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@juleshawke / juleshawke.tumblr.com

Where you'll find creative bits and pieces from time to time.

WIP whenever

Haven’t been around much of late, too many real life things going on but I was tagged by @vorchagirl​ and @cdrkateshepard​ so thought I’d drop my toes back in the water so to speak.

A short piece from an original novel I’m working on -

“She’s in here somewhere, find her.”

Sara smothered her mouth on her knees, pulling them in closer, her finger nails digging into her arms where they wrapped around her legs. Crying out was not an option. If they found her she was dead.

Just like Ricardo.

She curled up tighter in the hidey hole she’d found while exploring the old, 16th century building that had been renovated into an upper market hotel. Once it might have gone through to the outside, providing an escape, but at some time it had been closed off, probably to prevent drafts from the winds that often blew in from the ocean. Spain had been her dream destination but now it might be the last place on Earth she ever got to see.

Not sure who’s been tagged in this so consider yourself tagged if you’re reading it.

Also the render of Sara that’s pretty much finished -

Mug Tag

Tagged by @mrscullensrutherford and just had to show off my favorite, this awesome one of Kate's boo, JulesHawke's Matt Stokes that @juleshawke made for me.

Tagging @bardofheartdive and Jules if y'all want to. :)

Thanks for the tag and it’s nice to know you’re enjoying having your lips around Stokes lol. Seeing as how you’ve already posted him I’ll post my equal favourite mug - I have all four of my boys on  mugs - but Stokes and Reigler definitely get the most use.

What can I say, I love my boys lol.

Anyone who wants to show off their favourite mug is tagged.

OC

@obvidalous​ tagged me in this and I REALLY made an attempt to do Altea justice but I don’t know how successful I was. 

Here is my Altea Shepard, done using Picrew.

Tagging: @natsora@smolbiotic@cdrkateshepard@oops-gingermoment@myfeyrelady@pikapeppa@fogsblue​ and anyone else who wants to show off their OCs

Thanks! I always love showing off my OCs. And I love Altea!

Let’s go with a new one. Grey Warden and Queen Katheryn Cousland-Theirin.

Tagging @juleshawke for Stokes (of course), @bardofheartdive for Gina, and @natsora for Riley, please. Or any you want to do. ;) No pressure.

Hardly been in here of late but trying to get back in so this is timely. Thanks @cdrkateshepard​ and as requested Matthew Stokes, my OC from my fic Surviving Hell on Earth

Created and rendered in DAZ3D

five male characters I love (sorry but I will be unable to have only 5)

tagged by: @latristereina thank you!

not ranked

1. Okita Souji - Hakuouki (sorry Saito and Kaoru)

2. Son Hak and Jae-Ha - Akatsuki no Yona (sorry all the other dragons)

3. Captain Flint - Black Sails

4. Dimitri and Felix - Fire Emblem Three Houses

5. Jorg Ancrath - The Broken Empire trilogy

1. Sanan Keisuke - Hakuouki

2. Jon Snow - Game of Thrones/A Song of Ice and Fire

3. Liu Kang - Mortal Kombat

4. Finn - Star Wars

5. Jin Kazama - Tekken

Tagging:

1)Cullen Rutherford

2) Martin septim

3) Alistair therin

4) zuko

5) Cole

1)  Cullen Rutherford

2)  Ezio Auditore da Firenze

3)  Alistair Theirin

4)  Sheogorath

5)  Dorian Pavus

Thank you for tagging me @gugle1980 <3 So, let’s see!

  1. Jacob Seed (Far Cry 5)
  2. Geralt of Rivia (The Witcher)
  3. Sonny Carisi (Law & Order: SVU)
  4. Reyes Vidal (Mass Effect Andromeda)
  5. Kaidan Alenko (Mass Effect)

Thank you @starsandskies <3 

  1. Garrus Vakarian-Mass Effect
  2. Emyhr var Emeris-The Witcher
  3. Jaal Ama Darav-Mass Effect Andromeda
  4. Alistair Theirin-Dragon Age Origins
  5. Rian-The Dark Crystal: Age of Resistance 

Thanks @briarfox13 !!!

