For Example: “Get out, Michael. I swear to God, get out before I try to kill you. I wasted two years of my life on your pathetic cheating ass. Get out!” Tara yelled angrily.
Adverbs are, more often than not, useless additions to your writing. Looking to the example above, adding “angrily” to the end of the line tells the reader nothing new. The reader knew Tara was angry, because Tara is clearly yelling at Michael. The dialogue alone is enough to portray this, and I’m sure with the full scene, the reader doesn’t need any extra help. Adverbs clutter up your writing and weaken your writing. Trust the reader to catch on without the adverb.
(2) “As if” Phrases
For Example: Mrs. Winters lingered over Bryan, her stern face glaring down at him, as if daring him to speak out again.
You don’t need to explain why characters are doing what they do. “As if” phrases are explanations we don’t need. Your writing needs to be strong enough to portray that Mrs. Winters wants Bryan to shut up.
(3) Exposition in Dialogue
For Example: “Hello, Bridget, my ex-girlfriend who cheated on me with Brad”.
I wrote a whole post on this last week, because exposition in dialogue is absolutely terrible, but I will say it again. Using dialogue to explain things is usually just lazy writing. Dialogue needs to sound the way that people actually talk. Keep in mind that the characters know more than they say, and rarely need to explain it.
For Example: The curtains opened and Jared lifted the wand. With a wave, he instructed the winds start playing. The hall filled with the melody of flutes, clarinets and trumpets.
To the untrained eye, Jared is a decent conductor, and is doing a fine job leading the orchestra. To a musician, this scene would come off as weird. The stick a conductor uses is a baton, not a wand. Trumpets are not wind instruments. These details aren’t enough to completely ruin a story, but if you have a character interested, you need to do research. Know what you’re talking about. Using the right words, terms that are only used within the community (for this example, words like staccato or laccato tell musicians how to play a note). If you have a character who is a musician, learn about music. If you have a character who does ballet, learn what a pliée is, and what an arabesque is. Don’t assume your readers won’t notice if you mess up on small details. The small details matter.
No matter how minor a character is, it is your job to make them matter. Every character should have some sort of story. It might go untold, but characters need to be people in the universe you created, not plot devices there to guide your main character to what they need to do. This is especially true when writing women. Many female characters are written with the purpose of being a love interest to your main character, and they deserve more than that.
160417 박정아의 달빛낙원 Brian (a cappella) singing “For the nights I can’t remember” by Hedley
Their live perfs last night were glorious (as usual) the jamming session and individual intros (w/ instruments) were lovely as well!
But this little Brian perf took the cake for me ; u ; his singing is so beautiful and look at that precious smile when he finished ;;;; he is seriously so talented and cute (even tho some ppl vehemently rejected his man bun/apple hair lol)
I don’t have a bias yet but I think I might be reaching a decision soon 🙈 and also, pls check out #DAY6~ Stan talent, stan DAY6 (@day6kilogram)
Italian Decorated Parade Armour of King Philip III of Spain from 1585 on display at the Victoria and Albert Museum in London
From top to bottom, the Burgonet, breastplate and gauntlets comes from a a series presented to the Spanish royal family in the 1580′s. Tailor-made parade armour was iron clothing: the pointed ‘peascod’ breastplate imitated fashionable doublets. Draped with fine silk sashes and with helmets sprouting plumes of ostrich feathers. Such armour was for effect and display rather than protection in battle. Inspired by ancient Roman armour it transformed Renaissance nobles into classical heroes.
I absolutely love how you draw the egos(art style and dialogue) I've all ways imagined an slice of life story or comic with the egos but people are always so focused on angst and Dark being abusive(so I guess this is the closet I'm gonna get lol) if not sure if you take recommendations but you should totally put mark in one of your short stories I wanna see how'd he'd react to all of the stuff they get up to. Also Good luck with you Mark and dark comic you're making :3
Imma post it on another thing because my laptop is freezing…. but thank you!