Yes, I do teach creative writing: your opening scene
The opening scene is the most important piece of your novel. This scene determines whether your reader is pulled in or puts the book down. Here are some important do’s and don’ts.
DO write it as a scene, not a data dump. You may have a fantastic premise, a marvelous alternate history or post-apocalyptic world or magical realism to die for, but if you don’t engage your reader in an actual scene, you will bore them.
DO write a scene that immediately introduces a character that the reader can root for. Yes, I know Stephen King has had great success introducing victims that are then shortly afterward killed off. That’s a horror trope and we expect it. But if you are caught up in world-building and haven’t dreamed your way into a character who is worth following through 100,000 words of writing, your story is pointless. I have read many pieces of fiction by would-be writers who can’t grasp this essential concept, and without exception, they fail to engage the reader.
DO introduce the stakes right away. In case that’s a challenge that needs some exposition to develop, create some immediate stakes (a life threat works) that keep the tension high and the reader engaged until you can lay out the larger stakes.
DO begin in medias res, which means “in the middle of things.” Most beginning fiction writers make the mistake of starting too early in the plot. Meet the monster on page 1.
DON’T include a flashback in the first chapter. Work on a scene, which means time is NOT compressed. It should include dialog, action, description, setting, and interior monolog. Keep everything happening within that scene for at least the first chapter. You can bring in a flashback in Chapter Three.
DON’T shift points of view within a single chapter. Let the reader establish a strong bond of interest (even if it’s with a POV villain) over the course of a whole chapter.
DON’T open the story with your character waking up unless it’s because she’s got a gun in her face (or a knife to her throat – you get what I mean). We don’t need to follow a character through their mundane daily routine.
DON’T be coy. Beginning writers often have this idea that they need to hold back on revealing all their secrets – what’s in the box, who’s behind the curtain, where they’re going next, etc. Their well-meant plan is to slowly reveal all this over several chapters. Trust me on this one: tell your readers instead of keeping it a mystery. You WILL come up with more secrets to reveal. Your imagination is that good. Spill it now, and allow that revelation to add to the excitement.
I like you. I said I like you.
Yah, do you know what sort of things I did because of you? In order to go to school with you, I waited in front of the gate for an hour. Until you came back from the study room, I couldn’t even sleep a blink because I was so worried. “Why is she late? Has she fallen asleep again?” Hey, all of my concern was always you. You!
When we coincedently met at the bus, when we went to the concert together, and when I received that shirt from you on my birthday. I really thought I would go crazy because I was so happpy. I wanted to see you a dozen times more a day, and I was just so happy whenever I saw you. I have always wanted to tell you since a long time ago. I like you so much. I love you.
Celend The Shy Solaria The Monster Carver Eclipsa The Queen of Darkness Moon The Undaunted
And at the end we get to see 2 Mewni Queens with unknow name. Special cameo for the one in pink tutu that also has a very similar wand like star’s, and also has hearts in her dress but her symbol appears to be bunnies.
when Star grabbed Toffee’s finger we get to see some flashback which include some scenes showing Toffee laughing and Eclipsa’s “evil” glare.
Bolland envisaged the flashback sequences in black and white, and instructed Watchmen-colorist John Higgins to use “muted November colors”. He was upset when he saw the finished comic had “garish … hideous glowing purples and pinks … and my precious Eraserhead-esque flashback sequences swamped in orange.”
In 2008 DC Comics released a 20th anniversary edition of The Killing Joke featuring a complete recoloring by Bolland. Bolland made various alterations to restore his artistic intent, including replacing Higgins’ bright flashback panels with muted tones (save for items colored for emphasis, such as the Red Hood and Joker’s green hair) and removing the yellow oval from the Batsuit.
