??? | eh | i’d read the back cover | interesting! | take my money
The idea of a “Master Bottler of light magic” makes me so happy. I think because it reminds me of the Wishmonger from Daughter of Smoke and Bone. I mean that in the way that it’s a very fresh take on magic and very unique. And that hint in there about an “impossible magic” with no other clarification is intriguing.
That last sentence is so packed full of inspiration, I am impressed. But I had to read it a few times to really grasp everything that’s going on, and I still have one question. I love the phrase “23-year-dead,” but I’m not sure what it refers to. At first I thought you were saying he became Baron Sinister of Thieves and a 23-year-dead problem, but now I think you must be saying he has to face an old rival and a 23-year-dead problem. If you can find a way to rework that for clarity, I would—but if not you may just want to cut that phrase (which makes me sad because I really like it).
Alternately, you may want to consider cutting the part about his illness and fever dreams. I’m not sure that it adds critical info to the pitch, although it does add good info, you know what I mean? If you didn’t have only 50 words, then I would say throw it in, but since you do only have 50 words, I don’t see that it is strictly necessary.
Then again, the only time you’re going to have only 50 words to pitch your book is here on this blog, so that will likely never apply again. Unless you do one of those twitter pitches. Those things scare me, man.
Overall, yes, good. As always.