So i’m working on another novel. Any input, criticism or notes would be greatly appreciated. I’m tryin’ to go for a darker take of a fairy tale… kind of turning the tropes on their heads (though it definitely starts off in a very stereotypical fairy tale way.) Lemme know friends!!!!
Prologue
When she was growing up, fairytales had been a game: castles and princesses and sword fights. The tall grass that surrounded their ranch made for flimsy turrets, swaying with the breeze, but providing enough cover not be seen. They would push the grass down until it was flat, and sit cross-legged, claiming the land as their new makeshift castle. They brought imaginary teacups to their lips as they sipped imaginary tea and giggled at the prospect of a prince. Then Aldric would come barreling through the brush, wooden sword in hand and a war cry on his tongue. Emmy and Cicely would yelp and grab their twigs and swing.
As Emmy grew older than her twin cousins, she would read to them instead, of queens and dragons and far off lands. She had no more time for castles made of grass and swords made of twigs; there were animals to feed and horses to brush. There were errands to run and tutoring sessions to attend. The little ones would join in her chores soon enough, as Aldric had already begun to feed the pigs when she requested, as the mud and dung clung to her shoes when she went into town and the store keeps would shoo her out for the smell.
At twenty, the fairytales had fallen away from memory. Cecily and Aldric were fifteen now, old enough to read to themselves, and old enough to help with the chores. She’d finally shaken herself from the tutoring sessions, and instead used her free time to ride her horse into the valley. There was a lake she particularly liked, something about it felt otherworldly. She had once dreamt a woman with long, white hair down to her knees had emerged from the water and laid a sword at her feet, and though Emmy no longer believed in fairytales, she couldn’t shake the magical feeling the lake gave her. It became her personal little oasis from reality. A reality of mud, dirt, and horrible stenches.
So, when a boy arrived at their ranch in the middle of a hot summer night, Emmy did not venture to think he had brought a fairytale with him.
She did not venture to think he had brought her fairytale with him.
Nor did she think her fairytale, of castles and kings and sword fights, would not be a fairytale at all.