Prompt: When 27 year old Riley Matthews receives a letter in the mail from her 17 year old self she’s reminded of a pact she made with her group of friends on Prom night. Curious to see if any of them will stick to the pact, she heads back home to New York City for the weekend. [Italic paragraphs ~ indicate flashbacks] Rating: M [no smut but there will be cursing and adult themes, as they are in their late 20′s in this AU, so don’t read if that’s not your cup of tea.] Pairings: Rucas, Smarkle (have yet to decide on Maya/Zay) Previous Chapter:Prologue | One Word Count: 2,890 Chapter: Two
The elevator brings the 6 old friends to the penthouse floor, a chipper ‘ding’ noise ringing in their ears as the stainless-steel doors separate and reveal the extravagant complex Farkle is living in. A wide grin covers Maya’s face as she practically skips off the lift into the living room with Farkle and Zay hot on her trail. Lucas slowly steps off, looking around to take in his surroundings before Zay calls him over to see something. It was like they were teenagers again.
Riley and Isadora are the last ones to get off, tension thick between them as they come to a halt. The two brunettes lock eyes and it’s obvious that they’re both avoiding the elephant in the room. The bespectacled beauty speaks up first, keeping her voice low. “I’m not sure I can do this, Riley.”
“I’m going to be right here with you the whole time, Smackle.” The taller brunette smiles, giving her hand a reassuring squeeze. “But maybe you should just talk to him about it. You’re both in a better place now.”
Isadora nods softly, “What about you? Are you going to talk to Lucas?”
Riley allows her gaze to tick over to the tall man across the room, laughing with Zay. He seemed happy and that’s all she ever wanted for him, was to be happy. Even if that happiness was coming from another woman. She swallows hard, feeling a knot in her stomach as she looks away. “That’s ancient history.”
Summary: When Sam leaves you and Dean alone in the bunker to have a movie night all by yourselves, feelings that have been under wraps for years begin to surface. Will it be the start of something new or will it turn into yet another moment you’ve had with the eldest Winchester?
Characters: Dean Winchester x reader, Sam Winchester (mentioned)
Word count: 2482
Warnings: Language, the slightest bit of angst. Pure fluff.
Author’s Notes: This is my submission for @idreamofhazel ‘s and @impala-dreamer ‘s “Sammy Says” writing challenge. First of all, congratulations to both of you amazing human beings because you deserve it. Second of all, thank you so much for letting me participate, I loved writing this.
Also, I’d like to thank my amazing twin @ravengirl94 for putting up with my whining and for helping me figure out what I wanted to do with the ending here. Thank you so, so much, Emily, you’re the absolute best.
Now about this fic: My prompt was “You mind doing a little bit of thinking with your upstairs brain,
Dean?” and is included in bold in the text below. (This is written both from the reader’s and Dean’s POV and includes a flashback in italics.)
curled into your palm whilst you sat on Dean’s bed, head rested against the
headboard, body just mere inches away from his as the world in the screen before you came to life.
It was one of
those rare nights that you had nowhere to be and nothing to do. Miraculously
enough, the world seemed to be doing just fine without you and the Winchesters
brothers were more than happy to take advantage of all of that tranquility and
stagnation while it lasted. Sam, for instance, had already hit the bar for the
night -he had said something about needing
to spend some time with himself but you were pretty sure that his sudden
outing had something to do with that beautiful librarian that had been
flirting with him all week- while, much to your surprise, the older Winchester
had decided to spend a lazy night in with you, filled with cooking and silly
jokes, wonderfully interesting conversations and laughter.
However, as fantastic
as the evening had been, it was getting late and you were getting more and more
Stifling a yawn,
you turned to see Dean already staring at you, green eyes bright and wide in
the dim light of the bedroom.
“What?” you asked.
He smiled that
half-smile of his that always caused your heart to flutter unevenly.
whispered, arm draping over your shoulder to pull you to him.