1. Kaidan Alenko - Mass Effect OT

2. Anders - Dragon Age 2

3. Alistair Theirin - Dragon Age Origins

4. Constantin D'Orsay - Greedfall

5. Jun - Samurai of Hyuga

I tag @occorner @natsora @rngdshep @illusivesoul @bitofpoisononmyblade @bi-retrofuturism and anyone else who wants to do this :)

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Thank you for the tag! @flaine1996 @ainzaphir @rpgwarrior4824 

1. Nathan Drake - Uncharted 2. Joel - The Last of Us 3. Evfra - Mass Effect Andromeda 4. Geralt - The Witcher 5. Krem - Dragon Age Inquisition

In no particular order and by no means comprehensive:

1. Thane Krios—ME Trilogy

2. Liam Kosta—MEA

3. Zevran Arainai—DAO

4. Fenris—DA2

5. Solas—DAI

@cdrkateshepard thanks for the tag, I think everyone I know has already been tagged but if you’re reading this feel free to play along. Other than my own OCs that I’m very much in love with I would include (in no particular order and because I have to stick to 5):

1. Kaidan Alenko - ME

2. Liam Kosta - MEA

3. Captain John Price (Bravo 6) - Call of Duty Modern Warfare 2019

4. Alex (Echo 3-1) - Call of Duty Modern Warfare 2019

5. Jeff ‘Joker’ Moreau - ME

Is it a bad idea to write scenes out of order, especially when I'm not much of a plotter? I have a decent idea of how my story starts and ends, and a vague idea of the middle, but I really don't feel like the beginning is the best place to start. On top of that, would you say that it was a bad idea to stop writing scenes in the middle and come back to it after you've written a few more? I feel like I need to get a better hold on my characters before finishing a few scenes. Thanks for the help!

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Writing Partial Scenes and Writing Scenes Out of Order

Definitely not a bad idea if it’s what works for you. One of the biggest challenges you’ll face as a writer is learning to understand and accept your process. Sometimes that means realizing it’s okay if your process flies in the face of conventional wisdom. All that matters is that it works for you. As long as the scenes get written, it doesn’t matter what order they’re written in or how much of a scene is finished before you put it on the back burner and skip to another scene. :)

————————————————————————————————-Have a question? My inbox is always open, but make sure to check through my FAQ and post master lists first to see if I’ve already answered a similar question. :)

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Welcome to Australia...

Where an already endangered species is on the brink of functional extinction...

Oh, and 500 million animals unique to this country have already lost their lives, upon homes that have been destoryed and lives lost of people as well...

I mean... we're only living in a literal inferno...

415 fires. Fuck are we dying...

Oh yeah and people are just fleeing to the damn ocean, you know?

Do you want to know what Hell on Earth looks like..?

Because there it is in all it's unfiltered, firey rage...

There it is... my home from space...

This is only the beginning. Our country has not only entered a new decade, it seems a new dawning era as well, because this flaming apocalypse doesn't show any sign of stopping any time soon.

And you know what saddens me? I've never seen Australian tragedies trending here on this website. I mean it's been going on for months and only now does it seem to really be getting recognized, even if it is only at #9.

And I'm going to be honest with you here - the internet, and media in general is so American centric, this website being no exception. You'd think that an entire continent being on fire for several months with devastating consequences would have more recognition, but no, it really doesn't. The most notes I've ever seen on a post about the Australian fires is at least a few thousand, and that's about it.

So just... please. If you can, with this post or any other post in regards to the fires going on down here, reblog. Because the only thing that should be spreading like wildfire, is a post about a burning country...

With thousands fleeing the south coast before Sat when conditions are expected to worsen. Our fire fighters are exhausted, some dying, over 4 million hectares destroyed - want to know just how much that is - https://www.theguardian.com/australia-news/datablog/ng-interactive/2019/dec/07/how-big-are-the-fires-burning-on-the-east-coast-of-australia-interactive-map

1200 homes so far and still rising. Many places have run out of water due to the drought, resources are stretched thin.

