO NOT describe every person of colour by their race. That means you’re constantly reminding the reader of their race instead of their character. It’s annoying and kind of racist.
  • Avoid redundancy. “He grinned a full smile with his teeth.” Is redundant. You cannot grin with anything but your teeth.
  • Metaphors and similes are rad. They can describe a person in one sentence in a way that a full paragraph can not. Here’s one from a Third Eye Blind song: “That girl is like a sunburn.”
  • Slip description into dialogue. Friends and family will remark on your appearance. How they remark is also an indicator of the closeness of the relationship. It’s a two-in-one! “I like that shirt. It really brings out your eyes!” “Wow, long night last night?” “You look like shit.” “Did you do something new with your hair? Maybe it’s cause I’ve never seen you wear it up before.”
  • SAID IS NOT DEAD. Said is all you need. If two characters are talking you can have he said/she said or Karen said/Ming said. Punctuation is the indicator for yelling and questions. You can also use dialogue to convey how a character is communicating. “Jesus, you don’t need to yell.” “Speak up, Dear.” “I can’t understand what you’re saying when you have food in your mouth.” “Don’t you take that tone with me!” “Was that a question or a statement?”
  • Don’t describe characters by their hair colour either. This applies to the dialogue. Often I see “The Brunette said” or “The Blonde laughed”. It’s redundant. They have names. We know what the characters look like by now and do not need a reminder.
  • Describing a person’s laugh is a good way of telling the reader about the character and putting their voice into the reader’s head. Is it a booming laugh? Do they cover their mouth? Do they snort? Are they a silent laugher?
  • Not everyone smells like strawberries, jasmine, vanilla, cinnamon, or whatever fruit. Some people smell gross. Some people smell nice in a weird way. It can also reflect someone’s diet or lifestyle. People who eat a lot of red meat smell like iron, vegetarians often have an earthy smell. You can tell if someone has a pet. Scent is an important description, but it’s not always pretty perfumes and shampoos.
  • How does the character make others feel? This one can descend into cliches pretty quickly, so it’s a difficult descriptor. Go from your own experiences though. Karen didn’t really want to run into Ming. Ming has this nasty laugh that Karen always feels is directed at her.

These are just a few things that came to mind today. Feel free to add to the list if you’d like or ask questions about writing. Again, writing is a skill and takes practice. It’s always good to have fun.