You opened your
mouth to object but the look on his face, vulnerable and intense, pierced through
your very soul and you leaned against him, letting his warmth seep into your
skin and his scent, so utterly and uniquely Dean,
to overwhelm your senses, comfortably resting your head on the crook of his
Celebrate #ItsStillBeautiful with us from August 20th-27th
Two years ago, the third season of Hannibal finished, and a bit after that, our dear Bryan Fuller told us to “ask again in 22 months” in relation to whether the show would be back. If Fannibals are something, it is patient and determined, and we have waited the 22 months. We have endured time and we’re now stronger than ever, our fandom growing each day. In August, the time will be up, but we will also be celebrating the two year anniversary of The Wrath of the Lamb and the end of the third season, and the fact that we have much more to look forward to!
That is why, for the second year in a row, we’ll be holding #ItsStillBeautiful. Create anything at all (fanfic, art, craft, gifsets, playlists, songs, etc) and post it from August 20th-27th.
The theme of this event is anything at all as long as it’s set post-TWOTL— it must be canon-compliant up until the fall, and then the limit is your imagination! Whether it’s about one character or a pairing, includes flashbacks, other characters from the Hannibal fandom (like the rarepairs), or anything at all is up to you, but it must be set post-TWOTL, and since we want to encourage creativity, we don’t accept anything that has been posted before.
You’ve asked me to tell you a story, to weave you a theory. My inbox sings with your requests to try and jumble everything together. You ask. I’ll deliver.
I’ll give it my best shot because there’s nothing I like more than a challenge. We’re sticking to the usual plan of trying to make the most ridiculous but still kinda plausible theory possible. To start us off, here’s what canon information I have to work with.
The Existing Carmilla Mythos - So we naturally have everything from the 3 seasons to work with. You’ve seen the web series. You know.
The Original Trailer - This is the one on the beach that announced the movie. Frankly, I’m curious as to how much of this will actually apply because from my understanding it was put together before they had a script. As a scene, it’s probably cut. I’m treating the information as canon because I don’t have enough material to be cutting ANY of it.
The New Cast Information - Literally yesterday, we received the names of three new cast members. Seeing as I’m going to make the case that these are all literary references (stay tuned) just their names alone give me info. They are:
The Woman In Black
Now we do our magical conjecture and fun fact building to try and whip it all together into a coherent story. Basically, I’m going to write you a movie because I’m a novelist at heart and a story structure buff. We’re going to try and figure out what we can expect when the movie releases in the fall (?). Buckle up, creampuffs.
This is going to get 7k words worth of messy from parents to exes to fish gods to old school novellas.
Chapter 93 gave us the confirmation that Ymir has in fact been eaten by Galliard, Marcel’s brother, seemingly marking the ending point of her character once and for all. Given the context of the new episode, as well as the little focus or pages dedicated to her apparent last moments, many of us are very upset with the seemingly lackluster climax of her character arc; and her decision to abandon Historia to save RB and let herself be killed seems to go very much against everything her characterization according to many fans.
The point of this post isn’t to argue about any of that, but instead, to illuminate a possible indicator that we may have not seen the last of everyone’s favorite goddess.
Please let us think back to chapter 50; one of the most impactfull and monumental chapters in the entire series, for many reasons. It marks the only time so far in the story that Eren has successfully manipulated the founding titan within him, the godlike power at the center of the current (and probably final) plot, aimed at his very first enemy; that alone marks a milestone in the series, not to speak of the various character interactions happening along the way. Among others, this chapter also marks the moment Ymir chooses to abandon Historia, the person she seems to care for more than anyone else, despite the fact that the coordinate marks a real hope for the walled world to survive the dangers Ymir is aware of.
Now, despite the fact that this game changing power debuts in this chapter, the narrator this time around focuses on one arguably lesser important event: the aforementioned separation. Let’s look at it.
“At the time, we didn’t know what Ymir’s actions meant. But after that, the armored titan stopped chasing after us”-narrator, chapter 50.