And yet no-one seems to know outside of this country, except probably New Zealanders as they’re covered in our smoke too and those friends who know because we told them.

So yeah, it’s about time the world learned about the apocalypse that’s happening down under.

Fic updates

For those of you still following along I have finally managed to update my fics. Unfortunately AO3 doesn’t show the tumblr share button - hasn’t for a while so links are my only option.

Surviving Hell On Earth - final chapter and epilogue.

Hope you enjoy.

Hope everyone has a wonderful Christmas and New Year. And to those in Australia dealing with bushfires - we’re caught between two of the largest - stay safe.

It’s the hols, y’all!

I’m feeling very much in the giving spirit lately, so I decided this would be a fun time to run a giveaway! The winner will receive a custom bust portrait of the character of their choice.

But wait, there’s a catch…

You can’t win this for yourself. 

In order to enter, you must reblog and tag someone else you wish to nominate for an entry. Maybe there’s that mutual who’s always liking and reblogging your work with super sweet tags, or maybe someone surprised you with a fic or a piece of art recently and you’d like to do something kind in return. Or maybe you just know of someone who could use a little extra cheer this month. This is your chance to share some fandom love with them!

Rules:

  1. 1 reblog = 1 entry. For the purposes of this giveaway, likes will not count as entries. (Because you can’t tag someone in a like.)
  2. Tag as many folks as you like! Each tag will enter that person into the drawing.
  3. Reblogs without any tags don’t count, as you can’t win for yourself.
  4. Subsequent tags won’t enter someone twice. It’s gonna be hard enough to type all these names into a spreadsheet once! (But even if you think someone might have already been tagged, you can still do it–it’s always nice to know someone was thinking of you!)
  5. The winner will be chosen and announced on December 26th. They will receive a digital piece of art featuring a bust illustration of the character of their choice on a transparent or solid background.

What I will draw: 

  • Original and canon characters - I’m most familiar with the Dragon Age, Mass Effect, and Harry Potter fandoms, but I can also draw your D&D Character or an OC from another fandom, as long as they’re mostly humanoid and you can give me plenty of info and references! (Piercings and tattoos are welcome as long as they aren’t super intricate.)
  • Humans, elves, qunari, dwarves, goblins, tieflings, etc. are all on the table!

What I won’t draw this time:

  • Mech and/or furry characters. I’m just not great at them, TBH.
  • Complicated outfits/armor. The finished piece will be a bust, so I’ll do whatever is visible from the shoulders up if you want clothing and jewelry included, but it should be fairly simple.
  • Animals. They take more time, and I need more practice at them to really feel good about doing them for other people.

Happy holidays and good luck to everyone!

What a sweet idea for a giveaway!

Right back at my baby @alyssalenko and adding @juleshawke @starsandskies @outranks @seedsplease @johnathot-seed. I hope any of you babies will win!!

Aw, so nice of you to think of me @naromoreau and here’s hoping you or @vorchagirl @cdrkateshepard @shotce @bardofheartdive @alyssalenko wins this wonderful prize.

anyway most writing advice is frequently contradictory to other writing advice you might receive from people who have just as much/more writing ~expertise~ and a lot of writing advice is just flat-out terrible even if it’s coming from an ~expert~ so if you’re a writer consider this post a reminder that

  • writing advice that comes up on your dash should be looked at as tips you can choose to follow or discard as it suits you, not hardline rules you MUST abide by or else you’re a ‘bad writer’
  • you’re allowed to look at a piece of writing advice and say, “wow, that’s a shit idea and i don’t want write like that” and forget about it – even if the post has thousands of notes full of other people agreeing with it
  • there is no One True Right Way to write, your writing does not have to be just like everyone else’s – if all stories were written the same way and with the same style, reading would be a much more boring thing to do
  • if you try to write in a way that pleases everyone, you will fail because pleasing everyone is not possible – your own satisfaction with your work, your own desire to write a story, and your own enjoyment of writing are more important than that

And if you see a piece of writing advice you disagree with, it costs you zero dollars to ignore it and go about your day, rather than harassing the OP for sharing advice they hoped would help someone.

