Okay, so it’s an interesting origin story, take 5 points. You seem to me a villain to begin with, yet I feel more sympathy for you as you weave your tale, and so for the anti-hero aspect I’ll give you 3 points. You’ve given your world a gritty realism and aren’t a superhero in the traditional sense, so I like that, and I can see this story going somewhere, so 3 points for that. I like your friends, but you could have perhaps gone into more detail on Ben’s powers, and more in depth with the group, although I know it was very in depth already, but I feel I am understanding this world, and want to keep going deeper. I want to read this, want to watch it unfold. So 4 points for gripping me.