This narration is interesting for various reasons. First of all, it marks one of the rare occasions in which the narrator is not impersonal, but in fact identifies with present characters. Other notable occasions of this include Kenny’s flashback in 69, and Eren’s description of the photograph in chapter 85 (both chapters with heavy plot and thematic value for the story, just like ch 50, if I may add). Here, the narrator refers to himself as part of a group, but opposes themselves against the armored titan, implying narrator is not part of RB’s team, but in fact of the Survey Corps escaping back to the walls (most likely part of the EMA, maybe even Armin himself considering Marina Inoue typically voices the narrator. We should hear that animated soon enough).
That’s not the only thing the narrator is implying though. The use of the past tense as well as “at the time” is crucial. It literally means that, although they did not understand Ymir during chapter 50; at the time of narration, some form of understanding is clearly present. If, at the time of narration, the narrator was still as clueless as back then, there would be no need for “at the time” of past tense, but this particular formulation very much implies that an understanding of Ymir’s actions is very much there in the present time. And here’s the thing: even though Ymir’s death has been confirmed, our characters among which the narrator finds himself have yet to reach a point of understanding Ymir’s actions.
First of, let’s determine “Ymir’s actions”. Ymir herself is a big mystery to our cast, but according to the narrator, Ymir’s actions are what directly precedes the armored titan not following narrator and co; in which case, “Ymir’s actions” has to refer to her abandonment of Historia and her helping out R and B. In that case, the narration above implies the following: the narrator part of the surviving SC forces will eventually come to understand the meaning behind Ymir’s betrayal. Now, as of chapter 93, let’s ask the question: Does anyone present back then understand Ymir?
Ymir herself expresses surprise at her actions, Ymir herself is unsure of her actions when writing the letter, which marks the most recent time anyone inside the walls has received information concerning Ymir. As of chapter 90, the last moment we spent with whomever the ch 50 narrator is, said narrator has yet to reach a point of understanding Ymir. OUR CAST STILL DOES NOT KNOW THE MEANING OF HER ACTIONS, AS FORETOLD BY CHAPTER 50. Isn’t that basically a confirmation that Ymir’s story isn’t done yet?
You may counterargue that its been 4 years and that Isa has changed his mind since, esp since he doesn’t want to drag the story out at anymore. But I find it so hard to believe that, in one of the most important chapters in the series, one that is still relevant to this day, the narrator focuses on this one plot point that simply ends up dropped over the course of the series. Chapter 50 is too important for that kind of redesign, wouldn’t you say? Who knows, maybe it’ll wind up different in the anime and will mark a retrofit by Isayama that fits better in line with 89 being the end of her story, but until we see it animated, I’ll chose to keep doubting that.
As for how Ymir’s story can still be told to our main cast? Here’s one possible option: Galliard
According to the (admittedly bad) fan translation, Galliard understands Ymir and her wish to bring back her titan-something neither us readers nor the narrator in question do as of right now. Granted, this could just be terrible translation, but Galliard could wind up being the gateway between Ymir and the main cast. Or its something entirely different. In a story about time travelling memories, matter that forms out of thin air, and the literal power of a god capable of reshaping the planet and controlling an entire species, death seems like a far too small barrier to stop someone from being relevant to the story, one way or another.
Since the majority of this argument is based off the lines spoken by the narrator in 50, there is a minor chance this is all ridiculous blunder if the official translation turns out to somehow differ from the Japanese original, and if anyone knows if it does, I would appreciate if you could inform me. But otherwise, I personally will start taking those words from chapter 50 as heavy evidence Ymir’s story hasn’t fully been told yet. I don’t want to create false hopes for anyone, but until proven otherwise, I don’t think it’s too unreasonable to believe in it.