Give a bored human a screwdriver and you’ll find a pile of scrap where your ship used to be, with a proud looking human sitting nearby. 

“Boredom is a dangerous thing to a human.” 

“I don’t understand,” Chuul’s mandibles clicked nervously, “why not simply take the tool from the human.” 

Minxx’s antennae stood straight up, a sign of shock, fear, or surprise, “You don’t simply take something from a human. If you do they will either turn the ship upside down trying to find it again, or they will replace it with something else that will lead to more destruction.

“I speak quite literally by the way. Human-Mark used to have a tool he called an “Hex Key” he used it to remove the doors to the clothing storage areas in his quarters because he was bored. When he lost it he literally turned the ship upside down by reversing the gravity.” 

Chuul’s tentacles curled up defensively, “Gravity controls are locked, how-”

“No one knows how.” Minxx shook her small wings as the memory of suddenly falling upwards returned to her. “but his reasoning was that the tool would fall out of whatever hiding place it had come to rest within. He had not considered that all tables, chairs, equipment, and personnel, would also fall. It took weeks to clean.” 

To be fair to the human, Mark had only intended to reverse the gravity in his own quarters but had, quote, “pushed the wrong button.” A sentence which would send fear through any intelligent creature in the known galaxy. To be completely unfair to the human, there were still stains on the ceiling in almost every room of the ship from dropped food, chemicals, various other liquids, and even a couple of empty bowels. Some races just didn’t find the idea of resting comfortably in their sleeping quarters, only to be suddenly awakened as they fell ten feet toward a ceiling which had now become a floor. Mark was no longer allowed near environmental controls. 

Minxx continued, “He did not find this “Hex Key.” However, he did find the screwdriver and it seemed to please him when an owner was not located. The captain let him keep it since it seemed that it would keep him from doing any more strange things to locate his original lost tool. We did not consider-” she trailed off as her wings quivered again. 

There was silence between them for a few moments, Minxx was almost unwilling to continue and Chuul was almost too afraid to press for more details. Slowly, but surely, Minxx calmed herself enough to speak again. “we did not consider what he may be able to do when armed with a leverage optimiser.” 

“We were given shore leave while the ship was being fixed after the gravity incident. Thank goodness the captain took out act’s-of-human insurance or it would have cost the profits from our next five cargo hauls.” The premiums were high, but it was worth it. “After 14 rotations, human-Mark began to complain over the lack of stimulation, he called it “bored.” On the 15th rotation he disappeared for some time and he had hoped he had found some new activity to occupy his time.” 

Chuul did, but at the same time didn’t, want to know, “Had he?” 

Minxx waved her antennae in confirmation, “he had. He was located in one of the cargo holds, using the screwdriver to dismantle one of the mining probes. To, quote “see how it worked.” It was almost 90% deconstructed.” 

Mark had claimed it was almost 10% REconstructed, as he was trying to put it back together again, but couldn’t quite remember where all the parts went. In Mark’s words, the captain was a “glass half-empty kinda guy” (whatever that meant) and wrote DEconstructed on the claim form for a replacement probe. 

Chuul’s natural camouflage kicked in and they took on the colour of the chair they were sitting on. “Those probes have no screws for the leverage optimiser to use, how did he-” 

Minxx’s wings shivered again, “no one knows how. He just did.” 

Chuul was silent for a moment. He’d never served on a ship with a human before. He’d heard they made things “interesting” and if you ever got into trouble, a human was the very best thing to ever have on your side. It was why they were so many job opportunities for humans in the alliance. All the same…the thought of a human causing such damage and destruction just because of a lack of mental, or physical, stimulation was a more than a little frightening. What if the human wanted to see how the engines worked, or the weapons?!!  “Maybe I should transfer to another ship.” 

Minxx’s antennae curled, a smile to her race. “You are safe. The captain has found a way to occupy our humans free time. During our last stopover, he commissioned a shiny orb be constructed.” 

Chuul coked their head, “what is a shiny orb?” 

