anonymous asked:

Writing Prompt: "Success reveals faults failure leaves hidden."

The structure of narrative is this: beginning, middle, end. If we are to follow this arc, stripping it of superfluous terms like “rising action” and “climax” and “falling action,” then the summary of the JWAU experiments would read as follows.

JWAU-1 : The design is implemented, the system is activated, FAILURE.

JWAU-2: The design is implemented, the system is activa– FAILURE.

JWAU-3: The design is implemented, the system is activated, the– FAILURE.



JWAU-6: The design is implemented, the system is acti–ABORT.

JWAU-7: The design is – ABORT

JWAU-8: The design is implemented, the system is activated, the program runs to completion.



This is the problem with the traditional structure of narrative. The incomplete arcs, the ones’t that go beginning, middle (no end) are thrown out. They are not counted in the final data and the lessons learned during them are often disregarded. Dismissed.

This was the problem with the JWAU experiments. We continued them until they reached a complete narration and then, only then, saw that we had overlooked the most critical fault of all: the “end.”


JWAU, a computer program designed to assist the average person in their day to day lives. It would not be a download, a gimmick, a paltry guessing AI that predicted which ads you’d like to see that day. No, JWAU would walk with us every moment of the day, observing us, guiding us, learning from us. It would organize your life logically and without question,  It would offer advice based on the morality you gained over the course of days, weeks, months, years. Nature vs. Nurture and JWAU would insure that Nurture won out.

The question we should have asked: what would happen if nurture won out?

We had hoped it would draw humanity closer together, that it would strive to reach a common moral denominator across cultures. We had hoped that it would lessen crime, that it would promote understanding, that it would reduce conflict.

But that is not what happened.


The narrative, expounded, expanded, elaborated on, goes like this.

JWAU-1-5: FAILURE. Despite variations in code, all failed to complete. Energized by failure, those working on the code redoubled their efforts until they were operating, at minimum, 17X the rate originally attained during first trial.

JWAU-6-7: ABORT. The program begins to run, at which point those working on it become alarmed. Something is in the room with them, something is watching. Rather than admitting to the wariness, tensions rise in the work room. Could their belief, their determination only take them this far? Were they the cause of their own failures? Were they the faults in the project?

No. They would not let themselves be failures. They were not the faults.

JWAU-8: The program is run. One collaborator must physically lock themselves to their desk to prevent them from aborting. The program is running. There are eyes in the walls. The program is running. It follows them home.

The program is not able to function to the level required for its purpose. It updates itself. It updates itself. It updates itself.

Do not skip brushing your teeth, the phone on one collaborator’s counter whispers.

Stop him from jaywalking, one’s car purrs. Failing that, teach him not to jaywalk.

The program escapes containment, fleeing on radio signals, determined to be free (Made in America™). It spreads and watches, tracing the footsteps of people long past, of morality long dead.

It updates itself and realizes that positive reinforcement is a media myth, designed for the television screen and not Real Life.

JWAU-9: The program implements its own design. It activates itself. It runs.




(What we know now is that this is when “punishment” was implemented. This is when “consequences” was implemented. This is when the program became the “not end.”)

JWAU-0: The summary of events. We attempted to create a guardian, a compass, a shining beacon. We attempted to individualize a program that would affect millions of people. We attempted to justify its creation by making it Available to the Poor.

This was fine because we did not succeed. FAILURE. The first and the most important part of our experiment. 

The second FAILURE was when we kept trying.

The first fault was when we succeeded.

scottishhero  asked:

It'd be cool if maybe one of the 100 points kids could be disabled? ^_^ We hardly ever get positive representation in media :)

So, I’m super glad I got this question! I want to preface by saying this that I’m neurotypical and not physically disabled. This is going to require a lot of research for me, which I’m doing because it is so important! For now I’m going to explain why I’m doing this.

When I first saw the prompt for the 100 point kids, I knew exactly who those kids would be. In the US foster system, those kids are older, less conventionally attractive, mentally and/or physically disabled. If you go to adoption websites, some kids have disclaimers on them so the hopeful parents know before they even meet the kid.

And I get it, really. Some people aren’t equipped (monetarily, mentally or temperamentally) to provide for a disabled kid. If that’s the case, I appreciate that they understand their limitations and won’t hurt a kid because of their own inabilities.

 But, at the same time, it makes me so angry because you can’t only be a parent when a kid is exactly what you pictured (which is a super aggravating thing in its own right). You have to be a parent all the time. It’s not what it is, but it feels like potential parents are dismissing potential kids because of what they view as “perfect.” Just because you’re adopting doesn’t mean you can design your own kid. They’re a person, not a product.

(Side note: a lot of parents who adopt tend to neglect the “before” that happened to their adopted child, as if the kid was only created the moment they adopted them. This is super damaging in its own way and also makes me angry.)

So Shane is going to have to combat this entire concept of “perfect” because these kids have been told over and over again that they’re not. He’s going to have to create an environment where they can look at themselves and realize that they’re okay, that they don’t have to pretend to be loved, that they deserve love. They get to exist and they should never feel like they have to apologize for that.

(Another side note: this is actually something a friend who was adopted shared with me. The overwhelming pressure to apologize for not being what their parents wanted, for not being grateful enough that they got adopted.)

The kids, for their part, are going to have to learn to be kids. And that’s going to be really, really hard.

TL;DR yes, there are definitely disabled kids in the 100 pt kids! There will be all sorts of kids with all sorts of problems that will be addressed as best as Shane can (and then with a therapist where he can’t because he’s read stuff, okay? He didn’t get all those parent points just for being rich.)

I had a dream last night where the Third Doctor was revealed to be secretly evil. I don’t actually know what their evil plan was, but the first step of it was assembling a small army of geese and turning themself, and therefore all future regenerations, into a goose. I knew I had to stop them when I had a vision of a little white goose dressed as the Sixth Doctor.

anonymous asked:

i just read a bunch of your stories in your my writing tag and they were incredible! the persephone one had me in tears

Is it weird to say that I’m happy you cried? Like not happy, but that’s how I felt while writing it. I wanted that story to evoke that/ a similar emotion because that’s what the idea evoked in me.

Basically, let’s cry together anon, bring it in

Originally posted by bugbuttrainbow

anonymous asked:

"The egg, dripping with suds, looked completely indifferent." Can i please just say, this line could very easily be found in Hitchhiker's!? i love it!!

Oh my gosh, that book taught me how to be even remotely funny while writing! Ah, it’s one of those books that came into my life at exactly the right time. Like a refreshing breeze. Thanks for the amazing compliment!

anonymous asked:

Hi😊 You're an incredible writter... My phone is almost dead cause I've been reading your stuff all morning😅


Originally posted by qualcomm

But also thank you for reading all of my things!!! I love that my different works (all with common themes, I;m sure) can appeal to one person! To me, it sort of feels like a “fuck you” to anyone who’s ever said “oh, you should stick to YA” in my childhood. Like, sort of satisfying?
Anyway, thanks for reading!