To cope with VLD s2′s gross lack of Hunk/Lance development, weird pacing, and overall plot holes, here are some episode ideas I thought would be cool to see next season
ep comprised entirely of the four remaining Paladins reminiscing about their
time/favorite or significant memories at the Garrison
talking about the moment they became the iconic trio we know and love + shenanigans
they got up to as students while there (taking school vehicles out for test
drives, lurking in the instructor’s lounge, raiding the commissary for snacks
and sneaking out past curfew to look at stars, etc)
explaining exactly why he dropped out and possibly admitting that, contrary to
popular belief, he enjoyed and/or valued his time there
possible reveal as to how Keith and Shiro knew each other? (*chanting* BROGANES
ep is very feel good, despite Shiro’s absence, with all the characters sharing smiles and getting along
-Towards the end, Lance and Keith finally address their Garrison and
current “rivalry” and where on Earth it came from (more like Keith cornering
Lance and asking him if they could put past animosity behind them and finally
don’t have to ask me that Mullet, we already are. We bonded, remember?” Cue
wink/smooth exit and Keith spontaneously combusting
ends with flashback of the two meeting for the first time/first impressions of
each other (mutual admiration plain as day, that neither of them admit but that
the audience can clearly see)
hear me out this is not just plot device to get them all to dress in formal
Altean clothes (although that aesthetic would be beautiful)
fairly certain that despite Zarkon’s expansive empire, there are still pockets
of space that have been relatively untouched
gang while looking for Shiro, could find an unconquered planet with an alien
race that could serve as a powerful ally in the fight against the empire
said alien race is (intentionally) oblivious to the what’s going on immediately outside
their sphere of influence and feel like they don’t need to get involved (think
Ba Sing Se from ATLA)
the gang try various methods of coercion/bargaining, but its ultimately ya boy
Lance whose natural wit, charm and knack for diplomacy that lead to said planet
finally joining the alliance (because I need more confident Lance letting his
talents shine dammit)
-This would focus
solely on these two characters: Allura training and trying to understand her
newly discovered powers while we the audience follow Haggar as she grapples
with losing Zarkon/getting Lotor ready and witnessing her command in the Galra
Zarkon’s protection she’s not taken as seriously by the other commanders and
their rude disregard for her provoke a demonstration of power (giving the
audience a true gauge of her power and possibly alluding that this is also what
Allura is capable of)
-This could be a
great opportunity to include flashbacks of Altea from both Allura and Haggar
(offering two different perspectives of life there; one in royalty and
happiness while the other not so much)
Matt’s Lost Days
this is the Voltron version of “Appa’s Lost Days” except it features Kerberos
sweetheart, Matt Holt
its Matt’s POV from the moment they were imprisoned by Zarkon until the moment
Pidge sees him in “Escape from Beta Traz” on the security footage feed
LEADER MATT HOLT
seriously, after Shiro took his spot in the gladiator ring, Matt vowed to make
it up to his best friend by undermining Galra facilities however he could (he is
eternally grateful for Pidge’s lessons on computer hacking)
also has that picture of himself and Pidge he carries around with him
ends with him breaking out, and looking up into the vast emptiness of space
with a determined face and a hopeful “I’m coming, Katie”
These are a few general ones I had in mind, while the others are more Klance centric and might follow up in a separate post
Feel free to message me about these or even more ideas, I’m going to be stewing in Vld hell until s3 anyways
You can expect real changes. To me, that’ll be part of the fun of it, putting Clarke and Bellamy back together when Bellamy has been a leader in his own right, if that’s his story, for six years on the Ark. Likewise, Octavia and Bellamy coming back together when she’s been forced to lead in a way that may or may not be something he approves of by the time they come back together. I think it’ll be fascinating and that’s the challenge for us, creatively, to have them feel like the same people, understand how they got that way, perhaps by including some flashback storytelling into the six year time gap, and keeping it fresh moving forward.
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Mikasa meets the cruel world: Attack on Titan in a nutshell
More intelligent people than me have probably pointed this out long before me, but it still amazes me how much Mikasa’s upbringing truly is a metaphor for the entire series.