Minxx’s curled antennae moved up an down; a sign of mild laughter. “It is nothing. A sphere made of shiny metals, humans do like shiny things, roughly two feet diameter made of a collection of gears, levers, screws and switches which appear complex and should have a function, but do entirely nothing. The captain handed it to Human-Mark and stated: “see if you can fix this.” and Mark has been “tinkering” with it during his off-duty hours for almost 24 rotations now. He can take it apart and rebuild it as many times as he likes, but it will never perform any task.”

Chuul was just thinking about how their captain must be a genius, when the door to the mess hall opened and Human-Mark entered. He was carrying the shiny orb under one arm, and his screwdriver in the other hand. He looked around, seemingly not noticing any of the crew members. He smiled when he spotted an empty liquid container and sat down at the table with the cup. 

Chuul and Minxx watched curiously as Mark set the orb on the table in front of the cup. He used the screwdriver to tighten one small screw and flipped a switch. At once there was a whirring and clicking of clockwork, a blinking of lights hidden in the depths of the machine and even a TING from a small bell. Then a small funnel-shaped piece of metal opened up in the side of the machine and poured a small amount of hot, black, liquid into the cup.

Mark jumped to his feet, pumping the air and yelling loudly enough to send Chuul’s camouflage reflex off again. He grabbed the orb, abandoning the cup of steaming hot liquid, and moved to the door. 

Minxx stared after them, “Human-Mark?” 

Mark only paused for a second in the doorway. He was prominently displaying his predatory teeth. Chuul had read about these “smiles” but it was still disturbing to see. “Can’t stop Minxy. I gotta let the captain know I fixed his coffee maker.” 

With that, he left. Leaving Chuul and Minxx frozen in place, dumbfounded. 

Wherever Chuul was going to transfer to, Minxx began to hope she could get a posting on the same ship. 

Anonymous asked:

Any advice on how to write a heist story something like oceans Eleven?

Well, you can start by watching Ocean’s Eleven, and Ocean’s Eleven, and then Leverage, and then Burn Notice, and then The A-Team, and then Mission: Impossible, and then all the other heist stories like The Italian Job or Heat. Watch, read, uncover as many stories about criminals as you can from fiction to nonfiction to reading security analyst blogs. Read the spy memoirs, the thief memoirs, the fake ones and the real ones. Check out magicians, hypnotists, card tricks, and sleight of hand. Watch the making ofs and director’s commentaries looking for clues behind the thought process of these stories. The hows and the whys as you look into the research they did. Burn Notice, for example, is famous for using stunt props and technological rigs that work in real life. Like using cell phones to create cheap bugs on the go.

The worlds of criminal fiction and spy fiction rely on being able to present (or convincingly fake) a world which feels real. A heist is all about exploitation. So, you need a world with security structures to exploit. You’ve got to know how things work before you can craft a way to break them. Social engineering, hacking, and every other criminal skill is about breaking the systems in place. So, you’ve got to get a baseline for how law enforcement and security analysts work. What security systems are set up to look like. The ways we go about discouraging thieves. Better yet how people behave. Real, honest to god human behavior.

So, you know, pick somewhere in order to start your research. Get an idea of what you want write about stealing, then learn everything about the object, the museum, the city, the country, and its customs as you can.

If you’re setting a heist in a futuristic or fantasy setting then luck you, you get to make all of it up.

Learning the plot structure and conventions of the heist genre is the first step. This means watching lots and lots of heist movies, shows, and reading books. Over time, as you become better at critical analysis, you’ll begin to see specific story structures and character archetypes emerge.

The Heist Story is a genre. Like every other genre, it comes with its own structure, cliches, archetypes, plots, and genre conventions which necessitate the narrative. The better grasp you have of those, the better you’ll be at writing a heist.

For example, a heist story like Ocean’s Eleven relies on a collection of thieves rather than a single individual. The character types are as follows:

The Pointman - Your planner, strategist, team leader, and the Jack of All Trades. Can also be called the Mastermind. They’re the one who can take the place of anyone on the team should they fall through. They’re not as good as a specialist, but they’re very flexible. Narratively, he plans the cons and subs in where he’s needed.

