You know how Mel says ‘what the hell are we waiting for’ referring to the bottle of Haig?
I think that’s an anology for their relationship. There was always ‘we can’t do this now’ and ‘there’s too many obstacles’, but Fitzsimmons are together despite the danger and they’ve been through so much together so she’s asking why they’ve put their work ahead of their feelings for so long, or waiting for a peaceful ending that won’t come.
Essentially, that bottle is them being together. It’s their happy ending together, the thing they’ve been working towards all these years, that somehow was pushed to the wayside over deaths and tragedy and is finally attainable. They don’t have secrets between each other, neither of them are in a relationship of any kind, and they now have even more in common than ever before. They realized that they couldn’t live in a world without each other.
Today, we have a guest blog post from S.J. Forester, the editor in chief of Perfect Analogy Publishing. They’re taking over the blog to share some writing tips. This first one is about Dialog Tags.
Get your pens and papers ready for our lecture is about to start!
He said. Jane shouted.
Tags may seem simple, but they’re actually one of the most abused features in fiction writing. The purpose of a dialog tag is simply to indicate who is speaking (he, she, Jane, Mike) and any special qualities of their speech (whispered, shouted, asked). And a tag should only be used if either of those pieces of information are necessary.
So if the reader already knows who’s speaking and there is no special quality of the speech that the reader needs to be aware of, then there is no need for a dialog tag.
The General Rules.
1. Don’t use a tag if you don’t need one.
2. If you need to indicate who is speaking, then use an action instead of a dialog tag if possible.
E.g. Mike belched and wiped his mouth on his sleeve. “That was delicious.”
3. If there is no appropriate action, then use a simple “invisible” tag.
“Jane/Mike/he/she said.” Good dialog tags are invisible. They blend into the background of the story. Fancy or flashy tags distract from the dialog. Don’t use them.
4. When there is a special quality to the speaking that needs to be communicated, use precise verbs.
“Mike shouted/whispered/muttered/asked.” But watch out for redundancy.
I.e. “I hate you!” vs. “I hate you!” she shouted.’ This bit of dialog probably doesn’t need a tag, and the exclamation does a good job of showing us that she’s shouting.
5. Avoid adverbs in dialog tags.
The dialog itself should indicate the qualities that an adverb would indicate. If you find yourself using an adverb in a dialog tag, then you should take a minute to consider how you could better write the dialog to show the quality indicated by the adverb.
E.g. ’ “I don’t wanna!” the little boy shouted angrily.’ could become ’ “I! Don’t! Wanna!” the little boy shouted.’ Or preferably without the dialog tag at all.
6. However, adverbs are generally preferable to long explanations.
It’s much easier to write “she said coldly” than to explain exactly what is cold about her voice. But it’s still better yet to make the dialog itself read coldly so that you need neither an explanation nor an adverb.
7. Use tags as early as possible.
Putting a tag at the end of an entire paragraph of dialog doesn’t help much. The reader needs to know as early as possible who is speaking. This is another reason that actions are preferable to tags. It’s much easier to start a paragraph with an action that to start a paragraph with a tag.
8. In exception to most of the above, dialog tags can be used to help dialog “breathe” to give it a rhythm.
You can use dialog tags to add pauses, to slow dialog down, to break up long walls of dialog. Actions are generally preferable for this, but a simple “he said” can really save a long section of dialog from becoming overwhelming.
Basic: “This is fun,” he said.
Special punctuation: “Do you like bread?” she asked.
Create a pause with a tag: “I’ve eaten some good pie in my time,” he said, “but this sure takes the cake.”
Create a pause with an action: “Wow!” He looked up towards the peak. “That sure is a big mountain.”
Create a pause with an action in the middle of a sentence: “Wow! That sure is"—he looked up towards the peak—"a big mountain.”
Interrupted speech: “I’m ready to—”
“No you aren’t,” Mike interrupted.
*Note that the dashes used in the last two examples are em-dashes, not hyphens. Most word processors, like MSWord, will automatically replace two hyphens (–) with an em-dash (—). I will go into more detail on the different types of dashes and other special punctuation in a future article.
It’s pretty clear now that Homeworld (and the three diamonds) sent a bomb to earth that corrupted gems, they dropped something that would not win the war but punish the rebellion, depicting the cruelty and consequences of war
Most disturbingly of all their minds have a ‘tear’ in them that prevents them from going back to normal functions.
Centipeetle and the rest are the causalities and Steven is slowly maturing through that reality, both in learning to take care of people like we’ve seen in the last couple episodes, and in understanding what that help entails when people are ‘far gone’- ie not reaching the ideal image of health but improving to within that limit
From Kiki to centipeetle, Steven’s arc as a healer/caregiver is still underway
I’m Franka from the Netherlands, I’m 19 years old. I like to photograph nature and living things (people, animals). I have my digital camera for over 4 years now and I love the effects you can use but I’ve always liked my photographs unedited better. So a year ago I got a Anolog camera (Canon 300d) and now I mostly use that camera. This is a photo of one of my friends made with my digital camera!
Here is the link to my flickr if you wanna see more,