We start of with this carefree, peaceful family living in this isolated cabin in the woods, distanced from the outside. A comfortable existence, but their family is well aware that beyond their warm home lie problems: the Ackerman clan is still thought to be prosecuted, and Asians are sought by traffickers for their rare appearance and blood–they’re a different race, and this is useful to some.
And then one peace is interrupted: three men break in, destroying comfort and killing innocent people, and they’re there solemnly because of the physical aspects of the family, their rare appearance. Through this experience, Mikasa lost her hope and will to live, and also got to understand the cruel nature of the world she lived in.
And then, a sudden event that changed the course of that day. The young Eren Jaeger barges in, takes out the oppressive intruders, and most importantly, restores hope to her. Just like the kidnappers, Eren came from outside of her world…but instead of bringing her more cruelty, Eren brought Mikasa a way to go against said cruelty–to fight back. The world is cruel and brutal and it crushes the weak–thus, the only way to survive is to fight back against the oppression–and that’s what Mikasa proceeds to do.
This precise event can be translated with total accuracy into the entirety of the story–it’s the exact same thing the walled world went through. The walldians lived in peace and comfort (more or less), isolated from the rest of the world, because the outside meant danger for them. We’ve always known this danger to be the titans–the basement taught us the reality though. The entire outside world has a pre-determined relationship with the walldians–not because of who, but because of what they are. Some see them as danger and want them extinct for safety measures, some see them as useful tools for their own purposes.
Does this sound familiar? Ackermans are prosecuted because they’re a danger to the kings rule, and Asians are sought after because their origin makes them different. Mikasa’s family is a metaphor for all walldians, for all those wanted dead by the world or used as weapons in Marley’s titan army. Their situation is identical too: they live excluded from the outside world, in a pseudo-peace, which is one day interrupted by the arrival of three outsiders (kidnappers, RBA). Through their actions, those outsiders remind the inhabitants of the cruel, oppressive world they find themselves in (a grim reminder). And then, another outsider appears, restoring hope and teaching the oppressed how to free themselves: to fight. This is Eren when he barges into the cabin, and Grisha, originally from beyond the walls. when he entrusts the founding and attack titans to Eren, who would later become humanities hope and, in some way, inspires them to fight back. Both of these stories are perfect parallels.
It’s also definitely not a coincidence that the Eren-saves-Mikasa flashback was included in Isayama’s first draft of chapter 1, in flashback format. All the dialogue about Mikasa being part of a nearly extinct, different race, and Eren telling her to fight back, were there from day one. In the present time she even says that she believes Eren has the strength to overcome the world’s issues and bring hope to mankind–an even stronger parallel between her situation and all of walldia.
Heck, it certainly isn’t a coincidence either that, during ch 14, primordial desire, aka humanities first ever victory against oppression and the first climax of the story, Eren flashes back to that very moment
On one hand it sets up other humans, aka Marley as antagonists, who’re oppressing Paradis due to the blood flowing through its inhabitants. At the same time, it redraws all the parallels mentioned beforehand by straight up comparing humanities struggle to that struggle in the woods.
These two panels really affirm everything I mentioned above–Mikasa’s “origin story” is it’s own microcosm that foretells the entire core struggle of the series: Eldians seeking freedom from oppression. And the fact that such an early scene remains a total metaphor to the story even 90 chapters and a ton of plot twists and revelations later, just goes to show how much of a thought out story attack on titan has been for the longest time.
Anonymous said: i kind of want to rewatch shippuden but only the kakagai moments yknow?? so if its not much trouble could you list ur favorite ones?
HI ANON i’m so sorry, i’ve been sitting on this for ages since ive been in school and wanted to give you a proper answer..
ok since kakashi is technically a supporting character (& gai is a side character) there arent many episodes that are exclusively centered on them.. but since i’ve been collecting footage for amvs anyway, ive made a quick guide of their scenes and moments, starring my favorite ones! (it’s a dash stretcher, sorry if you’re on mobile)