The Faceman - Your experienced Grifter, here for all your social engineering needs. These guys talk their way in.

The Infiltrator - Your cat burglar or break-in artist. Basically, the conventional genre thief. Your Parker, Catwoman, Sam Fisher, or Solid Snake. The stealth bastards, they’re all about silent in, out, and playing acrobatic games with the lasers.

The Hacker - The electronics and demolitions specialist. Usually this is the guy in the van overseeing stuff remotely. Your Eye in the Sky. Their skill set can be split up and swapped around as necessary.

The Muscle - The one who is good at fighting. They’re combat focused characters, usually with mercenary and special forces backgrounds. Though, that’s optional.

The Wheelman - The one who handles the getaway. They’re your often overlooked transport specialists. It’s not just that they can drive, they’re skilled at getting lots of people around, figuring out how to move your valuables, and exiting hostile cities or countries undetected. They get the team in and they get them out.

For an example of these archetypes, I’m going to use Leverage. Nathan Ford, The Pointman (technically, he’s written like a Faceman). Sophie Devereaux , The Faceman. Parker, the Infiltrator. Hardison, the Hacker. Eliot, the Muscle. They all take turns being the Wheelman.

Other examples like Burn Notice: Michael Westen, the Pointman. Sam Axe, the Faceman. Fiona, the Muscle. They all take turns with explosives, Michael will invariably take all the roles during the course of the show.

Ocean’s Eleven has multiple variants of these archetypes, all broken down and mixed up.

You can mix and match these qualities into different individuals or break them apart like in Ocean’s Eleven, and more than one character can fill more than one role, but that’s the basic breakdown. For example, your hacker doesn’t need to be a guy in a van overlooking the whole security grid. One guy or girl with a cell phone can sit in the lobby of a building with an unsecured wireless network and crack the security. Welcome to the 21st century. The skills don’t necessarily need to take the specific expected shape.

What you do need is the basic breakdown:  You need someone to plan the con, you need someone to be your face or grifter, you need someone to break in, you need someone to watch the security/electronics, you need muscle to back you up, and someone’s got to cover the getaway.

These shift depending on your plan, but this is the expected lineup for a heist narrative. The first step of a heist narrative is not the plan because we don’t have one yet. We’ve got an idea. Pick your target. Maybe it’s a famous painting. Maybe it’s a casino. Maybe it’s a rare artifact from a private investor’s collection loaned to a museum for a short period of time. Maybe it’s art stolen by the Nazis during WWII. Whatever it is, figure it out.

The next step is simple. If you want the thing, you’ve got to find a way to get it. This is a big job, your standard thief won’t be able to pull it off alone. So, you gotta go recruiting. Get your team together. Make sure to establish the goals of the different members for joining. Who they are. Their pedigree. One might be an old flame or an old enemy. This is where we lay out some character driven subplots.

When everyone’s together, we’ve got to lay out the plan. Before we have a plan though, we need to establish where the object is and the issues in getting it. Why this has never been done before. So, what are the challenges? Invariably, an object worth a great deal of money will have a lot of security protecting it. Figure out what that security is, who the item belongs to, what sort of retribution do the thieves face beyond what they might expect. Lasers, pressure plates, cameras, security, other career criminals, mob bosses, the rich and powerful, whatever.

After that: How do you get it? Then you’ve got to plan the con, while taking everything into account.

Then, We prep the Con. There will be steps to take before the con can be put into place, your characters taking their positions in plain sight. Stealing whatever pieces you need to make it work. Casing the joint. Etc.

Then: Run the Con. This is the part with the actual stealing. Better known as the first attempt. Things go well, there may be a few mistakes, but things are going well and then we…

Encounter Resistance. While running the con, something goes wrong, pieces fall apart, the thieves come close to success but the object gets moved and they suddenly need a new plan. New information may pop up, it may be one of your artists was running a con of their own separate from the rest. If there’s a double cross in the works then this may be when and where it lands.

We’re ready now, so it’s time hit up: Steal the Thing, Round Two. Your characters put their new plan into play and get about thieving the object of their desire.

Lastly: The Get Away. This is the part where your thieves make for the hills with their stolen treasure. This can be short or long depending on the kind of story you’re telling and other double crosses may occur here. It could be the end of the story or the beginning of a new heist.

Heist stories are like mystery novels. They’re all about sleight of hand and misdirection. You’ve got to keep just enough information on the table to keep your audience on the hook, and just enough information off the table to surprise them later on the twist. Yet, when they go back to re-read the novel again, they’ll find the answer was there all along. They just didn’t see it coming.

If anything, learning how to write a well-done heist or a mystery or any kind of novel in this genre will teach you a lot about how to manage your foreshadowing and create superb plot twists. Like any good con, you need to lay out all the conflicting pieces where people can see them, let them draw their own conclusions, withhold the critical context, and then hit them with the whammy.

Like lots of audiences, new writers (and even some old ones) can get distracted by the shock and awe. They see they’re impressed by the conclusion, not the lay-up. If you want to write any kind of fiction, you need to learn to see past the curtain and pay attention to the critical pieces leading into an important moment rather than the moment itself.

Good writing isn’t modular, you can’t just strip out pieces and run with them because you’ll end up missing the crucial, sometimes innocuous pieces that ensured the scene worked. Like the Victorian Hand Touch, every moment between the two leads and most of their scenes with secondary players are working for that singular instance of eventual, gleeful catharsis.

If you’ve got a plot twist coming in your novel, every sentence from the second you start writing is working towards it. You start laying out your pieces, funneling in your tricks, and playing with misdirection. You may have multiple twists, to cover yourself, divert your audience, congratulate them for successfully guessing your ploy, and reassure their initial suspicions before catching them again on the upswing.

The clever writer is as much a con artist as their characters. The only difference is the target of their con is their audience. The tricks in their bag are narrative ones, and they work with the understanding that it doesn’t matter if someone guesses the end so long as they’re entertained by the journey. A great story stays entertaining long after the audience has figured out all the twists.

So, don’t get caught up in Red Herrings and frightened about not being able to outsmart other people. Tell a good story with conviction and heart about a bunch of crooks out to steal their heart’s desire.

That’s all there is to it.

-Michi

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You’ve waited long enough to see Alex and Caleb again, haven’t you? The worlds of Aurora Rhapsody and Asterion Noir will collide in CONTINUUM (Riven Worlds Book One) on JANUARY 8, 2020.

Humanity has seized its destiny among the stars. But space remains vast and untamed, and nothing has prepared us to face the dangers rising from the deep shadows of the void.

Fourteen years after The Displacement flung humanity into a universe teeming with alien life, a tenuous alliance has taken root among humans, Anadens, and numerous other species. The wounds of war and revolution have begun to heal, peace and prosperity are within reach, and the architects of The Displacement, Alex Solovy and Caleb Marano, are enjoying an idyllic existence on the living planet of Akeso.

But growing troubles fester beneath the surface of this alliance. An upstart species offers allegiance with one hand but readies weapons of mass destruction with the other, while the Anadens, leaderless and adrift for years, increasingly refuse to play by humanity’s rules.

As tensions simmer, Nika Kirumase, leader of the Asterions—a splinter group of former Anadens thought aeons dead—arrives bearing a warning of a terrifying enemy advancing across the void. Known as the Rasu, the powerful race of shapeshifting metal has already killed tens of thousands of Asterions in its quest to control all of known space.

Nika’s people have struck a blow against the Rasu, and now they race against time to prepare for the coming reprisal. An alliance with humanity stands to give them a fighting chance against their enemy. But for humanity, such an alliance may cost them everything, pushing the fragile peace they fought so hard to achieve to the breaking point and beyond.

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In Amaranthe, where exotic alien life, AIs, wormholes, indestructible starships and the promise of immortality rule the day, no feat seems out of reach for humanity. But when the worlds of Aurora Rhapsody and Asterion Noir collide and the Rasu horde descends upon them both, more will be asked of heroes past and future. More will be given and more taken, and when the dust settles the very fabric of Amaranthe will be changed forever.

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Legit Tip #187

or - “Creating a More Organic Flow in Your Storytelling”

Let’s say you’re writing a paper, and you want to connect point A in history to point B. To explain how those two points are connected, you would need to focus keenly on the flow of that essay, showing how events throughout time led from one thing to another. 

You want - no, need - this kind of organic flow in your storytelling as well. Practically speaking, it keeps readers from wondering - “Wait, how did we end up here?” But even beyond that, it keeps things moving. It keeps the action going. It keeps your reader’s eyes moving across the page. 

And for you, as a writer, knowing how to use flow to your advantage keeps you writing. I’m not saying it’s a magical end-all and be-all for writer’s block, but learning how flow in storytelling works can do a lot to keep you moving when you know what’s coming next and all you need is to get there.

So, an important question - 

What are common storytelling roadblocks?

That is, what are the types of thing that stop the flow of stories? That break up the action and stop readers in their tracks when they come across them? Here are a few to consider.

1. Epiphanies

Yeah, okay. Characters suddenly realize things sometimes. That’s grand. But when characters have epiphanies out of nowhere, with nothing leading up to it, readers are left with a whole lot of “What?” 

Amateur writers use the method of “Suddenly she realized…” a lot when they need something to happen. It gives the character new information without the writer having to go through the trouble of delivering the information through other means. 

2. Time and Place Changes

Okay, bear with me. Changes in time and place are necessary for any story. But it interrupts the flow of a story badly when these transitions aren’t handled well, even from scene to scene or chapter to chapter. As you open in a new time or place, go through the effort to reestablish what put your characters in this position, why they’re here, etc. 

Or, and this is an important “or”, drop hints, foreshadow, etc., in the text beforehand to keep the flow going. Allow for some sense of connection. This is most important when time and place changes within a scene, but can still be useful to remember in other contexts.

3. Mood Shifts

I’m not talking about a specific character’s mood shifting. I’m talking about mood shifts within scenes - i.e., the way a scene changes when something happens and people react to it. The flow can be severely interrupted if a writer doesn’t take the time to flow into the “new” mood. Take a death scene, for example. 

In the middle of a battle, Character A is suddenly stricken down while his friends and family watch. Do things become instantly sad? Probably not, if people are still fighting. The writer needs to proceed with caution. Take time to let the impact settle in. Let the characters finish what must be done (as in, finish the fight.) Then they can gather around the fallen. Then the narrator can let the mood shift to a more somber tone. From fast-paced to frozen-in-time shock to sadness rather than immediately to sadness. That’s how flow works in instances like these. 

There are plenty more roadblocks. Think about anything that can disrupt a story’s pacing. Look for these words - 

  • Suddenly
  • Immediately
  • At once
  • He/she “realized”
  • Etc.

I’m not saying these immediately indicate bad flow. But look around them and you might notice places where you can build on the story to create better flow. 

Let’s get back to the idea of the character epiphany, for example. 

“She realized he had been lying to her.”

Right. So… how did she realize this? What did she remember? What did she sense about the way he’s speaking to her now? How does she feel having this realization? 

There is so much you can do to connect the thing that causes the realization to her having the epiphany that there’s no need to simply drop that bomb. 

So there you have it. I hope that this helps give you some ideas on what you can do to improve the flow in your own storytelling!

One thing I love about The Expanse is it allows Chrisjen to be arrogant.

And she’s not a villain or evil for it.

The show doesn’t feel like she needs to be taken down or have to pay for it.

She has set backs and she learns, but she’s still so fucking gloriously arrogant.

THIS THIS THIS THIS THIS

Like, this woman proves herself to be the most powerful person in the solar system. And she did not fucking get there by rolling over and being polite about shit. She is a cold bitch and she does what is fucking necessary to get shit done. And it is SO GLORIOUS. 

Of course she’s fucking arrogant! She’s deserves it. She’s EARNED it. 

But it is just SO rare to see that in a female character without seeing her getting punished for it. It just makes me so happy to see. I love her so much.